The best mistakes by saylradeth

Cover :

- Overall cover aesthetics are fit . It's presentable and eye-catching too . I would suggest you move the tag line as a subtitle line down below i.e swap the place of " a novel " and "love makes you do things you knew you were never capable of " . I personally liked the beach vibes in cover but does it really fit the motive and story line of your book?

Blurb :

The burb is too long and dry . Readers do read blurb but only if something catches their eye they might continue reading it . Maybe using of a quote from your book or a plot for ex : They were the best delivering batsman , clashing path in spain -

In your case it can be : kayra mehta a foreign student, come to Vancouver . A simple plan study hard, embrace independence, and ultimately settle down in the vibrant city

These never ending feelings have to stop . He knew it, she knew it too . Overshadowed by her upcoming return to her homeland . A forbidden fruit that they have sown would wither under the harsh reality of their circumstances . . will they be able to save this forbidden feeling ?

Starting :

A simple quote or a dialogue are the best way to start your book for a suspenseful yet an interesting start for the story . You truly caught me up with the father text scenarios and quite relatable isn't it . A very single text from your father can be a death alive situation for us all .

Tip :

Before -

Ruby Song, my first ever friend here and current roommate.

After -

To , Ruby Song, my first friend in this state / unknown place / new city and now my roommate

Towering over her at six feet one, She tilted her head up, her gaze meeting mine, and I couldn't help but notice the height difference

You need to work more on author -pov message delivering . . There were some places where the same kind of tips could be used. I would suggest seeing them like notes and feature expressions , cut down the big connecting words and replace them with an action, a metaphoric sign to give a natural view as a proof .

Overall :

The author caught me again and didn't let my surprise go down on how you depicted the protagonist's mischievous nature and her natural talent in drama & play. Rubbing her eyes off preparing herself to make a quick scene and situation for The book is truly amazing life amazing. The grammar is up to mark. Taking the scenario rather than using words like 'hiss' 'ouch' etc to explain the emotion or cause. I read the story far ahead than mentioned and it was truly heartwarming that the female protagonist wanted to pursue her dreams. She was determined to make her dreams a reality. She didn't want to be called out as just the daughter of her father or just her husband's wife. She wanted her independent identity. It was captivating and encouraging as a reader to find books still carrying a sense and commotion for females not just blending them into the hands of the males and changing their mindset for a submissive nature in the form of obedience and sacrifices. Overall the story is a perfect blend of clumsy and risk-taking friends, emotions, bonds understanding a perfect teen understanding book. I highly recommend this book to be read.

Reviewer seo's note :

I hope the review given by me helped you to reflect upon your book once again . Best wishes to you and your book ahead in the journey of prospering and writing .

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