Book: Admiring the Light
Author: Fleet1284
Reviewer: Iamjustasapien
Chapters read: 7

Cover:
Well, if I am being blunt, the cover is simple and not really eye-catching. It's due to two factors. Firstly, is the font style and colour. Although I agree there is beauty in simplicity, but I highly recommend the author to change the font style and colour. You can use the app 'Canva' to change the font style, it really helps.

Secondly, the odd blue background surrounding the title just feels out of place. I recommend the author to remove it. However, I do appreciate the smiling face that greets me, as a reader, once I set eyes on your book. It piques the readers' attention and curiosity. Once I read the title and saw the cover, I just could not help but click on your book! So, good job on that! 

Suggestion: You can add a quote on the cover as well, to catch a reader's attention.

Title:
'Admiring the Light' is such a unique title choice. It really catches the readers' attention and starts brewing questions in their minds. I have no complaints against your title. Good job!

Blurb:
"Friendless and timid, Guinevere is stuck in her socially anxious shadow, content to let her sister lead and live a sheltered life. Without Natalie pushing her to break out of her comfort zone, she'd be trapped in fear...."

Is a good start! I, as a reader, would just read a few lines of the blurb and just drop the book if it isn't interesting, just to be honest here. And your book just made me wonder more about Guinevere and about the rest of the characters mentioned in the blurb. I could not help but just explore your masterpiece futher, as a reader, once I read the blurb.

In conclusion, the blurb is well-written and paints a vivid image into the (once) blank canvas of the reader's mind.

Plot:
To be honest, I haven't read a lot of chapters due to personal reasons but I have to admit your writing is just flawless! I just love how you have started with such a good opening!

""Natalie, three pointer-" Olivia grunted, clenching her teeth as she thrust the ball across the court to the tallest player of the team, seeing that she was open to receive. Her expression tightened in anticipation as she watched a defender aggressively try to swipe at the ball. But she sighed in relief when she heard the satisfying bounce of rubber on the wood, sprinting to get back into an open position."

It just sets right into action and hooks the reader asap. The visual image painted by your flawless writing is just spectacular. I personally, I loved how you added many adjectives to just enhance the experience altogether. Moving on, your plot is not too slow nor too fast. But there is one problem, that just ruins the reading experience.

You mash up too many scenes in one chapter.

As a reader, I had to scroll up or just move to the previous chapter to recall what had happened before. Now, this can't be applicable to everyone as memory works different for everyone, but I highly recommend the author to try splitting one big chapter into small parts, or adding a flashback/summary of the previous chapter. Lastly, please do add the translation of Spanish or any other language in the chapter(s), since, most in wattpad don't understand that language.

Apart from this, I have no complaints against the plotline. It is well crafted. Good job!

Character development:
Well, well, well, to be honest I haven't read all the chapters in your book due to my busy schedule. Therefore, I can't say much on the character development. However, I have to admit the characters are well-written! I personally love Natalie! Her cheerful and boisterous personality is just so fun and humorous. And I love how she is the tallest in her friend group, which makes her quite relatable to tall girls (like myself).

And Lola is such a lovely girlfriend! She is the perfect match for Natalie, as she herself is a bit similar to her. I love how she can read Natalie like real lovers can. And not to mention Guinevere just opens up to her sister and acts different from a 'shy and timid' girl. The characters, their interactions seem quite realistic, which is a huge plus point in your book. Well done!

Grammar and vocabulary:
Well, here is where most stumble. But you don't, in fact I could find a single grammatical mistake in your book, apart from a few misplaced commas. Your vocabulary is really strong and not to mention your unique wiring style just feels natural and realistic. I have no complaints against your grammar or vocabulary, keep writing!

Improvements need to be done:
I have mentioned in the 'Plot' section, you can split a big chapter into smaller chunks, for easy reading. I do have a suggestion, you can make banners for your masterpiece to enhance the reading experience! Although, the plot line matters in a book, banners are the first ones to catch a reader's attention (in my opinion). Again this is just a small suggestion, you are not obligated to do that. Moving one, as I mentioned in the 'Cover' section, do work on the font style and colour.

Overall Enjoyment:
Your book was really enjoyable! The characters are well-written and hooked the reader due to their realistic interactions and gestures. I personally, just love the originality of your work. I personally had to read it thrice or twice, since, I was just so engrossed in your book that I overlooked that fact that I should be reviewing this masterpiece! Moving on, your book has the potential to reach heights but few factors are holding you down. Fix that and shine bright! Thank you.

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