𝖠 𝗁𝖾𝖺𝗋𝗍𝖿𝖾𝗅𝗍 𝗍𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗄 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝗍𝗈 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝖾𝗇𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗍𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗃𝗎𝖽𝗀𝖾, Gise_lliana, 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗂𝗋 𝗆𝖺𝗀𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗅 𝖽𝖾𝖽𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗍𝗂𝗈𝗇 𝖺𝗇𝖽 𝗐𝗂𝗌𝖽𝗈𝗆. 𝖢𝗈𝗇𝗀𝗋𝖺𝗍𝗎𝗅𝖺𝗍𝗂𝗈𝗇𝗌 𝗍𝗈 𝖺𝗅𝗅 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝗌𝗉𝖾𝗅𝗅𝖻𝗂𝗇𝖽𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗐𝗂𝗇𝗇𝖾𝗋𝗌-𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝖻𝗋𝗂𝗅𝗅𝗂𝖺𝗇𝖼𝖾 𝗍𝗋𝗎𝗅𝗒 𝗌𝗁𝗂𝗇𝖾𝗌!

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𐔌 . ⋮ 1𝗦𝗧 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥𝗦 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

sondermelle » Listen To Me

Scene setting (17/20)

Foreshadowing (18.5/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (20/20)

Connection to the main plot (20/20)

➦ Total: (95.5/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue was extremely well written. Grammar, vocabulary and phrase construction was fantabulous! Consider adding a bit more details for the purpose of enhancing the world building. Overall it was great! Great Work! Keep it up!

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𐔌 . ⋮ 2𝗡𝗗 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

wordywonders » Against the Dark

Scene setting (20/20)

Foreshadowing (18/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (18/20)

Connection to the main plot (19/20)

➦ Total: (95/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue was very well written indeed. Except for few occasional grammatical errors that could be eliminated via proofreading, everything else was just perfect. Good Work!

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𐔌 . ⋮ 3𝗥𝗗 𝗣𝗟𝗔𝗖𝗘 𝗪𝗜𝗡𝗡𝗘𝗥 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

ajroker » The Crown Princess' Choice

Scene setting (14/20)

Foreshadowing (20/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (20/20)

Connection to the main plot (19/20)

➦ Total: (93/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue was very well written with an extravagant use of vocabulary which set up the good start for the story. Here are the things you can work on:

1. The description about the place where the scene is taking place is a bit less and therefore is not able to paint a vivid image of the surroundings in a readers mind.

2. Even though the actions of the characters is extremely detailed but the emotional aspect is a bit lacking.

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𐔌 . ⋮ 𝗡𝗢𝗕𝗟𝗘 𝗣𝗔𝗥𝗧𝗜𝗖𝗜𝗣𝗔𝗡𝗧𝗦 .ᐟ ֹ ₊ ꒱

EyesDucking » Imperfectly Perfect

Scene setting (18/20)

Foreshadowing (15/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (19/20)

Connection to the main plot (17/20)

➦ Total: (89/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue is well established. The words used and description curated out of it was brilliant. Here are the few things you can work on.

1. The part named as description or the author's note, you have made a mistake and mentioned it as a prologue in one of your lines in the same chapter. That definitely confused the reader.

2. There are few grammatical errors that can be removed by thorough proof reading.

3. Instead of writing dates separately, use it in the opening paragraph itself since it looks like a diary entry in here.

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jennyprof » Streamfeather's Adventures

Scene setting (12/20)

Foreshadowing (17/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (20/20)

Connection to the main plot (17/20)

➦ Total: (86/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
Prologue, indeed was interesting to read. Here are the recommendations for improvement:

1. Description of the environment where the scene is taking place wasn't sufficient enough.

2. Don't use caps to highlight thoughts, rather use simple language or italics in that case.

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Kit1234kat » Our Revenge

Scene setting (09/20)

Foreshadowing (20/20)

Tone Establishment (07/20)

Character introduction (20/20)

Connection to the main plot (17/20)

➦ Total: (73/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue provided a subtle and sufficient amount of information which inturn was a very good start for the book. Here are the recommendations for improvement.

1. Don't use caps for flashbacks, either explain it with the help of words or maybe use italics.

2. There are many grammatical errors. And for years you have used numbers (7,15). Instead of those use words and not numerics (seven, fifteen).

3. The structure and pacing is off too. Consider phrasing smaller paragraphs and have them aligned all along. Pacing is very fast.

4. Lack of descriptive language has made the content a bit harder to visualize.

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GoldenieTwilightie » The Last of Them

Scene setting (12/20)

Foreshadowing (16/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (13/20)

Connection to the main plot (19/20)

➦Total: (60/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
The prologue was quite intriguing and at the same time had little to no errors.Here are the recommendations for improvement:

1. The lack of descriptive language made the content hard to be visualized which inturn wasn't successful in world building.

2. There is very little introduction of the main characters, consider adding a bit more detail to the prologue in this regards.

3. Structural refinements are required.

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emilypoole977 » I wish for another life

Scene setting (12/20)

Foreshadowing (15/20)

Tone Establishment (20/20)

Character introduction (05/20)

Connection to the main plot (13/20)

➦Total: (55/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
Even though the prologue was short, it was rather interesting to read. Here are few things you can work on:

1. The prologue lacks description in all the aspects, be it scene setting, emotional displays or actions. Everything was very hazy.

2. The structure of the prologue wasn't that bad but can be better by priper construction and paragraphing.

3. There are quite some grammatical and punctuation errors followed by awkward phrasing as well.

4. The main characters are not introduced effectively.

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_reichii » Calathea

Scene setting (11/20)

Foreshadowing (10/20)

Tone Establishment (10/20)

Character introduction (09/20)

Connection to the main plot (14/20)

➦Total: (54/100)

Recommendation for improvements:
First of all, the prologue was too short but the grammar and sentence construction was on point. Here are the recommendations for improvement.

1. The prologue is too short and not very descriptive. Except for the mention of the city there is no description about where the scene is taking place which in turn falls short of the criterion for a successful world building.

2. Prologue's purpose is usually to serve as a building block for the novel, i.e. to introduce the readers with the characters and their backgrounds to make them familiarize with each other. In this case it fell short of the criterion and there of wasn't able to successfully serve it's purpose.

3. You did align the prologue with the name of the novel, however it's connection to the story remained vague and uncertain.

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𝖠 𝗋𝗈𝗎𝗇𝖽 𝗈𝖿 𝖾𝗇𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗍𝖾𝖽 𝖺𝗉𝗉𝗅𝖺𝗎𝗌𝖾 𝗍𝗈 𝖺𝗅𝗅 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗐𝗂𝗇𝗇𝖾𝗋𝗌! 𝖳𝗈 𝖾𝗏𝖾𝗋𝗒 𝗉𝖺𝗋𝗍𝗂𝖼𝗂𝗉𝖺𝗇𝗍, 𝗍𝗁𝖺𝗇𝗄 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗃𝗈𝗂𝗇𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗆𝖺𝗀𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗅 𝖺𝗐𝖺𝗋𝖽𝗌 𝗃𝗈𝗎𝗋𝗇𝖾𝗒. 𝖱𝖾𝗆𝖾𝗆𝖻𝖾𝗋, 𝖾𝗏𝖾𝗇 𝗂𝖿 𝗏𝗂𝖼𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒 𝖽𝗂𝖽𝗇'𝗍 𝖿𝗂𝗇𝖽 𝗒𝗈𝗎 𝗍𝗁𝗂𝗌 𝗍𝗂𝗆𝖾, 𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋 𝗌𝗍𝗈𝗋𝗒 𝗌𝗁𝗂𝗇𝖾𝗌 𝗐𝗂𝗍𝗁 𝗂𝗍𝗌 𝗈𝗐𝗇 𝗎𝗇𝗂𝗊𝗎𝖾 𝗌𝗉𝖾𝗅𝗅𝖻𝗂𝗇𝖽𝗂𝗇𝗀 𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗋𝗆.

𝖯𝗋𝖾𝗉𝖺𝗋𝖾 𝗒𝗈𝗎𝗋𝗌𝖾𝗅𝗏𝖾𝗌, 𝖿𝗈𝗋 𝗌𝗈𝗈𝗇 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝗍𝗋𝖾𝖺𝗌𝗎𝗋𝖾𝗌 𝗈𝖿 𝗌𝗍𝗂𝖼𝗄𝖾𝗋𝗌, 𝖼𝖾𝗋𝗍𝗂𝖿𝗂𝖼𝖺𝗍𝖾𝗌, 𝖺𝗇𝖽 𝗈𝗍𝗁𝖾𝗋 𝗉𝗋𝗂𝗓𝖾𝗌 𝗐𝗂𝗅𝗅 𝖻𝖾 𝗎𝗇𝗏𝖾𝗂𝗅𝖾𝖽 𝗂𝗇 𝗍𝗁𝖾 𝖼𝗁𝖺𝗉𝗍𝖾𝗋𝗌 𝖺𝗁𝖾𝖺𝖽!