↻ AUTHOR ࿐྄ྀ lqcrecva
↻ REVIEWER ࿐྄ྀ -jennieverse-

First Light :: 11.5/20

» Title :: 3/5

The title is relevant to the story but seems too direct, considering the theme of the book is mystery, the title could have reflected the same vibe. I am not sure if the title is intriguing enough, but as long as the readers read the book anyway, it shouldn't be much of a problem.

» Cover :: 6/10

The cover is good, not the best but seemed minimalistic, you could have been more creative with it. Maybe by inserting a few of the face claims to the cover. I would suggest you get the cover done by a cover shop. It's a mere suggestion, it completely depends on you if you would want to change it or not. If you don't then I don't see much of a problem with it.

» Blurb :: 2.5/5

Description of the town was good but I was hoping for a little more, maybe some insight on the characters would have been nice. A blurb also requires to express a point of conflict in the story which was not described. I suggest you add a few dialogues from the story to your blurb,  it helps in attracting the readers. Also, "Safe, Serene, Innocent" are adjectives and should be written as "Safe, serene 'and' innocent", small grammatical errors like this might make you look unprofessional.

Dawn :: 8/10

I must say that I really like the overall aesthetic of the book and the introduction chapters. The setting was commendable, it lets the reader have a good reading experience. The only problem I personally had with this part was that a lot of characters were introduced at the same time and I had to go back to the introduction page time and again to see what was the face claim used for the character. It might be a problem that I just faced or there might be a chance that other readers are facing the problem too.

What I would recommend is that since not all the characters are not introduced to the story at the same time, you can reveal the characters slowly with each chapter. Like let's say a certain character is going to make its first appearance in chapter 5, you can put the character introduction for that particular character in the beginning of that chapter.

Plot and Idea :: 12/20

I think both of us can agree that the whole "mysterious town" setting is not very original, there are numerous tv shows and books with the same setting. But what makes a book or tv show original even after using the same setting is how it's executed. The subplots were a bit unique but I am sorry to say that the character background, the whole story's setting and the consecutive events felt too familiar.

You could have gone a bit out of the box and not just stick to a typical scenario. My opinion is subjective, the reason I feel it's repetitive might be because I have read too many thrillers yet with a proper execution, I feel the book is worth a read.

Characters and Emotions :: 13/15

There were different characters with distinctive personalities so it was refreshing to read. The actions and reactions of the characters to situations were relatable and it helped me emotionally connect with the book. There were characters I liked and didn't like as well, the archetypes of characters were balanced. Although their background and and the way they were set into the story felt a bit cliché.

Writing Style :: 9/15

I would say that the writing style was above average. It could have definitely been better, try to add more action and dialogue tags, be creative with them. "He said", "she replied", are very repetitive, it makes the writing monotonous. Try to be more unique with your writing, expand your vocabulary and try to be more expressive with descriptive writing.

Grammar :: 19/20

There weren't many grammatical errors or punctuation mistakes, just a few here and there which I recommend you remove by thorough proofreading.

TOTAL :: 72.5/100

Reviewer's Note :: I enjoyed reading your book, you have immense potential as a writer. I apologize if I came off as a bit harsh at any part of the review, it was not my intention. I wish you all the best with your writing!

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Yours Truly,
SeeSaw Fam.