Book Name: Rejection

Author: taes_smirk

Reviewer: (Anika) @FrozenHeartsGalaxy 

Cover: 02/05

Judging by the theme and mood in the image of Jimin, it gives off sad vibes which actually matches the plot. The extra photo seems unnecessary and there is no Author's name. The blurring effect makes the cover less eye-catching.

Title: 4/05

The title is common and simple but as we read the story, it gives very deep value and meaning to it. 

Synopsis: 8/10

The blurb isn't long nor short, it's a summary of an important part which does reveal about the plot, both main character's personality and later on causes the climax in the story so it's a good cliffhanger as well. The description was attention-grabbing and hit the interest inside me.

Execution: 5/10

Events and incidents that kept the storyline balanced and connected with one another, or should I say every aspect of the book is great except for the things I have mentioned in the review.

Plot: 13/20

The plot is very thrilling and praiseworthy. The karma plot twist was too shocking. I love how you added the 3 years past scenes along with the present. Some of the things were rushed at first, most of the things were left unexplained. Yejin knowing most of the things about Jihoon out of nowhere is unsettling. The source of information known to the characters but unknown to readers at once is okay but repeating this many times makes them lose interest. One of the examples is how she knew Jungkook interacted with Jihoon when she only met him at the library for the first time. Readers prefer showing  more than dictating and Yejin mostly dictates such infos in her thoughts.

Writing Style: 9/20

Your writing style is good, but in early chapters most of the dialogues are without action tag or good description of mood. Their feelings were delivered through the dialogues and it made me imagine them talking with blank faces. If you read Yoora's first call again, you will notice. Also I suggest adding more explainable details of place, appearance, feelings and action without repeating the same sentence twice in different or similar ways because it gets cliche. Small example: "For now, I have warned you for now" (Chapter 9) 

I will show you one more paragraph that have a writing mistake "They all were laughing from watching Hana's frustrated look. Soon she gets a call, as soon as she saw the caller ID her smile disappears" (Chapter 9 again) If she was already frustrated, she didn't smile or did she?

Grammar & Vocabulary: 5/20

I pointed out only a few mistakes, I hope you re-edit all of them too which I didn't mention here.

Vocabulary:-

Chapter 1,

But what I didn't know was that was just a beginning 

Reviewer: Remove first "was"

Chapter 2,

I was feeling very gloomy in was feeling after the locker incident

Reviewer: I don't know how to fix this, you probably know.

Chapter 1,

You become a person I never a ever think that you'll become so important to me. You'll become my hero, my sun, my moon and my everything 

Reviewer: The construction of this whole sentence made me confused.

Chapter 2,

But my mind was mind was somewhere else.

Reviewer: Same mistake of repeated words but the cliche one I mentioned before is something different.

Chapter 2,

He always (spend) some alone time before entering in cafeteria

Correction: He always spent some alone time before entering the cafeteria

Chapter 3,

The rest of the day the went in haze.

Reviewer: Remove second "The"

Chapter 3,

That's mean dad is here.

Correction: That means dad is here. "That's" is contraction of "That is" so you basically wrote "is" twice

Chapter 4, 

I said and went towards buying him some food.

Correction: and went to buy him some food.

Chapter 4,

Yejin, meet me at the of school, you break rule number 7

Reviewer: Missing word 

Chapter 9,

Laughing Taehyung ask for him

Reviewer: Remove "For"

Spelling Mistake:-

Chapter 1,

It was way to much for an ordinary girl liked me

Correction: Like

Chapter 2,

I was holding his hand for a long time (then) usual.

Correction: Than

Chapter 2,

I was again cut by him as he shove me (again) a wall. 

Correction: Against

Chapter 4,

Everyone become (quite)

Correction: Quiet

Chapter 6,

Leave my house in this (instinct.)

Correction: this instant

Chapter 7,

I never regard of headmistress having a (nice)

Spelling: Niece

Characters & Development: 4/10

The character's emotions weren't described well, they lack reactions, logical inner-thoughts. It feels like the author made them do things that she wanted them to do even if it was out of their character. Jimin made Yejin his errand girl just to test if she fit to be his ideal type but I believe that wasn't a good reason to begin their chemistry, also she didn't even question it. It's just my opinion. I suggest it would be better if he asked her to pursue his interest by giving these rules and making her run errands for him. When he was being too much on her, you should've given a reason that he wanted her to give up but she was obeying not only because of love but determination as well. Their simpleness didn't enhance the exposition much. I thought his feelings of jealousy were too rushed and early until I got to know what happened 3 years ago so it was understandable. 

Total: 50/100