↻ AUTHOR ࿐྄ྀ  binge-writing

↻ REVIEWER ࿐྄ྀ  -jennieverse-

First Light :: 12.5/20

» Title :: 3.5/5

From an explicit point of view, I do not have any objection with the title even though it left me curious as to why you opt for it as the title. But as I reached the end where you explained the reason behind it, I couldn't think of anything better for the title. I could see the clear connection of the title to the overall theme of your collection. But I hate to admit it that from an implicit point of view the title might not be the most eye-catching one, it might not be interesting enough to attract a reader from just a glance. You could be a little more creative with the title while maintaining the core connection with the book.

» Cover :: 5/10

The cover is not a very bad one but not the best at the same time. I do like how it has a dull vibe that expresses the autumn aura, there are leaves in the background, everything is plain and minimalistic. Some might be attracted to it and some might not, but according to me it again lacks creativity. I am looking for more of an effort. Your overall theme has a huge potential that can be explored, which you can get more imaginative with. So I would say sticking to the minimalistic point is not doing much good. But again it completely depends on you and how you think people might perceive it so it's your call if you would want to change the cover or not.

» Blurb :: 4/5

I was certainly very impressed by the way you wrote the blurb. I like how it started with a quote, some people might think it's typical or clichè but the truth is it plays a major role in drawing people in. I also liked your interpretation of humans and the analogic outline of humans and paper. What actually caught me off guard is the sudden use of lower case in the blurb, it might be for aesthetic purposes but I highly recommend you put, 'lowercase intended' warning in the blurb.

Dawn :: 9/10

I am genuinely impressed with the setting of the collection and how it is divided into parts. The alignments and slight aesthetics had me amazed. As for the small stanza you wrote in the very beginning was very expressive, the way you projected how the poet was insecure about writing, she was doubtful about it but she comes back to writing. Then you talked about how insecure you were about your poems, the fact that you can express the same emotion and make the reader feel what you felt is what makes the poem so much more excellent.

Theme and Structure :: 15/20

A poem can contain many elements to give it structure. Rhyme is perhaps the most common of these elements and it is exactly what your poems were missing. But what I think is of equal importance is, how the verse serves its purpose, it may be a blank verse that is devoid of any rhymes or a free verse that lacks a consistent rhyme scheme, metrical pattern, or musical form. As long as it's expressive, it works although without a rhyming pattern in any of the poems, the collection does look a bit rough to me. According to me a good rhyming pattern always works as a cherry on top. Apart from that the theme of the book overall is well portrayed by the poem.

Characters and Emotions :: 14/15

There was no doubt an excellent execution done with the way the emotions are delivered through the lines, expressions perfectly penned down. However, the only reason why I am unable to give a perfect score is because I think you can do much better and there is still some scope of improvement.

Writing Style :: 12/15

There was an excellent choice of words, the sentence structure was on point. Most of your poems were blank verses or free verses that don't work for me that much but yours however were very impressive. I felt like there was a slight mimesis in your way of writing and it reminded me of old English. There is one problem with the second and third poems which is how you have followed enjambment through the verses, there were no punctuations to break the line. I don't think it was done on purpose because there was no sense of continuation between the lines. Thus using lineation in this case could have been much better. There was, on the other hand, a sense of dissonance in your poem. The uneven structuring imposed a power impact, created tension and captured inner turmoil.

Grammar :: 18/20

As mentioned earlier, the use of enjambment created disruptions in the punctuations. Apart from that, there weren't any noticeable grammatical mistakes.

TOTAL :: 80.5/100

Reviewer's Note :: You have so much potential to do better. I truly enjoyed your piece of writing, the way you used the words throughout the poem was very touching. Best of luck with your writing.

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Yours Truly,
SeeSaw Fam.