Disclaimer-I tend to be judgmental and picky and will point out the slightest details. Apologies in advance ^_^

Lets start from the book cover and the tittle,

The book cover is not bad. I wont say its the best cover I ever saw. It isn't very appealing to be honest, but its not bad. I don't see anything in the cover, its just an abstract. But I liked the small quotes or statements, its always been my personal favorite.

The title is good. As a reader, if I saw this book, I'd pick it up to read.

I would rate the cover and the tittle together as 3/5

Moving to the blurb,

Well, I read many books but I've never stumbled on Sci-fic. This is my first Sci-fic book to read. I'm afraid for this but why not give it a try! 

The blurb confused me a little. But I get the point you are trying to convey. The blurb had this touch of professionalism in it. It is well written and edited. The fact that you gave a description and threw some question for the readers was a valiant move. I liked it over-all.

I would rate this 4.5/5

Starting with the book...

I noticed there wasn't any prologue. Prologue isn't really a necessity but it is helpful to give the reader a slight idea about the story. And I don't see it as a problem, though.

CHAPTER 1

I had slight trouble in this as a first-time reader of this specific genre. I got the key points of it, but I'm still unsure of what is really  going on. Apart from that, the sentence construction, grammar and paragraph spacing is on point. 

I'm not really sure about a lot of things in this, but at the same time this is kinda making me want to read more of this book. Since it is the beginning of everything, and nothing.

Remarks-5/5

CHAPTER 2

Mocking and Pity.

"Heat of shame blossomed his wrinkled cheeks. Trying to stop this internal argument. He sucked his yellow teeth in a loud smack...."

In here, the use of punctuation marks are important. Do use a comma after the sentence 'Trying to stop.."

It would look something like this;

"Heat of shame blossomed his wrinkled cheeks. Trying to stop this internal argument, he sucked his yellow teeth in a loud smack..."

Again, in the same chapter,

"I never understood the rule about not owning a personal property, except...."

Now speaking about the chapter, to be honest I have many question. The names, and the story, quiet many things. I could only understand the key points. Its not a mistake though, I'm just not used to reading this genre of books. But I'm not disappointed either. 

But the big plus point, the writing style is on point. It looks professional, and... Sleek ;) And also, apart from the punctuation marks, your grammar is all good. I wouldn't call it excellent, its good. Make sure of the use of punctuation next time.

3/5

CHAPTER 3

Okay, so this was my favourite. This describes a lot about the character, Lyeasrakardsul. And my another favourite, the sentences was well constructed. I like when it's a bit wordy, and thats a plus point.  

"Since the nightmares made sleep impossible anyway,"

this sentence, (optional) try adding their pronoun like " ....nightmares made his sleep impossible...."

4.5/5

Personally, as I said earlier, I had a professional experience by reading your book. I definitely see a potential here, and if I were a person  who loves this genre, I know I won't never be disappointed. Well, I can say your book is excellent. But there are some, very unnoticeable errors, but it doesn't ruin the energy.  

Final remarks,

Grammar-4.5/5

Writing style-5/5

Paragraph spacing-5/5

Clarity-4/5

Final remarks- 49/50

I'm sorry about the review being short. Also, I'll continue to review your book if you wish to continue.

Thank you so much for choosing me as your reviewer, I enjoyed working with you:)

Hope to see you again,

~Azra Abdul