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- Reviewer Koo -

BOOK COVER: 9/10

The font used is pretty and readable. The picture used is also attractive. Though I would suggest the use of a subtitle: a quote, a dialogue or anything as such. It makes it more intriguing.

TITLE: 9/10

The title suits the story as it starts off with 'rejection'. And it's not a title that is seen everywhere. I was attracted to the title.

DESCRIPTION: 12/15

I liked the fact that you used an excerpt for description and you have also provided the necessary information that a reader might need to know before starting to read. But I would suggest giving a summary, without actually breaking the mystery to make the reader curious and smash that 'READ' button.

STORY LINE: 14/20

The plot as I noticed, was a very common trope of 'bully-to-lover', No complains though-However, there was a frequent change in POV, which confused me slightly. I understand that you have used the POV of other characters to demonstrate their perspective of a situation, but it makes the story a bit haphazard. Either, you can go by the first-person POV and allow the other characters to narrate their incidents. Or go for the third-person POV which will make it easier for you to describe too.

CHARACTERS: 5/10

There haven't been major character developments, but that is fine because I like stable characters. However, it is hard to understand some characters. Sometimes they act something and other times they're different. I'm not saying that's wrong, it's just that, it doesn't go well with the story. Another thing I want to point out is, you have confused some characters with others, and changed the name out of nowhere which made it confusing. (I suppose that was a typo error and not intentional).

DIALOGUE DELIVERY: 9/15

Your dialogue delivery can be improved. There were grammatical errors and some dialogues did not make sense, or were used in the wrong situation. I would also suggest making these dialogues impactful, so that they influence the readers in some way or the other. Everyone wants their work to be remembered and by doing this, readers might remember the story.

GRAMMAR & VOCAB: 10/20

There have been a lot of grammatical errors. You have shown confusion between the tenses, the pronouns and sentence formation. There have also been several typo errors with not just characters (as I've mentioned before) but with several words and I had quite a hard time trying to infer the meaning out of it. Don't take me rudely please, I'm just pointing out your mistakes. They can always be resolved. The vocabulary also needs improvement. There are many places where you could've used a specific word to save yourself from giving unnecessary explanation.

TOTAL: 68/100

WEAKNESS AND STRENGTH:

Your weakness as it seems is grammar and sentence formation and there needs to be some improvement. You should also go through your story once more to edit out the typo errors.

And your strength is - as I always say - your imagination [okay I sound like an old granny here somehow]. Despite your story line being a common one, you have added your own imagination which is a plus point and appreciative too. If you just make the mentioned changes and go through it once more, I'm quite sure it'd be a masterpiece.

[A COMMON TIP I GIVE TO EVERYONE : I saw in some author's notes, that you said Wattpad has erased your draft. You can use Google Docs to draft your story and then paste it on Wattpad when done. It also points out the grammar mistakes and gives you suggestions to make your writing better.]

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