Author: @whiteflash_027 

I'm going to start of by saying that I like to be totally honest in my reviews as I feel that it's the only way to actually help authors. I don't sugarcoat anything because that's not a review,  it flattery. With that said, when I started reading your book, the first thing I thought was, " This is different!".

Cover, Title and Blurb:

Your cover and title are great! Simple yet eye-catching, they are perfect for your story. However, although your blurb is okay, I feel like it can be improved. It's a little long and doesn't really tell the reader exactly what they can expect from the book. Also it makes the book seem like a typical teen fiction book, though I feel it has the potential to be much more. 

Grammar: 

I was wondering if English is your first language? It's not that you write badly (you write really well actually!), it's just that your story does have a few grammar mistakes as well as small sentence structure issues. The mistakes aren't that noticeable and I only found them because I was looking for them. Some of the mistakes in sentence structure do break up the flow of the story. I think you should read over your chapters as it helps to find mistakes. I get that when you're writing, many times typos appear. It happen to me all the time. So I think the best thing is to read over the story and see if it's alright and whether the sentences are making sense or not. Other than this I think you're doing pretty well in this section so great job👍! Just fix the minor mistakes and you'll be perfect :)

Flow:

This is where I feel you have the most problems. It is the only section that I feel caused your book not to be immediately fantastic. While your plot is good, it's moving at too fast a pace. For example in the second chapter, Anya reaches America and in the same paragraph (literally in the next few sentences), it's suddenly her third day there! It really confused me for a second. If you read over that part, I think you'll get what I mean. All in all, I think that the story is moving a little too fast and that spoils reading the story a little. It just seems a bit rushed ( I hope you'll get what I mean as I don't know how else to explain it 😕)

Characters:

Your characters are great! I really like Anya and her sarcastic yet adorable attitude! Her name is really pretty too and I don't know why but it just seems to fit her personality! So great job in choosing the perfect name for her. 

Ryan (or Rye-rye 😉) and Veronica are super cool as well! I don't know why but Veronica always seemed to me to be a typical mean girl name (sorry to all Veronica's out there! No offense meant 😊). However, it just adore Ver's vibrant loveable personality. She's the perfect bestie for Anya.

Overall, you've done an amazing job with your characters!👍❤

Other Thoughts:

So my foremost thought, when I read your book, was that I loved it's uniqueness! It's different from the usual teen fiction stories in the sense that your main character is Indian! I love how throughout the story you keep refering to various parts of Indian culture! It really shows how the book celebrates diversity!

(For anyone who hasn't read this story, the next paragraph is a spoiler. Please don't read it as it'll spoil one of the best surprises of the book)

I also liked how at first you seemed to suggest that Kat was the mean girl of this story. I was so sure that was the case. Like Anya, I was preparing myself for the oncoming typical "stay away from him" rant. When she turned out to be Ryan's sister I was really stunned! So good job on that!

One thing that I would like to say it that I didn't find the first chapter gripping at all. I feel like you should add a little more to it and find a way of making it a little more hooking. The first chapter is really important in deciding whether the reader will read on or not. Your first chapter reslly does not do your story justice.

That said, I like how later on you introduce some mystery about Anya's past. It's pretty obvious something traumatic happened to her in India and the fact that it might have something to do with a previous boyfriend. I love how although you keep hinting at it, you havent revealed anything yet. It increase suspense and keeps the reader reading on. Im still trying to figure out if there really was a intruder in her apartment or if it was just a nightmare!

I will add just one other of my thoughts here. This story is a little cliche with the whole Anya and Ryan relationship as well as their two best friends liking each other. However, I do understand that most teen fiction books have a typical storyline so I don't think you need to worry to much over this. It would be nice though if you try to switch things up a little (like you already have by having an Indian main character!).

Advice:

My advice would be to just re-read your story thourghly and see how well it's flowing. Also if possible try to tweak your summary and first chapter a little in order to make them slightly more intriguing! Otherwise, I think you're doing pretty well!

Overall, I think your book has some serious potential, especially due to its diversity! I recommend your book to anyone who wants to read something different than the usual teen fiction books out there!

I wish you all the luck in the world with this book, I know it's going to be great! I'm really interested in seeing where this book goes so I'll be sure to keep reading!👍❤                                                                                          -Rose