↻ AUTHOR ࿐྄ྀ  LenteInApril
↻ REVIEWER ࿐྄ྀ  -jennieverse-

First Light :: 10.5/20

» Title :: 4/5

Starting with the title of your book, it was quite a creative one. I liked how it wasn't just some random words put together for the sake of aesthetics, it actually had a deeper meaning. The mystical force that should be present inside us but is actually lost, complimented the overall sense of angst in the book. Although I feel like 'Lost Orenda' would have sounded more convenient and would have made more sense grammatically.

» Cover :: 4/10

As the cover is concerned, it definitely needs more work. It looks dull but not in a way that would line up to portray sadness or monotonousness, it just looks incomplete. The cover background could be made more relevant to the overall aesthetic of the book. The text design and placement also needs improvement. I would highly suggest you get your cover done from a graphic shop, getting the cover done by a professional could give the overall outlook of your book an external shine.

» Blurb :: 2.5/5

Putting out the meaning of your book's title in the beginning is a good idea as those who are unaware of the term would be able to understand the meaning behind the title and it could further draw them towards reading the book. The after para about the poems was heart touching but I hoped that you could add an extract from your poem to the blurb that could give the readers an outline of your way of writing.

Dawn :: 9/10

The book started with an interesting quote so you can say it had me hooked. The first few poems were smaller ones and it left me with a sense of longing. As I wished you would have added a few more lines, someone else can see it differently, to some that sense of incompleteness could be more satisfying as it leaves one with the feeling of longingness.

Theme and Structure :: 16/20

I can see you have opted for freestyle, it works fine for most of the poems. Although the word distribution for some poems could have been better, they don't seem equal and that keeps putting me off when I am reading. Apart from that the theme of the book overall is well portrayed by the poem.

Characters and Emotions :: 15/15

The best part of the book was the way you expressed your thoughts and perfectly penned them down into words. The outlining vibe of the poems were very raw and not overly polished. I could feel the emotions through the lines and that is what I think is the main purpose of a poem, to make the readers feel what you felt when you wrote it. I think you did an excellent job on this part.

Writing Style :: 13/15

As mentioned earlier, your writing is very raw, you have tried to keep most of it simple which is a good thing. The easier the poem is to comprehend, the more readers would relate to it. But I do feel that you could have opted for more unique terminologies instead of the regular ones. It could have enhanced the poetic essence of the lines.

Grammar :: 18/20

Except for the irregular word distribution, I couldn't find any other grammatical or punctuation mistakes but I really wish that you could fix the distribution because it holds quite some importance when it comes to poems.

TOTAL :: 81.5/100

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Yours Truly,
SeeSaw Fam.