Reviewer: Rabi
Book: Mon Chaton
By: Nott_Soul

Title: 2/5
First of all, the title is beautiful and unique. But what had me a little problematic is that I didnt know its meaning. The people often ignores the stories having a title which is either in another language or too hard to understand. Pronouncing it and understanding the attraction between story theme and plot lines becomes difficult if we don't understand the word at the first glance. However, I think the title is also not relevant to the story. Even though the female lead was called Mon Chaton but I don't think if its related to the whole plot. By name it feels like the whole story revolves around only the girl but no, it also has twins and much more in this.

Therefore I would suggest you change it.  I have a few suggestions for you if you want any even though I liked the current title because of its uniqueness.

1) Arcane (Means Secret)

2) Chained to you.

3) Destined to be yours

Cover: 2/10
Cover needs a lot of improvement. The color scheme and the theme of the cover is not relevant to the story line and plot. The story contains dark themes such as  murders and violence but the cover is serving the whole different vibes. The font style and color can be changed as it is too light to be read and mingling with the background. The color scheme of the cover is light not matching the vines of the story plot. I would suggest using a dark  theme and darker shades to make the cover relate to the story.

It will be more catchy and capable enough to attract people. You can take services from any cover/graphic shop available.

Blurb: 6/10
It was average, by average I meant yes, it was able to catch reader's attention. The police scene gave mysterious vibes and shivers crawled my spine. But what actually the rules of blurb are, doesn't seem to get apply on the blurb you used.

You should give a little introduction or something related to the plot as well. Only a few dialogues can't be called a blurb. We wouldn't call it a perfect blurb as well. You must add a few detailed scenes in it and make it look presentable. After that, the last line you used in another language, I was unable to understand what does that mean.

I would suggest you changing that.

1st Impression: 3/5
The first impression counts from the blurb, cover and title. Even though blurb attracted me but I don't think the same job was done by cover and title. Cover serves total different vibes and didn't match the story at all. I would suggest you change that.

Plot:  16/20
Except one point, everything was well settled and well managed. The story is short but executed well. However, more details could be added considering the topics and character's behaviors. I would also like to suggest adding some background details characters description. Because characters are the ones who give life to the plot line. They help reader to know about them and feel them inwardly. After that, there was a point I was unable to get.

When Taehyung revealed that he is Taehyung not Taeyeon (sorry, I easily forget the Names of the characters, I sincerely apologize), he admitted that he killed his twin brother even before the marriage. So how the dead busy was found after this much time and how the police figured out it is Y/N's husband even after he was alive in government's records.

What I meant to say is, how the police can claim that the body they found is of Y/N's husband while he was dead even before the marriage. Taehyung married the girl not his twin brother. Even after planning a perfect murder, how could Taehyung get away with this little mistake?

Hope you would clear my doubt.

Flow: 6/10
Even though the story is shirt but well managed except a few points. I would like to know more about the happenings and twists in details which I think is needed. The plotline is unique. However I think, flow needs to be managed as at some points it lacks the description and details. There are errors in phrase and tense usage which breaks the flow and minor details also disturb it.

The untold change of POV is also disturbing the reading. I couldn't pinpoint who is saying what now. The POV's of characters are changed without any warning. I hope you would work it off.

Grammar & vocabulary: 5/10
Your grammar needs improvement. Your tense usage and sentence structure is not poor but they need improvement to get much better. These minor yet affective errors disturb the flow and sometimes cause the readers to even quite the reading of the certain story.

We would see what errors are there and how they can be improved.

1) Snakes

I got what you meant by this word. The wrapping of arms around the waist is depicted here but the phrase used here is wrong as well as spelled wrong. The word snake is the name of an animal, not a verb as it is a noun.

For that act the word "Wrapped" is better but if you wanna use the alternative one, then it would be "sink/sank". Like:

"He sank his arms around my waist" even though the meaning was depicted but it would be more appropriate if you used:

"He wrapped his arms around me".

Its much better.

2) Let Go

Let Go is the phrase used as an order. The scene going behind  and the vibes surveying as the dialogue is depicted, you should have used "Let's go" not "Let Go".

Hope I didnt confuse you with this one.

3) The arranging of sentence.

The sentence you wrote:

"Rubbing his nose, giggling watching me getting ticklish"

Now in the upper sentence, the structure of it is not correct. It seems a bit off having this much 'Ing' form with every verb. After that you missed a "Comma" in the sentence. There should be a com me between 'Giggling' and 'watching' . The edited version of the sentence is below:

"Rubbing his nose, giggling, he watched me getting ticklish".

4) You hear him speak in your ear, mockingly.

Now in this sentence, you used present indefinite while story telling is always in past tense. The narrating of the story is always in past tense because the story is the part of the history unless it is some essay or play.

It should be:

"You heard him speaking in your ear, mockingly" but I would suggest you using the word 'Whispering' is much better then the word 'speaking' specially when mentioned near the ear.

Emotions: 6/10

Since the story was short, it had minor description of characters, their feelings and emotions. They are talked less and not discussed briefly. Emotions are the ones who give life to the characters, let us know how the characters are doing. They make us understand their feelings and also know their inner conflicts.

But as I have mentioned before, the story is short therefore the emotions are not discussed briefly but as the story goes on, I could feel emotions right at the places.

Character's development: 7/10
The development of the characters is seen as the story goes on. But it is rushed as the author hurriedly finished the story line. It can be seen as the story is short so no wonders the development of the characters was cut short as well. But it was seen.

Writing style: 6/10
Depiction skills, grammar and usage of words at correct places, emotions management and the plot execution along with the narration skills, all of the listed above put an affect on the writing style. Writing style either gives you a name or gives you nothing but dust.

Your writing style is not bad but needs a little improvement. As I said before, narration skills decide the writing style and make it exquisite. You need to add more description and details in your scene. Need to focus on characters and everything is well.

Enjoyment: 4/5
Overall: 3/5

Total: 66/100

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Hope you would take our marks and words into consideration and let us see a better version soon.