"A new beginning. An unknown girl in the unknown world."

— cherry lips, joonpeanut

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☼ TITLE (2/3 points): I totally understand why you opted for this title, but it might be difficult for others to find your story since there are a lot other stories with the same title. That's something very hard to control so I get it and I, myself, also have stories with not-so-original titles. More than that, I think you should find a more appealing title!

☼ COVER (4/5 points): Honestly, the cover is not really my type, but I like the fonts you used on it, but I'd probably put your username at the bottom and Jimin's name at the top of the cover.

☼ DESCRIPTION (4/7 points): I absolutely loved the quotes you wrote on your description, but I'd like it to have a bit more information. You should maybe let your readers know more about the story, for example: where do they meet, or what kind of girl Verose is/what kind of guy Jimin is, or maybe even add a bit of suspense! You can do that by ending your description with a rhetorical question! I personally love when a description ends with a question, it makes me curious and excited to read more!

☼ FIRST IMPRESSIONS (6.5/10 points): I enjoyed the beginning of the story, when Verose says goodbye to her family, it was very emotional and my eyes actually started to fill with tears :( I was curious to read more, but the way she met Jimin wasn't that different from what I'm used to read in other stories. Still, I enjoyed it a lot and I wanted to read more and more to know how would Verose's university life be, as well as her relationship with Jimin, or "Mr. Cherry Lips", hehe.

☼ PLOT (15/25 points): Even though I enjoyed what you've written so far, the plot is not very creative, not very different from what I usually see. I liked the drama with Jimin's girlfriend, but I also feel like the story is moving too fast. I understand that the chapters are small, and I really like that, but you could add more descriptions, more details about Verose and how she feels about the guys. 

☼ CHARACTERS (11/15 points): I can't say that much about the characters because there isn't a lot of information about them or their personalities in these chapters. I really like Verose, she seems like a nice girl, but she should have been honest with Jimin. I like all of the boys, they are angels and that's only a fact. I don't like Jennie at all and from what I've seen, it's too soon for Verose to consider Jennie her best friend, maybe she'll understand that later, I don't know but I'm curious about it, I'd love to know how much they change throughout the book.

☼ YOUR WRITING STYLE (15/20 points): I can tell you know how to write and I really like to read your stories because you're actually a great writer. But some sentences seem off. For example, the first chapter was incredible, everything was well described, their goodbyes, their sadness. But in "Bangtan", when Verose met the rest of the guys, I felt like it should have been a bit more serious. You could always write the dialogue in a playful way, but without adding some expressions like "lol", it doesn't sound very professional.

☼ GRAMMAR (13.5/15 points): You rarely change from present tense to past tense and vice-versa, but it happens a few times. You don't have a lot mistakes in your writing and you use a great variety of verbs which is amazing and it makes the chapters really easy to read!

☼ TOTAL SCORE (71/100 points): My darling, please don't feel discouraged. I know you're really talented and I really needed more chapters to write you a more complete review. I'm enjoying it so far, but I think you should add something different from what it's usually written in stories with the same plot. You're doing a great job and I'm sure you'll keep doing it anyway and making me proud. As promised, I'll be voting on your book from my second account!

Thank you for joining me! And I hope you're not mad at me :(

And please, everyone, go shower this girl with love because she's the cutest and deserves everything! Follow her and read her books, she deserves it!

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