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- Reviewer Nemo -

𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 3/10
It was pretty bad and messed up. Overly blurry and unclear. The glitch filter used ruined the clarity and vibe.
Try going for a subletter filter that contributes to providing a dark theme but also ensures that it doesn't ruin the face claim and external elements that relate to the plot.
Cause when I saw the cover I lost all my motivation to review the book, cause it wasn't something I'd call attractive or alluringly unique. But when I read the content I realised how the cover actually pulled down the story's first impression.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 1.5/5
Compared to the story and plot I'd frankly call it not creative at all. With a complex plot and strong characters like that, the title could have been a dashing and powerful one that matched the storyline.
I get that agent B-13 is the protag and thus his code has been kept as a title but I still insist going for a better one that includes the vibe and theme of the plot; murder crime and action.

𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 5.5/10
I'm disappointed how with a good hold on Grammar your Blurb contains the basic but vital mistake of tense shift. It starts with simple present,
Who puts her life in line-
And shifts to past,
Many would say-
The shift from simple present (puts) to the past (would/could) was unnecessary and I suggest keeping the whole Blurb in the past form meaning change only the first sentence.
While that was about the Grammar, the Blurb on the whole was satisfying, with good minimalistic content and interesting cliffhangers.

𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 16/25
It's started off well, I enjoyed reading the initial chapters and would love to read more.
But to give a review about the plot, I don't think I can say much apart from how it took off. The reason being, I can judge or analyse with the knowledge of just 8 chapters of the story.
But I should say although the pace is slow, the execution of the plot idea is very nice so far. Keep it up and make sure to follow this pace and not disturb the flow of the story by rushing or slowing down events.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 4/10
Again so far the character of ashlyn is only clear enough and the other characters have only been introduced.
To judge a character and give my opinion I'd need a good insight on the development of the character and their hidden traits.
But so far Ashlyn's character is consistent and interesting. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more.
Keep in mind don't generalise the character traits of each character and ensure each of them stand out for their own uniqueness.

𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 14/15
It's precise and to the point. Explicit description and simple pointing out of the changes and features of the characters and situations.
Following the same for all kinds of descriptions like fight scenes and all the gruesome parts would be perfect. Keep up the same work and ensure you don't change your writing style at any point.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 19/20
I felt the few chapters I read were thoroughly edited ones. Thus there were remarkable errors. It was almost perfect despite the fact that English isn't your first language. (mentioned in the disclaimer)
Remember to proofread and to improve or get a first hand criticism. I suggest you get a beta reader to read through once the whole story is completed. This would help in knowing what the thoughts of the readers are and how you might have to change or modify the writing in future.

𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 3/5
As a reader I thoroughly enjoyed the book and felt the real thrill reading it. It disappointed me to see that only a few chapters have been published and I wasn't able to give a proper opinion on the writing.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 67/100

𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 ::
For strengths almost everything about the story and plot is good. Your writing style, the way you make the emotions look thrilling, the pace of the plot and the very content. The story has started off well and I appreciate the impression you have created in my mind.
For weaknesses i don't really find anything to point out but maybe the graphics (book and banners) were maybe a bit too much cause compared to the theme of the story- the life as an undercover cop in disguise- the over was too simple and messed up and the banners seem heavily edited giving it a fantasy vibe. This Could be just me but I'd suggest getting a better cover and banners made from graphic shops.

Hoping to read more of the story and hope this review was helpful.
Good luck!

TaesNemo

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