Book name: BORN KILLERS

Author: preronasaha

Reviewer: Mini

• TOTAL MARKS- ①⓪⓪

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʀᴇᴀᴅᴇʀ ɪɴᴛᴇʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ

3/5

Honestly, even though there are very less to no comments in the chapters, I’m pretty a lot of people if not all of them, have shed a few tears hearing about the tragic deaths, have blushed more than ever reading the interactions between characters, and have fumed up hearing about the betrayal and so on. The view count too was pretty high and I’m sure a lot of them are re-reads because which creature wouldn’t read this masterpiece again?!

|- ①⓪ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴄᴏᴠᴇʀ.

7.5/10

OKAY, HEAR ME OUT. When I say the cover was immaculately perfect, I just think, after reading the book, the cover could use a few add ons and removals. Let’s see; the font is great, you don’t have to do anything about that, the little quote/subtitle which Min Yoongi uses oh so often(!) but the story is almost ot7 if you pay attention so I think the cover could use an overlay of the members’ photos, and have Yoongi, Jimin and Y/n in the front, as leads of course because that’s how the story is portrayed, but if you don’t like that you could have jimin go a bit further back but keep him in the spotlight, I’d advice. The colour scheme is great but you could add a few red an black elements here and there and maybe a link chain going across in one of the corners, play with the cover! You can add in a bullet or two somewhere in the corner but in sight, you can add a silver mask lying around somewhere but with a contrasting color obviously. Play around, see what you can find best.

|- ⑤ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴅᴇsᴄʀɪᴘᴛɪᴏɴ

4/5

The description is overall, pretty good, I think the only thing missing is if you would add a little dialogue or like a very commonly used phrase or saying used by a character or even better Min Yoongi or Y/n themself! Just like ‘BORN to FIGHT, TRAINED to KILL’ you could add something, say, ‘“Stop calling me missy, Min yoongi.” “Stop calling me Mr. Cruel One and you have a deal”’ There’s a lot you could do, I found those nicknames to be very common, oh here’s one, how about the part where Min Yoongi says, “It’s her, mom.” That could be a great brainer, it’s going to leave people thinking for eternity unless they give and read the book which I doubt they won’t do, who can not read this book like come on-

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴛɪᴛʟᴇ.

10/10

What is there to even say the book’s a masterpiece, a literal monument. The title is absolute perfection, nothing to change, I gave a 10/10 for goodness’ sake, what is there to say, it’s a sight for sore eyes! The title is alone enough to leave the readers with wide eyes, and a mind lost in the thinking world.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ᴘʟᴏᴛ.

8.5/10

The story, overall, was great, it had a piece of everything in it, thriller, ominous, emotional, anger, happiness, romance, everything, the list goes on! But a few things in the story were a bit predictable but it’s not always bad, usually when something is predictable people go, ‘Ugh, this is so predictable, I wasted my time on nothing!’ but there a few times where you predict something and go, ‘See, I told you! She’s her mother, not her cousin.’ and just roll with it, there’s a spark of satisfaction and happiness and a bit of a proud feeling, and that’s okay, it’s good, it isn’t impossibly tough to figure out.

|- ②⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴛʜᴇ ɢʀᴀᴍᴍᴀʀ ᴀɴᴅ ᴠᴏᴄᴀʙᴜʟᴀʀʏ.

17/20

Your choice of words and everything was good, ALTHOUGH, I did notice that a lot of times, when in third person’s pov, you used first person’s pov words like me, my, mine, and so on, look for those and make sure to correct that. There’s a lot of grammatical errors in the book. I, at first wanted to give a detailed point on them but as I kept going there were a lot of them, too many! I had a 7 lines long paragraph for the errors in the first five chapters, but the many errors were just the same ones over and over so not a big deal, but can be quite troublesome to readers. The things I noticed were, you used a lot of small caps in the beginning of sentences sometimes, the spellings of names was also misspelt, one instance I can recall is in the third chapter where the name ‘Sung-Jae’ wasn’t in capital at the beginning and Jae was spelt as jar. The same chapter there was a place where Y/n is talking to her uncle and says, “I still know nothings and there was a hyphen (-) for some reason, also one little correction, it says her uncle’s smile turns into a frown, but in regular cases, the smile just drops, make sure to give it a read with both the phrases, ‘his smile drops’ and ‘his smile turns into a frown’ and do what you find best. The same chapter again says cut the call, a better rephrasing would be, hang up on him, also Jimin asks the man, ‘what you did’ it’d sound better if it was, ‘what did you do, you hung up on him saying you had no money!’ The fourth chapter, Taehyung said, ‘Look who decides to finally show up’ decided would be a better word to us there. The same chapter, one of the lines isn’t finished, it’s the part where Jin yells about Yoongi having a girlfriend if that makes sense, it isn’t completed that paragraph, a little further from there, Jin says ‘ok Yoongi, what do you want to eat?’

The ok isn’t started with a capital letter. and the ok is in small caps, and the word tired was replaced with tried somewhere there. Fifth chapter, she runs fast not first, same place, y/b’s boss, i so sorry,y/n waves army her? And I also think the y/nnn, could be replaced with a y/n~ The spelling of poking was spelt as pokeing. Also, if you're not comfortable with the name Silver Mask, I don't think you have to because it's what you created. Silver Mask is your creation. Those are the ones I found remarkably noticeable and might be a little hindrance between the vibe that is created.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs Fᴏʀ ᴘʟᴏᴛ ᴛᴡɪsᴛs ᴀɴᴅ ᴀᴛᴛʀᴀᴄᴛɪᴏɴ.

9/10

The entire plot twist, whatever happened was really very eye opening and was very fascinating to see how the story is developing. I liked the book entirely, and would love to continue reading this. There was a few times where after ending a chapter there was no spark but of course you surprised us with the next coming plots.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴇᴍᴏᴛɪᴏɴs ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʜᴀʀᴀᴄᴛᴇʀ ᴅᴇᴠᴇʟᴏᴘᴍᴇɴᴛ.

10/10

There were, like I said, a TON of emotions involved in every episode. And it was so overwhelming, but in  a good way. The characters' development, I'm surprised to say I've seen all of the leads, if not every character, develop. Min Yoongi, for instance, did stag the same cold and caring but he found love. Park Jimin, the seducer with no hard feelings, is head over heels for Y/n. Jungkook developed in his skills, yes but he also developed in his personality, Namjoon, well Namjoon is Namjoon, Jin, he did get a chance to openly and directly portray his motherly side after Y/n, Hoseok, was his regular sunshine but a bit softer after Y/n, Taehyung, he’s the main man here, after finding out about his sister he changed a lot. Y/n, our little missy here, has changed the most, from an innocent little girl, she became an absolute badass and just completely said yeet.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ᴄʀᴇᴀᴛɪᴠɪᴛʏ ᴀɴᴅ ᴡᴀʏ ᴏғ ᴡʀɪᴛɪɴɢ

10/10

I really like the way you portrayed everything in this story, everything is just pure originality and very enjoyable, I’d so watch that if it was a movie or series. It’s very fresh, it’s not like other mafia or gang AUs and that’s what I love about it. Your creativity is what brings out the best in this and I’m all about it, keep going like this, damn you’re gonna be busy, girl. Your achievements say it all.

|- ①⓪ ᴍᴀʀᴋs ғᴏʀ ʏᴏᴜʀ ᴏᴘɪɴɪᴏɴ ᴏɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋ.

9/10

The book is an absolute monument, like I said, I love it for all it is and would totally come back and re-read it once it’s over and cry that it’s over but, there’s always room for improvement and few key points to keep in mind. 

YOUR REVIEW: 

I think this book is one of the best things I’ve read, honestly. It’s new, fresh and has all components in perfect amounts. The plot, the cliffhangers, emotions, and the way you executed them is REALLY good. It’s clean and crisp. Just make sure you keep updating and read the chapter closely and observe for errors before posting it. And keep up with the gifs, banners, aesthetics and the note at the end. Looking forward to reading more of your art! If you ever need help with choice of words or your grammar, head to thesaurus.com for better, suitable words and google docs is always open to correct your grammatical errors and others. Play with your words, it’s called wordplay for a reason, ma’am! And don’t make it too professional, play around, be informal, EXPLORE~ Besides, you’re already good enough! You can write a single word and folks gonna get their wigs snatch, soul leaving, heart dropped, body floor, hotel triva-

TOTAL: 88/100

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