Story Title: SHIVANI
By: bimaia

Title/Cover:
Maganda yung title mo na match din sa book cover. Maiidentify mo agad na fantasy yung story. Nakakakuha din ng attention yung cover.

Blurb/Description:

Description mo palang maganda na, paano pa kaya yung content ng story diba? Maganda yung nagtanong ka sa blurb mo kasi mapapaisip talaga yung makakabasa nun. Mahihikayat silang basahin.

Content:

Napawow mo ako sa intro ng story mo. Ang galing ng pagkakaconstruct mo. Ang galing ng pagkakanarrate.

Cliche na yung chapter one mo, madami na akong nabasang ganon ang start. May war, kailangan itakas yung isang tauhan pero bawi naman sa next chapter though maikli lang. Dapat mong habaan yung update mo kasi nakakabitin sa reader yun.

Konti lang nakita kong errors which is good pero alam kong may mas igagaling ka pa.

Characterization / Technicalities

Magaling kang maghandle ng character, feel na feel ko yung determination sa character mo. May words of wisdom din na isa sa important sa story.

Overall Impression:

9/10. Magaling ka pero hindi ako magbibigay ng 10 kasi alam kong may mas igagaling ka pa.

- aeliyaaah

Get ready axlness   for the extra critique...

Title/Cover
•The title, for me, it seems catchy for a title for a genre of fantasy. And the cover, I saw that it was made by someone else, but still, the cover was eye-catching so, great job.

Blurb/Description
•The description was nicely done! I didn't expect it would be that breath-taking. I hope you keep the good work!

Content
•I was amazed by how you started the story. I know the story would turn out we'll and for the other typographical errors, please edit it if you have time.

; Pacing
•The story was properly written. Not too fast and not too slow.

; Flow
•The flow of the story, you can surely go with it. I'm sure every readers would be satisfied with what you have written so keep it up!

; Uniqueness/Clicheness
•Although there are some parts that are already familiar with me, you still made it look like it's not. You made it feel like it's new. I believe that your story is unique in your own way.

Characterisation and Technicalities
•I'm also amazed by how you described the characters. How they feel and what they are saying. Normally, I would be confused by the dialogues but you proved me wrong.

Overall Impression
•I'll give you a 9 for an outstanding story. Your story will surely be awaited by the readers.

-axlness