Disclaimer-I tend to be judgmental and picky and will point out the slightest details. Apologies in advance ^_^

Lets start from the book cover and the tittle,

The book cover is good, it classy and the little description on the bottom looks perfect. The tittle though, I wouldn't call it unique, its an okay-ish one. 

I would rate it 4/5

Moving to the blurb,

Okay, what was that? I wouldn't call it a blurb though. A book blurb is the second thing a reader looks at before reading a book – the first being the book cover. Therefore, it should have an impact on prospective readers.

The blurb should include any information that represents the book best and intrigues the readers. 

Well in your blurb, there's only a sentence. I'd advice you to learn more about making a blurb and look out for inspiration. Here is my advice, when writing a blurb, first thing, it should be between 100-200 words. It should include anything about the character, or the story, or where it is taking place. You can ask few questions just to make the readers curious about the book. Do not add too many question too. And also, don't make the blurb too long.

I would rate this 1/5

Prologue,

Uhm, in short I would call it a-single-sentence-in-a-paragraph. Yes, its simply a paragraph that parted using commas, and questions. The prologue, isn't it. I like the energy, but, my apologies, your sentence construction and writing style is poor. I like that you are describing the atmosphere in a nice way, but it needs a lot of improvement. 

Also, I noticed this error in 2nd paragraph, 

"....and then it dawned on me that, He.."

There after comma, you can't capitalize 'He'. I would suggest you to change it to 'he'.

Also, after question mark, capitalize the first letter of the upcoming word.

"....but I was always his, the worst part? forever and, ....."

I would suggest you to change that  to "Forever..."

Also, in the first paragraph, what do you mean by incoming rain though? Is it currently raining or is the clouds dark and the weather looks like its going to rain? What is the energy and meaning here?

From a readers perspective, what I thought was that the people were taking shelter for the rain yet to come. I would advise you to try using a different adjective for it.

In the same paragraph, "....how many times he had disappeared and come back to me...."

'Come' is a present tense, and this sentence is in past tense, which means change that 'come' to 'came'. 

In the beginning of 2nd paragraph, "...But this time feels different.." I would like to say that, since you have broke the things above and opened a new paragraph, you should mention what feels different. You can simply add it and the sentence would look something like this,

"...But this time it feels different..."

"He was never mine, but I was always his, the worst part?"

What does that mean? What is the worst part here? Is it 'you being his' the worst part? 

Reading your prologue and the blurb, I can see that you have just started writing. And its okay! No one was perfect in their first try! Keep trying, keep editing and editing and keep writing and surely you'll be an amazing writer:)

I would rate this 1.5/5

CHAPTER 1

-In the first sentence, there is no full-stop. 

-In the second sentence, the first word "okay" is not capitalized. Again, same sentence there is no full-stop.

-Again, in the 4th paragraph didn't end with a full-stop.

"He has already secured a room, he knows you wouldn't like to share...."

Change that wouldn't to don't. See it makes a difference!

" He has already secured a room, he knows that you don't like to share..."

Again no full-stops. 

Woah! Toxic parents alert! Eeek! 

The way you portrayed her physical features was, my apologies, very poor. I'm sure you have many more amazing ideas to portray her better! It just takes some practice.

The plot, I felt its a bit cliché. But god knows what great ideas you are going to put in. 

There is a lot, I mean a lot of errors in it. The grammar, use of punctuation, word construction, character sketch and many more. I'd advise you to thoroughly read the chapter before you are going to publish it. You yourself should make sure it looks 100% perfect in your eyes and then publish it. I would also advise you to read and read the chapter, find errors on your own and edit the chapters as much as possible. 

I had pointed out a lot of errors but there is still more to be corrected and pointed out, but I can't point out everything. I hope you understand.

CHAPTER 2

"...everyone is basically chatting with themselves..."

This sentence here means that the kids in the room where talking to themselves, and not to the others if that's what you meant. I'd suggest you to change that to,

"...everyone was talking to each other..."    

Oh my friend, please make more use of full stops, instead of commas. Like you could just put full stop after the sentence, "...well not just me, and others, the professor wasn't here yet."

And the sentence above, is wrong whatsoever. "..well not just me..." is enough, I don't think "....and others" is needed there because there is other kids in the room and waiting for the professor is not only you, and it's obvious. Mentioning them was so extra.

Another common mistake in your book was not using proper tenses. I'd ask you to have a fixed tense. Like, are you narrating the story that took place in the past, or are you narrating the story that's currently happening? Like I could see you narrating the story as it took in the past and suddenly you change it into present tense. Make sure you have deep knowledge, at least basic knowledge of the tenses, modals and subject verb agreement. 

CHAPTER 3&4

Dear author, please make use of full-stops. You cant simple end sentences using commas. I would say you are over-using comma and not-at-all using full-stop.

I don't know this is weird, but I feel like I've read too many stories, with, eh, almost the same plot. I don't know were you are taking this, but, I feel too cliché. But maybe you have greater ideas in the end, who knows. On a readers perspective, the moment I read the first chapter, I swear, I knew how it would be, like she would do things which her 'catholic-strict' parents would never agree of.  And by 4th chapter, she had almost, or maybe craving for Xavier's touch. And maybe she's just gonna ditch her so-planned-future-husband who is very toxic, mind you, and go with Xavier, and Xavier might betray her or something, and so on. Her parents might disown her or maybe be very angry with her(of course). I feel like, if this is how you are going to take your story, twist it. We have read too many stories like this, we need something different. Maybe spent some time and think for long and come up with a plot twist no one would ever, ever expect. I'm not telling you to change the whole thing, just add some spices, garnish and make it a beautiful treat!

CHAPTER 5

" "You" he simply stated, keeping a good distance between us." 

First let me share my thoughts on this. I swear this is the 3rd book I read this same sentence. I'm not blaming you for it though, but this is too cliché. Wouldn't you mind spicing things up a bit rather than following up the same sentences and plot?

Second, the sentence, have a error, and when rewritten, it would look something like this.

"  "You," he simply said, keeping a safe distance from me."

Funny thing is that, you are messing up the basic part, and not the complicated ones. I would say you have good English, but not good knowledge in English. And don't stress much about it though, there is plenty of apps, YouTube channels and websites to help you out. You can also always reach me if you need any help.

Ending my work, here is my remarks,

Grammar- 3/5

Writing style- 2/5

Paragraph spacing- 4/5

Clarity- 3/5

Storyline-2/5

Plot-1/5

Chapter length-4/5

Character development- 2/5

Sentence construction- 2/5

FINAL REMARKS- 25/50

I, tbh, write a very strict review. My sincere and apologies if I ever sounded rude or discouraging. I mean, I was being brutally honest with my reviews and always will be. And, I want you guys to do the best and write the best of books. Once again please do understand, and I am very very sorry if I ever sounded discouraging. Your writing style only needs some improvement, which can be improved and corrected. I'm never discouraging you or being rude, I'm just trying to do my job. And to talk about me, I wrote this worst books in wattpad couple of years ago(lol yours is wayyy better in that case), but not to brag, currently I'm good at writing. It just takes time and practice. 

Don't give up and do your best. Remember writing is not just writing.

I enjoyed working with you, looking forward,

~Azra Abdul