"Speaking of fate, his mind was drawn back to the certain memory of the woman he met this morning: Aurora. It was strange, how her features were too vivid and clear to be just memories in his mind. But he wasn't bothered. She was a beauty worth remembering, after all."

— aurora, by KOOPIECE

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☼ TITLE (2/3 points): The title sounds good and it's obviously really pretty, but there are surprisingly a lot of books in wattpad with the same title, which makes it very hard for people to find your book. I also think it would be a better idea to find a title that has a connection with the story, just like yours do, but at the same time, tells a bit more about the story itself.

☼ COVER (4.5/5 points): Okay not gonna lie, the cover scared the hell out of me. I'm such a baby, I swear- I don't know why I read or watch horror stories/movies, am I stupid? THE ANSWER IS YES. Anyways, I LOVE IT! It's related to the story, it has a picture of Jungkook, a scary one but oh well, it's meant to be like that and it makes perfect sense! I don't really like the font but it looks amazing in that kind of cover and the only reason I had to take 0.5 out of the full score, it's because I can't really see your username on it and in my opinion, it's important that the username is visible.

☼ DESCRIPTION (7/7 points): The description of your book has a quote and a small introduction to the story and everything sounds perfect. You mentioned the two main characters, which in my opinion, it's something an author should always do, so I'd say you deserve the full score in this one! Just a suggestion: I know that font looks aesthetic and pretty, but some devices can't recognize the characters, especially older ones. It'd probably be a good idea to change the font to a "normal" one, the wattpad's font.

☼ FIRST IMPRESSIONS (10/10 points): The first chapters are so amazing, oh my God. Really. I was so excited to read more and more of your wonderful book and all I wanted was to have a day off, without having to study and without assignments to be able to read all of it. It got me completely hooked, I immediately started to come up with theories inside my head and I couldn't wait to find out a bit more about Jungkook and Aurora. Great job, love!

☼ PLOT (25/25 points): Definitely. I am 100% sure you deserve this. Jungkook or one of the boys as a king or a prince? Super common. Angels and demons? Very common. A beautiful green-eyed girl who makes everyone fall in love with her just because of her looks and personality? Oh, so common. The three of them together? Girl, you have my heart. Plus, everything happens in Spain! Not in Japan or Korea, but in Spain! I freaking love Spain, especially Madrid btw hehe but that's not the point! I'm so so so surprised with this story, with this plot. This different and captivating plot. I want to congratulate you for being able to put these three topics together and create such an incredible story. I'm speechless, really. Every single time I found myself getting confused over someone's actions or someone's behaviours, I always had the answer to my question in one of the following paragraphs and I love it when something like that happens. I absolutely love it. I enjoy reading a book that answers every question I have, I really do. And I guarantee you that, in my opinion, you did an amazing job.

☼ CHARACTERS (15/15 points): I love all of them, even Soojin. I love that all of them are a bit flirty and playful and I love how every personality is perfectly described, as well as the relationships they have with each other. Jungkook has to be my favorite since he's always so sure of himself and acts like a man, but when he's next to Aurora, he shows how much of a boy in love (HAHAHAHA OMG I'M SO SORRY BYE) he is. I really like Aurora as well, I love how brave and smart she is, I love how she's not afraid of anything and I know that even though she's a big meanie sometimes, she has a heart and everything she does has to he for a reason. Can't wait to know more about her! OH AND HOBI AND YOONGI ARE THE BEST, THAT'S FOR SURE

☼ YOUR WRITING STYLE (18.5/20 points): The way you describe emotions, scenarios or even someone's looks is just amazing and I wish you could give me some of your talent because your descriptions are so freaking good. I mean, w o w. There isn't a single part of your story that is bad when it comes to descriptions. You know when and how to write them and I'm sure a lot of writers (including me) would do anything to write descriptions as good as yours! I didn't really like the parts when you look like you're talking to the reader, it doesn't sound very good most of the times and some writers use it and it works but I really didn't think it did this time :( maybe change it a little bit to sound better 💖 It's just my opinion, though!!

☼ GRAMMAR (11/15 points): I noticed a few mistakes but don't worry, it's not as bad as you're probably thinking it is. Your overall writing is fantastic, you use different verbs, different words and you try to not repeat the same word too many times. But I definitely think you should use the verb "say" a bit more, since you barely use it. Don't use it too much, but use it more often, it's such a cute little verb! Another thing I noticed was that in one of the chapters, you wrote "shouldn't've". To be honest with you and since English is not my first language, I thought this was a mistake. After talking to a friend of mine, I realized this can be used when you're talking to other people but I wouldn't use it in writing, it doesn't sound professional. Besides this, there also was this chapter where you wrote, "Aurora, the woman, had laughed softly, brushing back her dark hair before joining him. "Are they really, Your Highness?" She asked, locking eyes with him." And then, "Jeongguk nodded." In here, if you were using the past simple, why did you change it to the past participle when you started talking about Aurora? You should have written, "Aurora, the woman, laughed", especially because right after that, you use the verb "ask" and the verb "nod" in the past simple and the whole situation is happening at the same time, so using the past participle in this case is not correct! This also happens some other times but I thought it would be enough to only share one of them. There was also this chapter where you wrote "Goodness, Soojin! Once I sell this, I'd be rich!" and it's not correct as well. You should have written, "I'll be rich" instead of "I'd be rich". And another one I found was "Once Aurora slid in, and the door was shut loudly." If you read it outloud, you'll notice that it doesn't sound good. "Once Aurora slid in, the door shut loudly." is the correct way :)

☼ TOTAL SCORE (93/100 points):  This was such an incredible way to start round two! I really loved reading every chapter of it and I'm very happy you decided to start writing longer chapters; I was always very curious to read the next one and next one after that. Thank you so much for asking me for a redo and I really hope I wasn't too harsh. I hope I was able to give you some help, even if it wasn't that much. Lots of love, cutie ❤️

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