↻ AUTHOR ࿐྄ྀ  Detentionqueen
↻ REVIEWER ࿐྄ྀ  burrito_in_bed

First Light :: 11/20

» Title :: 3/5

The title is appropriate to the story and plot. However, it isn’t unique. ‘Love me’ is a common title and there are various other books with the same name. The title of a book is the first thing a reader checks. This is why titles should be unique and intriguing. The title for this book, however, is not very intriguing or refreshing.

[Suggestion/Correction :- Readers usually pay attention to the title when they come across a book, so it is supposed to be something new and catchy.  I suggest that you change the title into something more unique and interesting to make it more engaging and less common.]

» Cover :: 4/10

The face claim is appropriate. The descriptions of the protagonist perfectly match the face claim of the cover. However, the cover doesn’t give any information about the plot. The text placement is also quite odd, it looks a bit randomly placed. The theme of the cover (the color theme and overall visual appeal) looks quite bright, which is contrasting to the theme of the plot itself.

[Suggestion/Correction :- The color theme could be changed into something more dark and suitable to the plot. There is no information about the story on the cover, which makes it less engaging. I suggest adding a subtitle to correct this. I also suggest symmetrical placement of the font, so the cover looks more appealing.]

» Blurb :: 4/5

The blurb is quite engaging. It is well written and hooks the reader. It gives just enough information about the characters and reveals only a small portion of the story, which makes it ideal.

[Suggestion/Correction :- The blurb was well written and attractive. The only suggestion I have is to add a few more interesting elements to it. The blurb, on the first read, seems cliche. There are many books with the same trope and overall theme. Adding a more interesting aspect of the story will make the blurb more engaging.]

Dawn :: 7/10

The first impression is the best impression that one should make. If the start of the story isn’t executed well, readers will lose interest. The starting is what gives readers an impression of the book, so it is supposed to be interesting and engaging.

Your book starts with an elaborate description of the lives of the protagonists. The pace and flow were a bit disrupted. There is also no clear description of Alyssa’s personality, but the illustration of her living conditions made up for it. However, none of the readers could actually have an opinion on her personality.

[Suggestion :- The plot was quite well executed, the flow was where things mainly went wrong. The pace was a bit fast and hasty, which made it quite hard to catch up to. This also disrupted the overall flow of the book. I suggest slowing the pace a bit instead of getting into action right from the first chapter. This will also help in giving readers a better idea about Alyssa’s personality.]

Plot and Idea :: 13/20

The trope wasn’t anything very new or refreshing. The story was a mix of two popular tropes, but it was taken forward quite well. Although a few parts of the story were predictable and cliche, the execution was done greatly.

However, the fast pacing (which I’ve already mentioned) and the overall predictability made the plot less engaging and interesting. A few parts of the plot were bland because of the same.

[Suggestion :- Flow of a book keeps the reader engaged, so does the pace. That’s why these are considered very important while writing the story. In your story, The flow and pace were disturbed in a few places, which led to the story becoming boring.

I suggest you edit and proofread chapters. This will help you detect places that are too fast-paced, and you’ll be able to polish those specific parts.]

Characters and Emotions :: 13/15

The proper and generous usage of imagery, along with the proper usage of vocabulary made the setting, emotions, and characters very interesting. It was quite easy to get into the shoes of the characters and feel the emotions that they felt. The descriptions were vivid and understandable, which made it easy to connect to the characters. Good job!

Although there was proper usage of vocabulary, it wasn’t very wide. The words used in some places were bland, and a few words were overused throughout the story. 

[Suggestion :- I suggest hunting for synonyms while you edit/proofread a particular passage to make the writing more exquisite. Your wide vocab range was evident in a few places, but a few sentences were a bit bland.]

Writing style :: 13/15

The writing style was great! It was engaging and the descriptions were great to read. There was a proper usage of imagery and the settings were well described as well. However, the pace was a bit fast in a lot of places. There were also a few places where I thought the descriptions could be better.

[Suggestion :- Proofreading will help you polish your sentences and improve your description. Reading a few more books, and a bit of research helps you get a hang of proper pacing and flow, which will improve your pace and writing overall.]

Grammar :: 18.5/20

The only mistakes I found here were some minor punctuation errors and typos. The most prominent was capitalization in places where it wasn’t necessary. I also found the usage of commas instead of semicolons in a few places.

[Suggestion :- I suggest proofreading and editing. This is the only plausible way to reduce accidental and unintended mistakes like this. The overall grammar of this book was great, and added to the great experience of reading it.]

TOTAL :: 75.5/100

Reviewer's Note :: Your book was a great read! The way the story was taken forward was surprisingly great for a book belonging to a common trope. I found that the descriptions and writing style were amazing. Overall, it was worth the time, although the plot was predictable in a few places.

That said, I hope my review helped! All that I mentioned above was constructive criticism, and I don’t intend to offend or hurt you in any way. All your book needs is a bit of polishing, and you’ll be good to go.

You can contact me if there are any doubts, or if I haven’t covered anything properly. Thank you, and all the best! :)

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Yours Truly,
SeeSaw Fam.