"You have it, the heart, so be courageous and share it with me. I'm willing to feel, willing to accept it."

— sane or insane, by CupcakeShae

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☼ TITLE (3/3 points): I can't really tell if the title fits the story after reading the chapters, but after reading the prologue, I could tell it obviously as a connection with the story. Your title isn't very common around wattpad and your story is easily found so I'm sure you deserve this score!

☼ COVER (3/5 points): The cover isn't really my type but I know you have all of your covers with the same design, so I understand. Personally, I don't like the fonts used in the cover and I think it would be better if you were using a cover with a picture of him, but it has the title and it also informs the readers that it's a Taehyung's story.

☼ DESCRIPTION (7/7 points): The description is perfect, I loved it! You didn't reveal too much of it and I honestly think there isn't anything missing. I also loved the quote, it's beautiful OHMYGOD

☼ FIRST IMPRESSIONS (10/10 points): The prologue got me hooked as soon as I started reading. So original, so different, so weirdly unique. The first three chapters were also interesting, perfect to know more about the characters.

☼ PLOT (24/25 points): I found the plot quite interesting, even though there are obviously some common things, like how Taehyung's going to help her in a way (or so I hope). But, not gonna lie, I've never seen something so incredibly weird and at the same time amazing. And when I say weird, I'm saying it in a good way, don't worry.

☼ CHARACTERS (13/15 points): There's nothing much I can say here because so far I don't have a lot of informations about the characters and their relationship with each other. I really like Inah's character so far and it makes me sad to see her so sad and to see her relationship with her father and brother. I hope she gets better soon :( And about Taehyung, I really like him as well! I'm sure he'll only reveal the "insane" side of him a little further on the story.

☼ YOUR WRITING STYLE (18.5/20 points): I love the way you write, ah it's beautiful! You are amazing at explaining how the characters feel and what is happening in the story. Even though you have a lot of great descriptions, sometimes you write small sentences that don't sound so good. There are some sentences you could/should turn into one, or sentences that don't even need a period, for example: "The coolness of snow soaked in through her pants. But she remaines unbothered as her head pounded and screams erupted from her bluish lips." You could use a comma instead of a period before the word "but". And here "She repeated it like a spell. Hoping someone would answer her helpless calls but no one did. Everyone was enfolded in the coziness of their homes." You could have written, "She repeated it like a spell, hoping for someone to answer her helpless calls but no one did; unluckily, everyone was enfolded in the coziness of their homes." Or something similar :) Just a suggestion, though!

☼ GRAMMAR (13.5/15 points): You have a few mistakes here and there, but nothing too bad. You should definitely use more commas and when you do, use them in the right place. Sometimes I honestly get lost while reading some of your sentences and it gets really confusing. In my opinion it's distracting and I'm sure the same happens with other people and in a story as amazing as yours, having a good punctuation would make it a perfect story.

☼ TOTAL SCORE (92/100 points): I'm very happy to announce that this is the best score so far!! Lovely, your story is mind-blowing. It totally exceeded my expectations! It's so different from what I'm used to read and it was a pleasant surprise. I'm looking forward to read more chapters! Oh and I'm happy you decided to write longer chapters! Thank you so much for applying and as promise, I'll be voting in every chapter from my other account!

Everyone, shower this girl with love and read her book! Remember to vote and comment, she deserves it!

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