review 3- BTS 8TH MEMBER

cover- 9/10

i deem the cover to be good. 

it's simple yet glamouring and would attract readers.

one thing that i would personally suggest to you is- maintain a uniform font.

different types of fonts might be fun to play with, but it just looks a little bit too cramped up and over-done to me.

title- 9/10

though the title is understandable to anyone, it's grammatically incorrect.

it should be "BTS'S 8TH MEMBER" or "THE 8TH MEMBER OF BTS".

description/short summary- 8/10

i feel like the description is a bit misleading.

it says "bts texts" but there were clearly none in the book. maybe you're gonna upload them in the upcoming chapters, but so far, i see that not a single one has been posted.

also, your description states "bts one-shots" but i don't really think that what you're writing is a one-shot?

(please do correct me if i'm wrong though)

people might get the wrong idea before they start reading the book.

i think that your book is more of a short story? but that totally depends on what you have in mind.

so far, i think that these two points should be rectified.

plot- 7/10

the essence of the story is quite original, i'll give you that.

but i think i encountered a bit too many cliché scenes. 

the scenes in the chapter of sasaeng fan, for example, were very banal.

also, try and explain emotions a bit more. i feel that y/n recovers from an almost r*pe attempt too quickly, to be honest.

also, i would advise you to not leave an a/n at the end of your chapter saying something along the lines of- "... imagine they had a happy reunion.".

that was a real turn-off for me. take your time, but complete the chapters.

i do like the way you try to use images to set the scene of the storyline.

grammar- 17/20

1) 8/10- your grammar usage is alright, i guess.

i didn't really encounter any major faults within the chapters, just a few wrongly tensed sentences here and there, but that's okay. 

you can work on that by proof-reading your chapters one or two times.

work on capitalization. i saw many randomly auto-capitalized words in between sentences.

2) 9/10- the division of the paragraphs is fine. 

i would still recommend that you start a new dialogue from a new line so that the entire paragraph doesn't look hotch-potch and there's enough clarity between who's speaking and who's not.

total-50/60

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to @PinkeuSeokJin,

i do not intend to hurt you with my words. instead, i hope you become an even better writer by working on your short-comings!

all in all, i think you did a good job🥂

your book has a lot of potential, keep writing!!

thankyou, and all the best!🌸

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