Book Name : NO BOUNDARIES || vmin
Author : moanie_3534
Reviewer : CelesteBlaze

Cover (5): Pretty well done. I liked the overlay and the overall background. The clock was a creative idea. So was the red glow on each corner. However, the text in the upper rightcorner is not readable. Other than that, aesthetic and pleasing to the eye. A 4 / 5.

Title (5): The title did not strike me as unique. Tons of stories have the same name, and it's very difficult to differentiate between them and yours. Maybe something more personalized will work better. A 2/5.

Synopsis (10): This summary has promise, but poor execution. Firstly, there are numerous grammatical errors throughout the passage, such as “The young boy was freeze at his spot”, which should be “The young boy was frozen in his spot”. These can be easily corrected. Try sounding out the sentence, and if it seems wrong or weird, there’s a chance there are errors in tense or verb form. A grammar correction service, such as Grammarly will also do the trick. Secondly, the pacing and progression of the summary is too fast. I barely know who the character is or what the story is about. The mystery element in the summary holds it through, but the rapid introduction of multiple characters without relationship or connection stated disrupts the flow. Perhaps attempt to confine the blurb to merely the approach of the stranger, and the “little one”s reaction. A 4/10.

Execution (10) : Though the story jumps between future and past, it manages to maintain original and tense storylines. I was pleasantly surprised by how well the story flowed from Chapter 03 onward. The execution is a bit choppy in the previous chapters, especially the royal ones in the past. The characters are introduced well, and the tiny flashback and depth in chapter 02 added a real heartwarming flavour to the story. Yet, it could have been clearer and the strangers thus introduced could have been named. The prologue needs a lot of work. It’s jumpy, unrelated and really hard to understand. A 7/10.

Plot (20) : What stood out to me in this story was the plot. Most fanfictions limit themselves to romantic storylines, and add no other aspects to the plot. This differed, introducing the future troops and commanders, all hellbent on the Blood Moon Forest. Only the prince portions of the plot fall flat on their face, as Jimin’s personality is rather lackluster. The story has not progressed much, so I really cannot comment on the plot with complete accuracy, but I appreciate the mysterious and intriguing atmosphere created. A 15/20.

Writing style (20) - The writing style didn't stand out as spectacular. It was choppy, and very hard to understand in some places. It focused mainly on facts and events, which increased its appeal, but strictly speaking, it lost its charm due to the numerous phrasing errors. I enjoyed certain portions such as the description of the music and the dialogue, but the rest was subpar. 13/20.

Grammar and vocabulary (20) : Sorry to say, but grammar needs work. Please check your tenses and verb form. The errors really disrupt the story. As for vocabulary, it was pretty standard. No exceptional words, except in the music scene previously mentioned. 8/20

Character development (10) : As the story is just starting out, not a lot of character development can be expected. The Jimin arc was not very well presented, and the problems highlighted to a bare minimum. Iam hoping that as the story progresses, we understand the depth of Jimin’s character and how that scene showed his development. A 4 out of 10.

OVERALL _ 57/100

Final note - I enjoyed reading it, but until the grammar, characters and writing is improved, I cannot fully recommend it to anybody. This story has great promise, and I hope that these issues will soon be sorted out so the plot can shine like the star it is. I liked the storylines a lot, and definitely think this can be so much more. Never stop trying!