Disclaimer: I tend to be judgmental and a bit picky, and also point out the slightest details. If I offended you in any way, please let me know and on advance, my sincere apologies.

Beginning with the title and book cover,

The title matches the vibe or the genre of your book. And is it an amazing one? I would say no, because I don't really see anything very appealing in it.

Moving to the book cover,

Lets see...Its an okay one. I'm not really into these kinda fan-fics and sadly I don't have a deep knowledge about these books. From a readers perspective, the cover is just okay. Its not the best out there. Maybe I don't have a taste in this kind of genre, who knows.

I would rate it a 3/5

The blurb,

Okay there is a typo, which is a whole mood ruin-er. In the first sentence, you had put the word 'just' twice. Another, what is up with all the 'normal'? Ariya is a normal girl, with normal friend, with normal mom...? It looked so bland and normal. Try using more adjectives for it. And if you have no idea about it, here is a tip. To make your essay/work more colorful, go to google and type the word, lets say normal, and try looking out for synonyms. Maybe I'll rewrite that sentence for you,

Ariya, a typical girl who later in her coming of age, discovers her unusual powers. She lives with her mother and family in ____(place/country/village/suburb). Her best friend(or friend) named ___ travels all around the world.....

There you go. You can more details and make if vibrant and with sufficient details. Remember, a blurb should contain 100-200 words.

I would rate it 2/5

CHAPTER 1

I don't know what up with the information you just provided about Ariya. Blood group and height? I don't know but is it really needed in the story? 

About the 'appearance', trust me sis, no one will ever read the whole thing. Tbh, I didn't even feel like reading it. When you give information about the character this way, it feels so bland. In most cases we push ourselves to read it. The best way to put these information is through the story. Like lets say someone(a character of the story) saw Ariya for the first time. Ariya can be described through them, or maybe she can also describe her physical features by herself. But if you want it  to be like this, then let it be, no worries.

CHAPTER 1

'I stand in a tree'...? You don't stand in a tree, you stand on a tree right? And also make sure you choose a tense for your story. Is it narrating the past(past tense) or is it being narrated(present tense) Make sure you stick with it. I would suggest to, change stand to stood. 

Reading your first chapter, I notice quite many grammar errors. I don't understand a lot of parts, ngl. Make sure you read thoroughly and correct the errors before you publish your story.

CHAPTER 2 

Another thing, when writing a conversation, try using them in new lines. Uhm, I'll show an example,

...."I see you've made your way back down safely. Good job buddies" I say as Cole gives me a high five...a paw four.

We pass...in the centre of town.

"We are back safe and sound granddad" Gemma says as I hold my hands with a smile. 

"Indeed you are my dear!"...

See, don't put them all in a paragraph. A paragraph is a distinct section of a piece of writing, usually dealing with a single theme and indicated by a new line, indentation, or numbering, and not a whole conversation squeazed up in it.

And the long paragraphs/squeazed up convos. Cut it down, make it look simple and easy to read. 

CHAPTER 3

The last few lines of the 3rd paragraph. 

"...........D'you mind"...

I feel that much full stops look so unprofessional. I'll tell you what kid, I would advice that only 3 dots/full stops is really needed. Don't make it more than three or less than 3. Try doing that from now on. Its called an ellipsis punctuation mark.

Upon reading your story, I felt more like an Okay one, I'm still confused in some parts of the story. Try re-reading and editing your book soon. 

As per my review request, in order to get reviews for more than 7 chapters, you need to complete the payment, which you haven't. Please check it and the next part of your book will be reviewed. If I'm wrong, please do correct me, thank you.

Ending my review, here is my final remarks,

Grammar- 2/5

Writing style- 3/5

Paragraph spacing 3/5

Clarity-3/5

Storyline-4/5

Plot-4/5

Chapter length-4/5

Character development-1/5

Sentence construction-2/5

Final remarks- 36/50

My sincere apologies for the late review. Thank you so much for choosing me as your reviewer. 

I enjoyed working with you, looking forward,

~Azra Abdul