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✧ JUDGE : Sugaga777 ✧

Baby in the Box by writer_tee

BOOK COVER : 3/5
The cover of the book is edited well and is neat yet is not eye-catchy. The font is simple yet good. The cover is a perfect image of the story. In my opinion, you should make another cover to catch the reader's attention.

BOOK TITLE : 4.5/5
The book title is relevant to the story, it is a perfect title for this book. It is eye-catching. I felt excited as I read the title and it's perfect for the plot. The subtitle was suitable for the story.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 8/10
The blurb is in perfect length and describes the story well, the blurb seems so condensed that it feels boring to read... I mean you should leave some space and make them 4 line paragraphs. The blurb is written nicely without spoilers, which is a great thing.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
As I said when I read the title of the story, it made me excited to read further and I thought it was really interesting to read the chapters. I like how you designed all the characters in the story.

PLOT : 20/20
The plot of the story is like I never read this kind of story, it is amazing to read. I experienced a new world you designed. You added all the things needed and they blend very well with each other.

CHARACTERS : 9.5/10
As I said the characters you designed were cool they have their perfect personality, and emotions and showed character development.

STYLE OF WRITING : 10/10
Your style of writing is nice and neat. It's easy to understand everything well and the dialogues are interesting too. I like how funny you made the dialogue.

PACE : 10/10
The pace of the story is good, smooth and on point.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 8/10
There were no grammatical mistakes found by me, your vocabulary is casual and suits the story atmosphere. I found that in some places you didn't put punctuation but it was not an issue, furthermore, there were no spelling mistakes.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 9/10
I loved this book and I want fanfic lovers to read it. This book has a unique plot which is fun to read. The scenarios are captivating. You just need a good cover and a properly written blurb... Other things are good.

TOTAL : 91.5/100

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Working with Vampires by Seamlesslove

BOOK COVER : 2/5
The cover of the book is neat yet is not eye-catching. The font is placed so up it's hard to read. The font should be placed a little below...In my opinion, you should make another cover to catch the reader's attention. I know it's hard to make an OT7 cover as you have to include all the members...

BOOK TITLE : 3/5
The title of the story is big yet suitable for the story yet it seems that it can have a better title. The title is attention-catching.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 9.5/10
The blurb is in proper length and it describes the story well. It is captivating and made me wanna read further. It did give a big but mysterious spoiler.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
To be honest, I never thought it would be this way, the story turned out to be impressive at first sight. I really liked the intro of the characters and the prologue you wrote.

PLOT : 20/20
The plot is unique and I have not read such a plot related to BTS as vampires in any fanfiction book. It's original and really interesting. I have nothing much to say...

CHARACTERS : 10/10
The character design was really interesting, especially since Jimin was a mystery and still is. They show nice character development!

STYLE OF WRITING : 8/10
The writing style is really good but the mysterious POVs... it was difficult to understand you wrote two mysterious POVs simultaneously so it was really confusing. The dialogue was good.

PACE : 10/10
The pace is good, perfect I must say.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 8/10
Your grammar is good and you have a nice vocabulary yet I found some deformed sentences in a line. Other than that everything is good. Punctuation is on point.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
I liked this book. It has a nice story, I can say even though it's just 6 chapters. You just have to make improvements in the above-mentioned which will make this story perfect.
For mysterious POVs, you can combine them into normal Another POV or you can write it afterwards.

TOTAL : 88/100

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The Dead Soul by g-gukkie-e

BOOK COVER : 2/5
The cover suits the story well and is well-edited. It's neat, to be honest, yet didn't actually attract the readers as only a girl is displayed on the cover. The font is visible yet it's small to read. In my opinion, make a new cover.

BOOK TITLE : 3/5
The title is good and uncommon, and the phrase 'The dead soul' represents the main lead of the story as per I think. The subtitle is clear to read yet it should stand out but it did not.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 5/10
The blurb was a quick piece, it didn't even start yet ended. Try to write a descriptive blurb even though this blurb captivates me to read the story further. It doesn't give any spoilers other than that the main lead is getting 7 stepbrothers.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9.5/10
At first, I thought it would be the same boring and childish Step brother and step-sister story but it was not. It was really some real case. Like it has self-harm as you mentioned the main lead has some bad past. It really captivates me to read further.

PLOT : 20/20
The plot was something else, it was mysterious yet a kind of drama. I liked the plot. It made me read further yet it was hard to understand some parts and I am waiting for another chapter!

CHARACTERS : 9/10
When I read the character sketch it seemed so familiar to me, yes it was familiar to me yet it suits well on them, they do show character development.

STYLE OF WRITING : 6.5/10
So this is the main point you should focus on. Like your writing style is good but not the normal novel type that all write. Your writing style is kind of beginner-type, sorry if I offend you...

Instead of writing like this :

KNOCK KNOCK

??-Y/NAAHHHHHHH WAKE UP YOU WILL BE LATE FOR SCHOOL....

Y/N-Just 5 minutes more Mom.

You can write like this :

The sun walked its way up and the sky wore a beautiful dress, it was morning yet a girl was sleeping recklessly when sires of knock occurred on her door.

"Y/N-AHH!! WAKE UP!! YOU WILL BE LATE FOR YOUR SCHOOL!!!" An ear-piercing sound echoed through the door nevertheless couldn't wake the girl up.

"Just 5 minutes more Mom," she murmured in her sleep but this was audible to her mom.

Something like this would make you explain all the actions and emotions at once. Rest all were good to go.

PACE : 8/10
Somewhere the pace was fast and somewhere it was slow. But it was fine tho.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 8/10
There were grammatical mistakes in some sentences, but your vocabulary is good to go with and suitable for the atmosphere of the story. You used some unnecessary punctuation and in some places, you didn't. The sentence had no spelling mistakes.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
In my opinion, the story is good, the plotting is fine, and the characters are designed well, but some things like the cover, writing style, etc needed to be improved. If you improve it, I think this book will reach another level. You can use Grammarly to correct your grammar.

TOTAL : 79/100

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Thank you so much for participating in the BTS September Awards. I was really happy to host this Award and it's been a new experience all along.

I would like to show my gratitude to the Judges for helping me out throughout this and to the participants for making this Award a competitive one with their amazing books.

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