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✧ JUDGE : Nehxaa__ ✧

Stay at home by Yeahidonthavethink

BOOK COVER : 4/5
The book cover is good and it matches with the story. It almost matches with the aesthetic that's portrayed here. The story's title on the cover can be seen, but the words written in smaller fonts are only visible enough to see, not to read. The moon looks good but it feels unnecessary. As the story is not completed yet, maybe the moon will have importance in the story in future.

BOOK TITLE : 4/5
The name of the story is unique and uncommon. It basically explains about the characters are related with the 'home'. It might definitely make the readers curious. But as unique as it sounds, it still feels like the author can improve the name more to be appropriate enough for the story. But for now, as the story is still ongoing and under editing, it is hoped that the author will think of the matter in the near future.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 9/10
The blurb of the story is great and gives a good idea of the actual story yet it creates the suspicions in the end of it. Which is definitely good enough to catch the attention of the readers and make them curious about what is inside the story.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 10/10
The concept of the story is extremely good and catchy. That is enough to make the first impression. While the blurb creates a tension, the chapters are enough to feed the curiosity of readers and keep them going further to know what's more in the story. The first chapter of the story is beautiful enough to gain a good amount of readers. Having a plus point with the video in the beginning of the story.

PLOT : 20/20
The plot of the story is excellent. It gives the readers an impression of the author having a great perspective of seeing things in real life. That makes the plot extremely appealing and interesting. There are no such unnecessary words which might make the readers think badly of the story. Every emotion, feeling, character and the situation that are portrayed in the story is capable enough to create the image of the storylines inside the reader's mind. The perfect blending of proper words for the moment gives the story a smooth surface.

CHARACTER : 10/10
The characters drawn in the story relate very much in real life. It gives them an original form in the story. As the story tells about the struggles of the characters, it buckle ups the readers and draws them more into the story. While the story continues, it makes things more interesting and shows the development of characters gradually.

STYLE OF WRITING : 10/10
The style, the author used while writing, is not easy to pull off without knowing exactly between what they want to write and what they actually end up writing. The pattern might look like other typical stories. But it is extremely hard to keep the readers from getting uninterested to read further. The dialogues and the thoughts of the characters are shown pretty well. Where it creates a celestial picture using brushes as cursive styles of words and fonts in a dancing way. Good choice of words, using the proper picture in the beginning of every chapter, and not to forget about the memes in the end of it, creates a funny and comfortable atmosphere among the flow of the seriousness of the story. Overall the writing is fitting for every kind of reader.

PACE : 10/10
The pace of the writing is perfectly well and stable with the timing and the situation. The pace of the development among characters is also noticeable as the story keeps up.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 10/10
The spellings, use of proper words, appropriate punctuation of a story brings a contentment to the readers. This story might be a good example of writing stories. Using various plots of font styles using italics, change of para after the end of a new idea or point the author wants to show enhances the beauty of the writing.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 9/10
Overall the story will leave a great impression on the people who might read it. It doesn't have any mistakes to have a bumpy ride during the journey of the story. But it will definitely be challenging for the author to keep everything intact in order to turn the story into a masterpiece. There might be some very tiny mistakes while writing as it's still ongoing. But as a judgment should be considerate enough to push the author to work harder on their works, it's hoped it'll be fruitful at the end of the journey.

Total : 96/100

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Arsonist of heart by strawberry1d

BOOK COVER : 5/5
The cover of the book is changed as it can be seen. It previously contained a picture of Hoseok. Now the cover contains a picture of both the girl and boy. It explains about the lead characters. The fonts are visible enough to read. It is attractive and matches the theme of the story.

BOOK TITLE : 5/5
The title of the book is very catchy. It is relevant. The title of the story should be written with thoughtfulness. For that it is very unique and appropriate for the story.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 10/10
The blurb is a very important part of writing. It is important to put a description which suits the story. It creates a good spoiler about the story. In this case,the ending with the question creates the suspicions ahead of the story and excites the readers of the story.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 9/10
The first chapter counts from where the story begins. Before that the story explains about the lead characters. It gives an overall description for the readers to know before the story begins. It leaves a good impression on those readers who like to imagine while reading.

PLOT : 19/20
The plot of the story makes the story actually interesting. The plot in this story is both interesting and it relates to reality. Everything in the story defines what the plot is. Emotions within the characters creates a bearing atmosphere for the story.

CHARACTER : 7/10
The characters that are described at the beginning of the story, haven't set out every quality in the story yet. It is yet to come out with the flow of the story. As only 10 chapters have been posted till now, the characters can be shown as original, but it hasn't shown any development yet.

STYLE OF WRITING : 7/10
The pattern of writing the author had, is tough to lay out everything in proper order. But the author has pulled out everything perfectly. It's easy to understand and feel. The dialogues in the conversation of characters are interesting. But it's needed to remember that using words may describe the position and situation of characters better without using too many pictures. The splendor of using attractive pictures might only pull the interest of readers more than a writing should.

PACE : 8/10
The pace is not too fast or too slow. But the feelings and the situation around the characters need to be stabilized more. Other than that the pace of timing in writing is good.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 5/10
The spellings, use of words along with the construction is good. But the use of punctuation, commas are necessary to be focused properly.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 8/10
The styles, characters, using different kinds of font styles while describing the timing, and use of beautiful pictures makes it appealing and interesting. Though it still needs some changes and improvement. It is expected that the author will focus on their writing and work harder on their story to create a great art of writing.

TOTAL : 83/100

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Appa's new wife by MoonLightGoddess1

BOOK COVER : 2/5
The cover of the book is rotated on the right. No reader will be curious enough to see what's on the cover and they might skip it. It would be better if it is rotated on the right side to see. The fonts are visible to see and read. The cover picture looks good but the aesthetic does not matches properly with the story title. Because the story title is about the characters inside, it would be good if the picture shows the actual theme.

BOOK TITLE : 3/5
As the story tells about a person,a relation, the title is fair enough to show that. The name is not that common,so it might intrigue the readers to read the blurb. As an author they should have an idea of how to perk the reader's interest. But the said character has not gotten into the actual relationship yet and the title already gives the readers an Idea on what's gonna happen next. Which might make them uninterested. As the female character is described as a single woman from the start, it would be good if the author thinks of another title for the story.

BLURB/DESCRIPTION : 6/10
The blurb is not too short or long, but it's not strong enough to spark the interest. It is very important for a story to have a strong description enough to grab the reader's attention. And sorry to say, but the third dialogue didn't make any sense considering what the title of the story is. But as the story is ongoing, it is hoped that the author will work on the blurb so that it'll create tension before the story starts.

FIRST IMPRESSION : 7/10
The beginning of the story is not bad. As it starts with the POV of a character, it is important to finish the person's POV before starting another person's POV. And the story seems a little bit straightforward without any kind of feelings, emotions. Other than that the story has a flow on its own,so the author's efforts can be seen. It is hoped that the author will make some changes here and there in it after reading it.

PLOT : 15/20
As it is said before that the story scenes are a little too straightforward, so it stops the plot from being original and realistic. Because it is in human tendency not to believe a stranger fully on first meeting, both the father and the daughter characters need some improvement in the story.

Starting from the first chapter, everything feels a bit rushed. Writing should be good enough to touch the heart of the reader. So it is important to focus on the emotions and the timing of the plots to create the tension and intrigue the readers more to keep going. Where a story should be smooth, this story has some roughness and it's a little wavy which stops the story from blending into each other. But as the story is ongoing, the author is expected to make improvements while writing.

CHARACTERS : 5/10
It has some time skips which makes the story more ahead of the actual time it needs to be. As all the emotions are not jumbled enough,it stops the story from being realistic.The characters seem too comfortable with each other keeping in mind the short times they were given to spend with each other. For example, the male character tells the babysitter to call him 'hobi', whereas none of the actual characters in real life would act the same to a babysitter whom they only met during the interview. It's hoped the author will not look down upon the small things which are an obstacle to the story from being a masterpiece.

STYLE OF WRITING : 7/10
The author had tried to make it a good story. It can be seen by reading the chapters they have uploaded till now. But as they are making efforts, their readers will also wish it to be perfect in its own way. The story is not only about some characters, plots or fast and forced emotions and feelings. It needs a lot of care, carefulness and treatment with frailty. There are some sentences which were not important enough to be explained. Hope the author will notice it. The dialogues need to be improved. The word exchange between the other characters and the female character needs to be noticed as the other characters might be important to the related person. So it's also important to create the chemistry between the characters. Because if ignored,that part might not be improved enough and won't make any sense.

PACE : 6/10
It has been told before that the story is too fast forward and it's already more ahead than the characters should be. The time skip should be where it actually needs to be. Unnecessary time skips might be unable to create the chemistry and tension between the main characters. It will be like giving the readers a show of a movie which contains 2.5x speed without knowing what's actually happening inside.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMAR : 8/10
The spellings of this story are not wrong which is a plus point for the story to gain readers. But it is important to put a full stop after a dialogue has ended at the end of the sentence. Because if there is not any full stop after a dialogue, it will give the readers an idea of the conversation between the characters being unfinished. And the font style of the 'time skip' thing needs to be changed. Using italics for 'time skip' might look beautiful,but won't be as useful as it needs to be. Readers might ignore the words and afterwards the story won't make any sense of it. By this, the author needs to be reminded about the importance of 'time skip'.

YOUR IMPRESSION : 9/10
Personally if I say, the story is not too bad to read as the author's efforts can be seen in the writings. But as a reader I would recommend the author to read some masterpiece stories of other authors to improve their writing. Their writing skill is already good enough but it still needs some effort to have a smooth way to the story. As it is still ongoing and only a few chapters have been posted, there is a great chance for the author to improve their writing further in future. There's no need of mentioning everyday in the story and giving it a lot of time to skip. Because it might give the readers the impression that the author is not interested in going further in the story and they might stop reading it. And human beings need a lot of effort from other people to open up. These characters need emotions,not feelings to be perfect for the story. Hope the author will take this advice in a good way and will try to improve in the future.

TOTAL : 68/100

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