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- Reviewer Nemo -

𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 3.5/10
A picture with the title placed and the author's name at the bottom. That is all that I can call that cover. It is clearly just a picture cut out of Yoongi with no editing and extra changes made to serve the purpose of a cover.
Adding in details from the story- using a proper face claim that resembles the character from the story with ethical emotions displayed resembling the storyline, a creative edit to highlight the features of the pic to make it look like a real cover, using creativity and adding in a touch of your own idea to make it unique.
All these are necessary aspects of the cover just as a cover is a vital part of a story book.
You can request a graphic shop or an experienced graphic designer to help with the cover or if you want to make one of your own then it's up to you to learn the techniques and develop a unique and pretty cover for your book.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 1.5/5
Other than its similarity with the story, it's not intriguing, creative or different. It's not something unique, and as an Army I know it's the title of a song of theirs too.
I suggest sticking to the idea of the feeling of home but then again trying to find a better and fancy title that attracts the readers to the book.

𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 1/10
Apart from an Introduction to the overall plot I don't see how it stands out, claims to be creative, or is unique from the rest out there.
It seems to be a simple description of the feeling of home and how that emotion is related to the story. Other than that it doesn't talk in detail about the plot or how the plot takes a turn.
There are a few necessary elements we all look for in a Blurb like; quotes, summary of plot, an intriguing element, and anything that makes the Blurb unique and intriguing (cliffhanger/different writing style).
You can try to rewrite the Blurb a few times so it gets better each time. Once you are satisfied with the writing and vocabulary, the final outcome should look much better than your first one.

𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 19/25
As far as I have read I don't see any major plot twists but the pace at which the story flows is interesting.
The plot was fascinating. To the part I read it's simple and moves at a slow pace. There is nothing unique or different about the overall storyline but the way you have executed it makes the reading enjoyable.
Make sure to keep the balance and flow and not rush events or slow down too much in further chapters.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 6/10
Again it was simple and common. By that I mean there weren't any out of the box characters. Interactions that can be considered non-cliche weren't present. All the feelings and emotional development described were very good, yet I looked for a unique intriguing element that was missing throughout.
Yoongi, the Han sisters and their enmity, Eunho and the rest of the Han family, Namjoon and Hoseok were all common characters with very simple and generalized character traits that are commonly seen in many people. During the date too the female OC's reaction to Yoongi's intimidating self and Yoongi's actions throughout were all logical and well planned, there wasn't anything weird or uncommon yet something that beautifully suited the flow. When certain twisted characters are found in the story it intrigues the readers, Makes them think in the specific characters perspective, question their decisions, etc.
All that makes the story enjoyable and read worthy. See that the plot is influenced by the characters and their decisions or personality. Don't let the plot limit to the initial storyline.

𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 8/15
A simple, sweet and normal writing style that's what I'd call it. All the descriptions were pretty and well explained yet not elaborate or exaggerated. The conversations were all brief and well drafted.
With more practice and further writing, there is still room for improvement. Trying to replace constantly used words with synonyms, alternating between active and passive writing, using literary devices frequently in descriptions, etc can help beautify your writing style with time.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 15/20
The grammar part had a lot of visible errors. It was mainly your sentence structure and tense usage, where after the usage of the present tense for the first verb is to be followed by the usage of the past or present tense, you have used the participle form of the verb. These errors are minor but when caught frequently creates a hindrance in smooth reading.
To pick out certain lines from the story-
I wanted to caress her cheeks and said it was okay to cry
I wanted to caress her cheeks and say that it was okay to cry
The past form of the verb want (wanted) is to be followed by the present form of say (say).
"You're okay?"
"Are you okay?"
Framing questions, this one repeated every time Yoongi asked his date if she was okay.
The rest of the english was perfect without any major errors so I suppose your English is strong enough. Thus only proofreading of every chapter before publishing would be necessary to avoid such mistakes, or if you think you can't correct such errors then get the help of a good editor.
The vocabulary or word choice was rather blunt to be frank. When it comes to writing of a novel or story, they all come under creative writing and thus a specific word choice is followed for example,
The scenery consisted of -
(here the verb consisted can be changed to something else like,)
The scenery incorporated the evening hues of-
The only difference in both the sentences is the change in verb- now this isn't a binding rule but if you look out for such changes it brings about a better feel to the story, and makes the writing creative and divergent.

𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 3/5
According to me, the reading was very entertaining for I loved the time I spent reading the chapters. But I see room for more improvement that could bring the story to a higher level of perfection.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 56/100

𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 ::
The writer's strengths would be the current plot, characters and pace balance. Their writing and ability to keep the story interesting and well executed works as a big plus point.
The weakness would be lack of descriptive writing experience and the frequent occurrence of grammatical mistakes.
I suggest proofreading or getting help from an editor, changing the book cover and focus on making the novel more unique and creative in every aspect.

Hope this review was helpful and I hope to see better works of yours in future. All the best!

TaesNemo

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