review 9- Lust [A Different Love Story]

cover- 9/10

the way that your cover is so aesthetic is just *mwah*

also, i think the sub-heading is grammatically incorrect but i also think that it is intentional?

i don't really know...

title- 10/10

the name of the book is perfectly suited with the story🥂

also, it's short and intact so that's just the cherry on top🍒

description/short summary- 10/10

normalize. one. line. descriptions.

i was called out for my one-line description earlier and had to change it, but then realized that i don't actually give a flying fvck about their opinion, and then changed it back yey :)

to summarise, your description leaves the reader hanging, and that's what we want now, ain't it🤪

plot- 9/10

although the overall idea of the story is pretty great, i think that it is fast-paced.

for instance, i think that taehyung realizes that the female is not a human way too quick.

i also think i got a bit confused at times, as to if there are more members than just taehyung and jk or not...

grammar- 18/20

1) 8/10- there are some minor spelling mistakes here and there.

also, i think it's better if you write dialogues in normal text and thoughts in italics.

though there's nothing wrong with the way you write them now, i still think that it would be a better presentation if you follow the above method.

2) 10/10- the way you've distributed the lines and paragraphs is great!

also, i like the way you start a new dialogue from a different line everytime🤗

total- 56/60

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to @-SeoulOneday-,

i think that with minor editings here and there and with a little bit of addition to the detailings, your story is good to go!

it's a refreshing idea, and i would honestly like to see how jk eventually deals with the situation in hand😉

thankyou, and all the best!🌸

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