My_Mochi_MoLaLa

- Reviewer Nemo -

𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 6/10

The cover matches the depressed vibe of separation and being lost.

The fonts are the main problem, though, and the title and author's name are not visible at all.

A font that is subtle and doesn't dominate the background, and at the same time is also readable and clearly visible would be a better choice.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 2/5

"Waiting for you" only conveys the expectation and yearning for someone to come back. But, it doesn't talk about or show the pain and anxiety that the female protagonist had to go through while waiting for her boyfriend to come back safe and alive from the war. It also doesn't convey the heaviness of the subject you have written about.

I recommend a better title that would be able to present the feeling of separation and loss. Something that shows the anticipation the female protagonist has while the male protagonist is at war, and likewise Jungkook's fear and love for Eunbi. A phrase that can show how much they miss each other and wait to meet again would make a better title.

𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 3/10

The blurb only consists of quotes from the story. There is no mention whatsoever of the plot or introduction to the characters. In addition, it's not creative or eye-catching in any way.

Maybe include a short explanation of the plot. Give the readers an insight on what they're about to read. Have a creative writing style that gets the readers' attention. Adding in a few cliffhangers or sentences that can make the blurb intriguing and unique, gets the reader curious on what's going to happen next.

𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 19/25

The overall flow of the plot and pace is slow.

Frequently added plot twists can make it more interesting and keep the readers hooked to the story. Other than that it's good.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 8/10

The characters seem pretty stable with common character traits.

The flow is good as well, with the plot and the interaction of characters.

Continue the pace and it will be perfect.

𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 11/15

It is simple and good-sounding. But the writing emotions and thoughts of the characters in italics makes it stand out and separated from the rest of the story. It feels like the characters thoughts are out of reality and the pace and happening are separate.

Blending in such portions of writing, along with the conversation between characters and with the flow of the situation, would make it more appropriate. Using the description of humanistic gestures while the character is saying something can also help portray what they feel at the same time.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 18/20

It's pretty much balanced and well written. There isn't anything I have to point out or say specifically.

A little proofreading will be helpful as I see a few unnoticed grammatical mistakes here and there.

𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 3/5

I thoroughly enjoyed reading the book and feel it's completely a read-worthy book. Having pointed out the pros and cons, I'd say that following them and continuously writing will make it perfect.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 70/100

𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 ::

The plot is perfectly worded out and executed well.

The characters and heavy emotions are a plus point that helps the story and the description has been written really well.

That would be one of your strengths, but at the same time, lack of unique writing style can be a weakness. This is because writing out emotions and situations with a twisted and creative writing style can bring about a difference to the simple story.

The writing works both as a weakness and a strength here but nevertheless, it was fun to read the book and write up a review for it.

I personally, as a reader, enjoyed reading it. I'm hoping to see more of your works in future!!

I hope the tips and current review helped improve. 

TaesNemo

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