↻ AUTHOR ࿐྄ྀ  taes_smirk
↻ REVIEWER ࿐྄ྀ  btsluvvesper

First Light :: 5/20

» Title :: 1/5

The title is something that should have uniqueness, relevancy with the story and to the point of the story. Speaking of your title, I wouldn't say that it fulfilled the points mentioned. 

The term "prank call" was not shown well throughout the story so far. Yes, somewhat, we can consider that it all started with a prank call, but still, carrying the concept through the entire story till now was quite unnoticeable. 

Besides that, there is no uniqueness in the title. I couldn't see any creativity or something crispy in the title. It was chosen very randomly and carelessly. Thus, I would suggest that you use a title that reflects the story more and is unique yet relatable with the story. But also keep in mind that the uniqueness doesn't end you up in giving something a very foreign word. Thus, you have to balance in all ways and then you can have a well-fitted title. 

» Cover :: 3/10

Your cover is simply very plain to begin with. The cover is the center of attraction to allure the readers to your book. It should reflect your plot, theme/mood of the story and should be attractive by its perfect design. 

Your cover was simply a picture of SeokJin with a few filters and fonts thrown over it. It wasn't appealing to me, to be honest. It didn't give any vibes of the overall storyline nor was it attractive to me. Just the fact that SeokJin is a CEO was shown by the pic used. Also the subtitle was not much visible considering I had to squint my eyes. 

I will suggest using a cover that is much relevanting and well-suited with the theme and/or mood of the story.

» Blurb :: 1/5

The blurb is kind of the starting point of the story. They should be of a quality length, should contain suspense and/or conflict indicating that the story will be revolving around that conflict. And they should be enchanting and inviting. 

However, I can't say your blurb was a quite good one. It didn't exactly have any conflict nor was there anything pleasing to urge me to click the "read" button. It was quite cliche and boring. Also, just a few random dialogues were mentioned and at last an overused way of saying what will happen was given. Nothing else. 

And I feel the dialogues which were mentioned will just attract readers by portraying it as purely erotic content. You may succeed with that as the majority of Wattpad readers want that type of content only but if you ask me that wasn't a good impression to make. 

Overall, I would suggest putting something more relevant and appealing for the blurb. Something that would make it look appropriate and give an overall idea to readers of what content there might be in the book. And, avoid putting cliché stuff.

Dawn :: 3/10

Honestly, the starting was kind of thrilling (?) but again boring. Boring, because somewhat they portrayed that "cliche-cringe-smutty" type contented story, which I, as a reader, highly dislike. Moreover, it's quite an unoriginal idea nowadays. 

Thrilling, because of your opening and SeokJin's powerful reply to Sunhee while in the call; it indeed suggested that some dark contents will be there. But, unfortunately, the very next chapter proved me wrong. And interest level decreased. 

Thus, I will say that try to do or present the things in a more different and unique way yet keep up with your content. Add some spice to it, but make sure you don't make it too spicy to make it unbearable. Hope you got my point!

Plot and Idea ::  6/20

I will again say the same thing, the plot and idea of yours is quite banal and boring. It's not hard to find stories with similar or even the same plot and idea. Now, taking a common plotline is not wrong. No, not at all. 

But what is necessary here is the way you are executing your usual plot in an unusual way. Sadly, your execution was poor too. It was quite predictable and common to know what will happen after what. And reading the same old, boring, and typical story is never interesting or alluring. At some point, I just felt that I am reading an 18+ inside jokes book. Nothing else. There was honestly no proper plot that I could've noticed. 

SeokJin is just warning Sunhee that he will come after her yet even after 15 chapters they are just talking through texts about casual stuff or joking around. They don't even know each other. Thus your plot pace is quite slow.

All I will say is - come up with some unique ideas, twists and turns in order to make your not-so-new concept an interesting concept. If you are able to do that, surely you can succeed.

Characters and Emotions :: 5/15

Now characters and emotions are quite a vital part of a plot. The characters are what make a plot complete. Emotions are what connect the characters with readers, and also their actions and reactions are based on their emotions mainly.

Speaking of your story, I won't say it was that bad or good. It was okay. The characteristics of SeokJin and Sunhee were assumable and such. 95 liners and Maknae didn't have any proper character background settings nor did Sunhee just bits of their lives were shown. Whereas, I feel SeokJin has more background settings than them. Thus, Sunhee as the lead needs a little attention in that way. 

Coming to emotions, they were very rare to find in the story till now. Just tiny bits here and there. That is also very unnoticeable. Thus, due to this I couldn't connect myself with the characters in any way.

In conclusion, work hard on characters' build up and their emotions accordingly. Don't always keep common characters. Try to do something out of the box and that will actually catch readers attention more than regular ones.

Writing Style :: 4/15

Writing style is something I, as a reviewer, focus more on. As per me, it somewhat forms your plot better than it already is. It puts a huge impact on the overall plot. 

Talking about your writing, then sorry to say, it was utterly amateurish and bland. No literary devices and tags were used incase of dialogues. No richness of words or phrases were seen. In short, it was quite boring and emotionless. Also, you never mentioned when it was Sunhee's point of view, which ended up confusing me many times as to who was the narrator. Many wrong usage of words such as verbs, prepositions, etc were noticed too. 

Overall I would say that try using a more enhanced and organized way to present your plot. Not that you have to use foreign words or something. Just have to recognize which style and tone go well for which theme/genre and fix up the mentioned things, and then your story would be a good one. 

Grammar :: 5/20 

Grammar is like salt for me, no matter how good your writing style and plot is, without proper grammar it's useless. I will list down the prominent mistakes : 

» There is quite a lot of tense inconvenience. You begin with one tense and the very moment you went to another tense.

» Wrong use of ellipsis (...). It's just 3 dots, not more, not less.

» Wrong use of phrases and words. (As mentioned in writing style.)

» More than one person's dialogues in one paragraph is incorrect to use. Every new person's dialogues will be in a new paragraph. 

» Wrong use of tags punctuation rules.

» Absence of punctuations when needed and misuse of them when not needed. 

» Sentence forming needs more attention.

» Typos and spelling mistakes were very noticeable. Proofreading is necessary a lot. 

All in all, I would say that fix up the mentioned things and you can do better.

TOTAL :: 28/100

Reviewer's Note :: Don't be disheartened by the low scores, we are not in a competition. You can surely do great. Reading real books and well-written fanfictions can help enhance the writing style and grammar part can be fixed by practicing and different sites are always there to help. Thus, I hope you take this review positively and improve accordingly. All the best. Thank you.

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Yours Truly,
SeeSaw Fam.