Nia699

- Reviewer Nemo -

𝙱𝚘𝚘𝚔 𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛: 0/10

Yes, I have given the book cover a straight zero because of two reasons.

First, the book cover is a random fanart taken from a platform like Pinterest where fanarts are often posted. Fanarts are copyrighted works of artists and people who look to promote their talent and work. Thus, using the fan art as a book cover is plagiarism. Plagiarism is strictly prohibited.

Second, the book cover must compulsorily have the title and author name. Without both it can never be considered a book cover.

Therefore, it would be better if the cover was changed to one with customized graphics and designs giving off the right vibe similar to that of the story, with the proper title and author's name mentioned on it as well. If not then it looks as if the picture is there just for the sake of it, which again is not the purpose of a book cover.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎: 3/10

Now, the title "Roses" is not eye-catching or intriguing in any way. The word in itself simply means a flower, but there are plenty of other meanings it can convey, so it is not specifically tailored to your book in any way. The emphasis on words like that has to be brought in with the help of other words— often adjectives or complete phrases are used for this purpose.

So to say, your current title would not create interest or attract readers to read your book because it is too simple.

I suggest changing the title, perhaps by adding an adjective, or change it altogether to a unique noun or adjective (the meaning of which should be related to the story, plot, or even the personality of a particular character from the story).

𝙳𝚎𝚜𝚌𝚛𝚒𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗: 4/15

The description as I can see gives an opening to the sequel of the first book 'Roses', but irrespective of it being a sequel or not, the blurb/description should contain an introduction to the current plot with other elements that intrigue the readers to read the book.

The plot and story may be a continuation of the first book, but the description/blurb should still contain necessary content like a short summary of what the second book is about, cliffhangers of plot twists that are a part of the sequel, dialogues of characters, etc., that gives the readers insight and attracts them further to read your book. You can also give hints on what changes take place in this book, and/or how the character's personality and decisions change.

𝚂𝚝𝚘r 𝚢𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚎: 5/20

First I would like to point out that I had to write this review based on the seven chapters that were published, and according to the content I read the plot hadn't progressed at all and I didnt get any clue about what the storyline was focused on.

As far as I have read, the new character Irene was introduced assuming that Namjoon, Jin, and Areum were old characters introduced in the first book. Irene playing the antagonist's role and Areum falling prey to her tricks were all common scenes used in almost all cliché fanfictions.

If this story wasn't meant to be cliché then I propose you come up with a different approach that is unique and more complex.

Apart from the cliché plot I can't properly judge the storyline any further since the story has not progressed yet, so that is all.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜: 7/10

The characters were pretty consistent I can give you that, but they were typical kinds that are very common.

For example, take Irene's character: she seems to be the typical, two-faced woman that's willing to do anything to get Namjoon away from Areum. Namjoon and Areum make a beautiful couple no doubt, but their characters go too well together and the sync is too perfect so it seems unrealistic. Jin is as always the elder, caring and affectionate, mature and understanding type.

You should try to make the characters more complex and well-built, and give their personalities more interesting elements. By this I mean making the characters imperfect and unique, giving them specific weaknesses, uncommon and/or weird interests, different preferences and priorities, etc.. Make them stand out in a completely unique, defined way.

𝙳𝚒𝚊𝚕𝚘𝚐𝚞𝚎 𝙳𝚎𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎𝚛𝚢: 3/15

Dialogues are the words spoken by the characters in the present and are always written in direct speech. That is inside double quotes: "I broke the vase," she confessed.

It is something like this.

All the dialogues written in the story were simply written in bold letters and italics at times. That is definitely wrong and is not acceptable. Change them to direct speech written with correct punctuation marks.

Also action tags after dialogues occasionally are also necessary, by this I mean describing what the person does while saying their dialogues. For example:

"she is Sara, my best friend," Kate said, skipping around cheerfully.

The words in quotes were Kate's dialogue and the words that followed after describing what Kate was doing at the moment give the readers a better idea of the situation.

If the concept of direct and indirect speech is new to you, then I suggest reading articles related to it and getting familiarized with the concept before starting to write dialogues again.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢: 11/20

Your grammar is not terrible but it isn't very good either. At certain places the sentence structure is all messed up and/or not appropriate. For example:

He said and I nodded and he smiled at me and I smiled back.

This sentence has too many conjunctions (and). Writing it this way:

I nodded in reply as he smiled at me. Walking up to him I sweetly smiled back.

Here I break it into two sentences, including adjectives and other information like 'sweetly smiled' and 'walking up to him' which makes it sound more pleasing and have a better flow.

Check for simple spelling errors and grammatical mistakes by proofreading before publishing. Also, conjugate verbs correctly and put them in the right tense. For example, there isn't any word called 'putted', the past tense of 'put' is always 'put'.

There were a few other minor mistakes that you might want to rectify by proofreading or with the help of an experienced editor if you think you can't do it on your own.

Coming to vocabulary now, the standard in which you have written is very low or to say amateur. It is simple English that we use in informal or colloquial everyday situations. When writing a novel/story, a higher standard of vocabulary is often expected and thus that gives the work a professional vibe.

Wider knowledge of words, unique writing style, larger range of vocabulary and word choice, and knowledge of punctuation— all of these are necessary traits every writer is required to have. You can gain all this with more writing practice, reading good books (may it be fanfictions or traditionally published books by well known authors), increasing your vocabulary, and familiarizing yourself with newer words.

𝕋𝕠𝕥𝕒𝕝: 33/100

𝑆𝑡𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑔𝑡ℎ𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑊𝑒𝑎𝑘𝑛𝑒𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠:

I don't think I have much to say except repeating what I said before, that is to increase your vocabulary, and be creative with your characters and plot. The whole story is yours to write so play with it, have fun and make it creative and interesting to read.

With effort and time you will be able to write better in the future. Hope to see more of your works. 

TaesNemo

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