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II - Perfectly Wrong with Me


   
CalmDeniseWrites

Ratings : 7/10
  

Cover : The cover is pretty basic and ordinary with the vibe of mystery. Check out for the fonts though! Overall good.
 

 
 

Title : Title is great and fits perfectly fine with the story. It is catchy and easy to remember. I'm happy that you've given a good thought to name it. So a perfect score for the title!
 

 
  

Plot : Now comes the main part which I'll cut briefly with all the basics needed to be mentioned.

First is summary which I felt is quite good. Short and vivid summary with details as needed and the extract from the story. Not bad!

And now comes the story. A typical romance of forceful marriage contract with mafia or tycoon. Narration is good but lacks description. For example : the scene of a man Diana sees lying on pool of blood, the moment she was kidnapped, etc...

Try adding some unique flavour of your own to make the book different even having the same typical chaotic mafia life. I hope to see some surprises in the story since it's yet to fully bloom with just few chapters by now. So goodluck with that:)
 

  
  

Character : Now comes another important aspect of the book. Character description is neat which I love.

Diana feels matured and sometimes silly at times making her more humane and connectable. But her fearless attitude when being kidnapped feels odd because even a devil fears when being in such situation. But overall good with the hint of mysterious background and abusive past.

Now comes Dante, lover of Money. He is down-to-earth which is unreal as a mafia character. Other than that, everything is fine .


 

Grammar & Syntax :  The paragraphs and sentences have got the perfect length which makes the story thoroughly clean and enjoyable.

But you need to do some work with the grammar which is not bad actually other than the transition of tenses throughout from past to present without warning. Otherwise the story is flawless to read throughout the story.
   
 

 

Overall : Overall a good story-telling with potential if little more effort is invested in grammar and uniqueness. Great choice of title perfectly fitting the story with a hint of mystery. Keep it up!👍


  
  

  

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