🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title fits the story and attracts readers. It's also capitalized correctly. The cover is pretty and definitely attracts readers to the story. It is a little dark though and hard to see some of the elements and read some of the text. The blurb introduces the plot and characters very well. It draws readers in and makes them want to read the story.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story was very engaging and draws readers in. The mystery of Lysa's disappearance and what's lurking in the Æscford woods is intriguing. The plot is progressing at a very nice pace. The exposition introduces the characters, their situations, and the world very well. It's clear a lot of thought was put into the development of the plot and the world within the story. The world is complex, however, the information given to readers makes it easy to understand. The main conflict aligns perfectly with the blurb.

🔪》Characters

The characters are introduced and described very well in the book. It was easy to picture the characters' appearances. The characters' personalities were also shown well throughout the chapters. The characters were all unique and it was easy to relate to them (well, maybe not Edmund lol). The relationships between the characters are also shown well throughout the chapters. Maysa and Remus are so adorable! I liked the duality between level-headed Janus and temperamental Edmund. It does leave me wondering how exactly Janus and Edmund became friends though.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

There were a few spelling and grammar errors in the chapters. Nothing major that distracted from the story and they could easily be fixed with an edit.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style was consistent throughout the chapters and was very well done. Descriptions and information were worked seamlessly into the narration. It was easy to picture the scenery as well as the characters' actions. The chapters were a good length and the ending lines left the readers wanting more. The phrasing was easy to understand and the story flowed very well.

🔪》Enjoyment

The story was enjoyable and I would definitely read on! I couldn't stop myself from reading everything you had posted and if there had been more, I definitely would have read more. I'm interested in seeing what happened to poor Lysa in the woods and I hope they find her. I'd also love to see more of Remus and Maysa; they're adorable! I also hope Edmund gets what's coming to him. The quotes at the start of the chapters were a very nice touch! I think it would be nice to include a pronunciation guide at the start of the story. I was wondering how to pronounce some of the locations in the story.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the plot is intriguing; it draws readers in and leaves them wanting more. The story is clearly very well-thought-out and developed. It's easy for the readers to understand the world in the story and it's easy for them to feel like they're in the story with the characters. The characters and the scenery are described very well. Information is worked into the story well; it's easy for readers to understand and not dumped on them at once. The relationships between the characters are shown and developed well. The characters' personalities are also shown well throughout the chapters. You do an excellent job showing their personalities not only through their dialogue, but their actions as well. The writing style is very well done! The story could use an edit to fix the small spelling and grammar errors. The story was easy to understand and flowed very well. Good luck with your story!