review 5- please love me

cover- 8/10

i personally feel that your cover is too tacky for my taste...

i dig simple and aesthetic covers, but yours is too graphed up according to me😅

title- 8/10

though the title matches the storyline, it's unoriginal.

try being a bit more creative!

description/short summary- 9/10

the emotions, just, wow.

i can honestly feel the intensity with which the character's convey their sentiments, and it is so touching!

the only thing that i would like to point out here is the grammar.

no matter how intriguing the plot sounded to me, it was still a big turn-off to see so many grammatical errors in the introduction itself.

i suggest you work a bit on it, and it will be perfect!🤗

plot- 7/10

i think that the starting of the book is painfully slow. 

although i understand that the "main" plot starts from whichever chapter, it doesn't help if the reader gets bored in the first two chapters itself.

i think that one of the reasons of the story proceeding so slowly is the choice of storyline. i personally think that the way you've framed the whole story is much more like the daily life of the boys.

although there's no problem with that, i think that the main scene should be introduced a bit more faster,in your case, the scene where taehyung comes in, just so that the reader does not lose interest.

i'm not asking you to give up on all the other introductions/scenes. it's just that they can be intergrated along with the other scenes in the story.

grammar- 12/20

1) 5/10- i think you already know about your errors?

i read your bio and it said and i quote 'still on my learning phase', so maybe you are aware that you need to really work on it.

one last thing, "na" is a hindi word, so not all your readers will understand if you include another foreign language in your dialogues.

2) 7/10- big paragraphs = big turn-off

it was a let-down to see such big paragraphs in the introductory chapter itself.

clustered up lines makes the readers want to skip the whole scene, which might lead them to miss out on important events.

so i do suggest that you segment your paragraphs into shorter one's, just to make it easier for the readers!

total- 44/60

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to @Niyanta-Taecrazy7 ,

honestly, i think that if you tweak up the storyline a bit, your book is good to go!

i hope that you take the review in a positive way🥰

thankyou, and all the best!🌸

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