𝖠 𝗁𝖾𝖺𝗋𝗍𝖿𝖾𝗅𝗍 𝗍𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗄 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝗍𝗈 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝖾𝗇𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗍𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗃𝗎𝖽𝗀𝖾, christeewrites, 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗂𝗋 𝗆𝖺𝗀𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗅 𝖽𝖾𝖽𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗍𝗂𝗈𝗇 𝖺𝗇𝖽 𝗐𝗂𝗌𝖽𝗈𝗆. 𝖢𝗈𝗇𝗀𝗋𝖺𝗍𝗎𝗅𝖺𝗍𝗂𝗈𝗇𝗌 𝗍𝗈 𝖺𝗅𝗅 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝗌𝗉𝖾𝗅𝗅𝖻𝗂𝗇𝖽𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗐𝗂𝗇𝗇𝖾𝗋𝗌-𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝖻𝗋𝗂𝗅𝗅𝗂𝖺𝗇𝖼𝖾 𝗍𝗋𝗎𝗅𝗒 𝗌𝗁𝗂𝗇𝖾𝗌!

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𐔌 . ⋮ 1𝗦𝗧 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

ataliass » Perfect Timing

𝗖𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗮𝗴𝗲 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘀𝘁𝗿𝗲𝗻𝗴𝘁𝗵 ❪17/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗺𝗽𝗹𝗲𝘅𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪18/20❫

𝗝𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗻𝗲𝘆 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝗚𝗿𝗼𝘄𝘁𝗵 ❪17/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗻𝗻𝗲𝗰𝘁𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝘁𝗼 𝘁𝗵𝗲 Story ❪17/20❫

𝗥𝗲𝗹𝗮𝘁𝗮𝗯𝗶𝗹𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪18/20❫

➦ 𝗧𝗼𝘁𝗮𝗹 : ❪87/100❫

⌞Recommendations for improvement⌝
While the tension between Charlotte and Jasper is well-crafted, the story risks feeling predictable if it follows the standard beats of a love triangle or a last-minute wedding confession. The emotional stakes are high, but they need to be matched with depth in Jasper's character-does he still love Charlotte, or is she truly too late? Without a compelling exploration of his emotions, the story risks being a one-sided heartbreak rather than a fully realized, poignant love story.

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𐔌 . ⋮ 2𝗡𝗗 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

ajroker » Lost Love = Misery Growing

𝗖𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗮𝗴𝗲 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘀𝘁𝗿𝗲𝗻𝗴𝘁𝗵 ❪16/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗺𝗽𝗹𝗲𝘅𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪18/20❫

𝗝𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗻𝗲𝘆 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝗚𝗿𝗼𝘄𝘁𝗵 ❪15/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗻𝗻𝗲𝗰𝘁𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝘁𝗼 𝘁𝗵𝗲 Story ❪16/20❫

𝗥𝗲𝗹𝗮𝘁𝗮𝗯𝗶𝗹𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪15/20❫

➦ 𝗧𝗼𝘁𝗮𝗹 : ❪80/100❫

⌞ Recommendations for improvement⌝
The conflict lacks originality, treading familiar ground without offering anything truly unexpected. Sophia's reappearance follows predictable beats, and while her absence initially feels like an intriguing mystery, the eventual revelations lack the impact needed to justify Ethan's emotional spiral. Julia, unfortunately, comes across as a placeholder rather than a fully developed character, making Ethan's dilemma feel less like a heartbreaking choice and more like an inevitable regression.

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𐔌 . ⋮ 3𝗥𝗗 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

7Bibliophile3 » Champagne Life

𝗖𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗮𝗴𝗲 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘀𝘁𝗿𝗲𝗻𝗴𝘁𝗵 ❪15/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗺𝗽𝗹𝗲𝘅𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪14/20❫

𝗝𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗻𝗲𝘆 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝗚𝗿𝗼𝘄𝘁𝗵 ❪13/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗻𝗻𝗲𝗰𝘁𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝘁𝗼 𝘁𝗵𝗲 Story ❪16/20❫

𝗥𝗲𝗹𝗮𝘁𝗮𝗯𝗶𝗹𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪14/20❫

➦ 𝗧𝗼𝘁𝗮𝗹 : ❪72/100❫

⌞Recommendations for improvement⌝
The storyline occasionally leans into familiar tropes without fully subverting them. While the enemies-to-lovers progression is enjoyable, the revenge plot could have been more intricate, with deeper stakes beyond the personal grudge. Reyansh's character development, though compelling, sometimes feels a bit rushed-his shift from antagonist to devoted partner could have benefited from more gradual emotional beats.

Additionally, the prose and pacing does not always match the intensity of the themes. Some moments are well written, while others lean into predictable dialogue and exposition that slow the narrative. The tension between Kyra and Reyansh is strongest in the earlier sections, but the resolution feels a bit too neatly wrapped. The writing style has room for quite a bit of improvement.

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𐔌 . ⋮ 𝗡𝗢𝗕𝗟𝗘 𝗣𝗔𝗥𝗧𝗜𝗖𝗜𝗣𝗔𝗡𝗧𝗦 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

@Mochi711 » Letters Across the River | J.h.s Short Story

𝗖𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗮𝗴𝗲 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘀𝘁𝗿𝗲𝗻𝗴𝘁𝗵 ❪7/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗺𝗽𝗹𝗲𝘅𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪5/20❫

𝗝𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗻𝗲𝘆 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝗚𝗿𝗼𝘄𝘁𝗵 ❪13/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗻𝗻𝗲𝗰𝘁𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝘁𝗼 𝘁𝗵𝗲 Story ❪7/20❫

𝗥𝗲𝗹𝗮𝘁𝗮𝗯𝗶𝗹𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪11/20❫

➦ 𝗧𝗼𝘁𝗮𝗹 : ❪43/100❫

⌞Recommendations for improvement⌝
The writing style and prose should be clear, engaging, and suited to the tone and genre of the book. If the prose is too complex, repetitive, or dry, it can make reading feel tedious rather than enjoyable.

The dialogue should feel natural, reflecting the personality and background of each character while also serving to advance the plot. The conversations are stiff, unrealistic, and too short to leave an impact.

The theme and message of the book should be impactful and integrated seamlessly into the narrative without feeling forced or unclear.

The structure and pacing should ensure a smooth flow, balancing action, tension, and quieter moments effectively. The story drags in the middle or rushes toward the end, it can weaken the emotional payoff and leave readers unsatisfied.

The emotional engagement and reader connection should be strong enough to make readers care about the characters and their journey. The story lacks emotional depth or meaningful stakes, and fails to leave a lasting impression.

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itz_mezieee » Monster of the Unknown

𝗖𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗮𝗴𝗲 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝘀𝘁𝗿𝗲𝗻𝗴𝘁𝗵 ❪15/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗺𝗽𝗹𝗲𝘅𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪12/20❫

𝗝𝗼𝘂𝗿𝗻𝗲𝘆 𝗮𝗻𝗱 𝗚𝗿𝗼𝘄𝘁𝗵 ❪13/20❫

𝗖𝗼𝗻𝗻𝗲𝗰𝘁𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝘁𝗼 𝘁𝗵𝗲 Story ❪16/20❫

𝗥𝗲𝗹𝗮𝘁𝗮𝗯𝗶𝗹𝗶𝘁𝘆 ❪14/20❫

➦ 𝗧𝗼𝘁𝗮𝗹 : ❪70/100❫

⌞Recommendations for improvement⌝
The pacing of the story wavers, particularly in the early chapters. While the mystery is engaging, some of the exposition surrounding the history of the zegens and the Zomer can feel dense, slowing down the initial momentum. The antagonists, while menacing, could benefit from deeper development, as their motivations sometimes feel like echoes of past villains rather than truly unique forces of their own. The true horror of Feto is hinted at but remains underexplored for much of the narrative, making its looming presence more of an abstract fear rather than an immediate, tangible threat.

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𝖠 𝗋𝗈𝗎𝗇𝖽 𝗈𝖿 𝖾𝗇𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗍𝖾𝖽 𝖺𝗉𝗉𝗅𝖺𝗎𝗌𝖾 𝗍𝗈 𝖺𝗅𝗅 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗐𝗂𝗇𝗇𝖾𝗋𝗌! 𝖳𝗈 𝖾𝗏𝖾𝗋𝗒 𝗉𝖺𝗋𝗍𝗂𝖼𝗂𝗉𝖺𝗇𝗍, 𝗍𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗄 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗃𝗈𝗂𝗇𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗆𝖺𝗀𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗅 𝖺𝗐𝖺𝗋𝖽𝗌 𝗃𝗈𝗎𝗋𝗇𝖾𝗒. 𝖱𝖾𝗆𝖾𝗆𝖻𝖾𝗋, 𝖾𝗏𝖾𝗇 𝗂𝖿 𝗏𝗂𝖼𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒 𝖽𝗂𝖽𝗇'𝗍 𝖿𝗂𝗇𝖽 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝗍𝗁𝗂𝗌 𝗍𝗂𝗆𝖾, 𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗌𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒 𝗌𝗁𝗂𝗇𝖾𝗌 𝗐𝗂𝗍𝗁 𝗂𝗍𝗌 𝗈𝗐𝗇 𝗎𝗇𝗂𝗊𝗎𝖾 𝗌𝗉𝖾𝗅𝗅𝖻𝗂𝗇𝖽𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗋𝗆.

𝖯𝗋𝖾𝗉𝖺𝗋𝖾 𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋𝗌𝖾𝗅𝗏𝖾𝗌, 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗌𝗈𝗈𝗇 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝗍𝗋𝖾𝖺𝗌𝗎𝗋𝖾𝗌 𝗈𝖿 𝗌𝗍𝗂𝖼𝗄𝖾𝗋𝗌, 𝖼𝖾𝗋𝗍𝗂𝖿𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗍𝖾𝗌, 𝖺𝗇𝖽 𝗈𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗋 𝗉𝗋𝗂𝗓𝖾𝗌 𝗐𝗂𝗅𝗅 𝖻𝖾 𝗎𝗇𝗏𝖾𝗂𝗅𝖾𝖽 𝗂𝗇 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗉𝗍𝖾𝗋𝗌 𝖺𝗁𝖾𝖺𝖽!