STARRYEONJUN

- Reviewer Nana -

Book cover- 3/10

It fits the concept and gives off the warm vibe shown in the whole book, however...the creator could use more elements, quotes or subtitles to decorate it. It looks a bit too spacey; adding a title or author's name/username should be the least done thing perhaps.

Title-6/10

I really liked how it was straightforward and quite interesting, though...I would suggest you to use the words in a more interesting way like "The story of Him & Hea" or take a quote/line used in the story which connects to the plot efficiently. For instance, "Create a home of our own"

Description- 13/15

The blurb really was charming and interesting, I like the way it describes the plot whilst interesting the readers who love these kinds of work. Although, the chosen lines were good however there were some grammatical mistakes, for instance: "Oh love, let us run away And land in a place, not known." Here, you should add either ellipsis or period to have "A" capitalized or write it in lowercase with a comma after run away.

Storyline- 15/20

The story contained one of the tropes I love! The plot was perfectly planned out but the storyline needs some improvement... like adding more about their life, and maybe some more scenarios of them meeting up with each other.

Characters- 8/10

The characters were meticulously described except for Taehyung, you could add more about his facial features. They had major developments which were at the time but I'll suggest you to add more scenarios representing their life before and after they met—it'll help in getting a better idea of who they really are. I would also suggest you to add a few side characters to have a fun journey and spice things up a little.

Dialogue Delivery- 14/15

The dialogues framed were acceptable and fine, but the tags were missing at times, I would suggest you to add them in order to eschew confusion from the readers.

Grammar & Vocab-12/20

Punctuation: There were times when the sentences were supposed to have a period but went on with a comma or some other punctuation and vise-versa. For instance, "The mighty sun had completely risen by then and life was gradually returning to the lanes and roads after a long night of November." This should have been, "The mighty sun had completely risen by then, life gradually returned to its lanes and roads—after a long night of November. "You could also add " ; " after "roads"

Structuring: Sometimes, I thought the sentences could change it's position. For example, "He was dazed, tons of vibrant blossoms appearing to cool his sight." This could have been written like, "Tons of vibrant blossoms appeared to cool his sight as he was left dazed by them." Also, whilst you write, try not to leave spaces or make extra short/long sentences.

Words: At times, I saw that the words were misspelled or not there. For instance, "hs" instead of "he" and "The tall brunette, her body warmed up"... instead of "The tall brunette asked"

Strengths:  Ingenuity, creativeness and aesthetic. The book really abides by these things.

Weakness: The work was actually pretty good and seemed to have no weakness as such but you need to work on the grammar and a bit on the lead character's factual description.

Suggestion: I would suggest you to read books with advanced grammar, practice writing on a daily basis and brainstorm ideas to keep yourself updated and flawless. You can also work on the description of the character's facial features and life so that when the readers read, they know how they exactly are, otherwise...they might face difficulty in understanding, relating and imagining them.

Personal opinion: I loved reading this book and it's actually good, just a little bit of fixing here and there; and I believe it would be perfect! Great efforts are appreciated and so are yours, best of luck for your future stories! I'll be looking forward to them.

Total-71/100

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