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Judge thereverence

‣ I can die for this love by Cool_Summer29

◗From the very beginning, I saw how much effort you put into this story. The cover, graphics, aesthetic, a trailer even. Everything seemed to be perfectly planned and I love such stories. The tragic beginning set the whole mood and for a split second, I was confused about how you will continue with the plot when the male mc, our Jungkookie, is dead. And then... Omg, I love the concept of this story. How she got the chance to save him, change so many things in his life, and change others. And even if it's kinda cliché, I still love the concept so much. So I was eager to read more.

◗Then it turned out it had a lot more tropes. A lot of already well-known tropes. As if you put ten different stories into one. Arranged marriage? Check. A betraying and secret girlfriend? Check. Forced to live together? Check. A male lead hating mc for no particular reason just to slowly fall in love with her? Check. Mc being in danger makes him realize his feeling for her? Check. You see what I mean?

I thought the plot will be more simple and there is always something happening out of the blue. Like the reader has no time to rest at all. I expected to see some key plot points to save Jungkook in the end but it almost felt like a new story. Mc knows the past or rather the future. She knows what will happen. She could have used it a little bit better but overall it was executed rather well. I know that if she changes one thing the latter should change as well, so I won't be picky about it.

◗But I still try to understand the arranged marriage thing. I don't get why they did it if it's not for the public and nobody knows about it. Who does it benefit? If it is only for JK's mother then why are they forced to live together? Why is she obliged to cook, clean, and do wifey things? Couldn't she be for him only when his mom pops up, just to pretend for a while and then go? It kinda doesn't make sense. I know it is done for the plot but still, it was so confusing. And why he hates her so much? He was impressed with her during their first meeting and suddenly he hates her? Idk how to feel about it.

◗There are a lot of genres, ideas, and subplots and I had a hard time deciding which stood out the most. They were mostly merged pretty well but sometimes it was too much to handle. There were too many of them, which made the whole thing chaotic at times. Nevertheless, each time you made sure each of the subplots was covered from start to end, and there were no cases unsolved, which is quite challenging when there are so many of them. I like that.

◗Grammar-wise, the dialogues have the wrong punctuation but they're quite natural. Vocab used is neat, same for the writing style. When there are action scenes it is mostly focused on dialogues and emotions, and when it needs to be more descriptive it is. So it was rather pleasurable to read.

The only thing was the POVs. There were a lot of them and they constantly changed, sometimes a few times in one chapter and it kinda takes away from the continuity of the story. But once I got used to it, it wasn't a problem anymore.

To end it, it was such a long ride with this story! But thank you for making my 8h train trip to another country more pleasurable with such a lecture. I truly enjoyed it and I'm glad I got to read it. There are still so many things going on in that story, and ngl I have to know how it's going to end. So maybe in time, you may see me there as well. Thank you! ♡

◗First impression: 10/10
◗Grammar: 13/15
◗Genre individuality: 11/15
◗Genre usage: 11/15
◗Good fusion: 12/15
◗Pace: 7/10
◗Writing style: 11/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 3.5/5

◖◖Total: 78.5/100 ◗◗

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‣The secret keeper by winter-hia

◗For the first impression, I was positively surprised. I liked the cover, the aesthetic, and the graphic. I'm not a fan of character introductions but it's the author's choice and here were done neatly; so kudos to the author or whoever made them. The graphics overall were coherent and were a great addition and introduction to the story. Blurb also had its charms, although it was a little wordy (especially the one long sentence which was quite confusing). Nevertheless, I had some good vibes going into the story.

◗The first thing I thought of was the movie Four Weddings and a Funeral since we basically came from the wedding to the funeral. It intrigued me and I kept reading, going into the story. It was indeed the mashup between mystery and suspense but I couldn't find the romance part. Maybe it should be added later but for me, a brief mention of the past love life of Jin is not exactly in the romance genre. I would expect something more from that genre to appear but again, it's the beginning of the story and it might be added later. Maybe via some retrospections? Who knows.

It was mysterious enough to be called a mystery. I liked how we see people's reactions to the investigation. How they react when something is off so I can tell from their expression rather than just reading about it. I liked the feeling of uncertainty each time something like that happened. It brought realism to the story and I felt as a detective, the same way Seokjin tried to gather pieces of the story. Good job.

◗As for the technical part, some aspects could be improved. First of all, I know that putting text in the middle is an aesthetic choice (or I hope so) but for me, it was quite disturbing to read. Fortunately, I got used to it. Sometimes I got the "hold up" moments when I was really confused about where are we and whose perspective we are following. For example, the girlfriend thing. I thought it was still relative to Jin hence my huge surprise. The narration changed so fast that I haven't noticed that we were talking about the other person: the brother. It was slightly confusing and not only for me as I read the comments.

Also the usage of the words: boy and girl. If they are adults, and they surely are if they were ever married, it is weird to call them such names. A boy and a girl should be used for the underage characters. It kinda took me off each time I read it while imagining a grown man. The pace of the story was nice, just as it should be. I liked that a lot that we didn't get a lot of information at once.
In conclusion, in some places, the story was really confusing and I had to focus more to understand it properly (still don't know if I did it right). In mystery and crime stories, especially those extremely complicated, it is advisable to keep all things clear, so the reader can follow the riddle without getting confused. That's what for me could be improved here.

◗But I liked the plot! Even if there are a lot of mystery stories quite similar, this one still got me with the plot. Especially the fight at the funeral (no kidding, I enjoyed it a lot). Keep fighting!

◗First impression: 9/10
◗Grammar: 7.5/15
◗Genre individuality: 10/15
◗Genre usage: 12/15
◗Good fusion: 10/15
◗Pace: 9/10
◗Writing style: 7.5/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 3.5/5

◗◗Total: 68.5/100

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‣Mulittang by iMeGiNeSoN

◗I'll start by telling you it is one of these stories that will surely stay in my head forever. I've never read something even slightly similar to this. It is astounding how different it was from everything that I have ever read. To be honest, it wasn't an easy read for me and I don't think I understand the story the way I should, but it didn't stop me from enjoying it. Graphics and aesthetics are the chef's kiss. Also, I love the title so much and the explanation which came with it. So clever!

◗The writing style is extremely good, sometimes maybe even too good or lyrical for common readers or for those who are not native English speakers. From time to time I had to stop to actually rethink what I read (in a good way).
I understand why so many people told you the story is hard to understand, however, I liked that aspect, especially when you explained it has a personal value to you. It is brave to admit to such things and I admire it a lot. When you put your heart out there, no one can claim otherwise. The story is truly yours. Of course, I would never identify with the story as well as you did, (even if I tried it to understand it better) maybe that is why it is partially confusing and hard to follow.

◗Grammar-wise, I am extremely grateful for well-written dialogues (both grammatically and realistically). All the rest is also on point. Good job. The pace might be a little too fast but considering it has only four chapters I believe it couldn't be done in any other way to fit.

◗As for genres. Adventure, fantasy, and Sci-fi were mentioned but to be honest I would also add a mystery here as well. Because I still believe there is something we as readers should uncover as the story follows. Like, without some of your explanations, I would not get it, but I really tried to. Just as if I was reading the mystery story. Sci-fi genre, perfection. It had all features the good sci-fi should have. Just from the start it gave sci-fi vibes, even from the graphics and fonts. And Mi Casa ofc. Then we get part of the adventure trope. Why part? Because l feel like Adventure should be a way longer story. Yet it had the building for the adventure part (letter as a calling to change something and set the adventure to another world) and we got the objective (finding father/himself). So basically it was set exactly as the adventure story would start and... it ended in the next chapter. I believe it was the most shocking thing in this story for me.

◗Overall, I would like to congratulate you on creating an amazing story which is entirely yours, and yours only. I'm a fan of your individuality ♡

◗First impression: 9/10
◗Grammar: 15/15
◗Genre individuality: 14/15
◗Genre usage: 13/15
◗Good fusion: 15/15
◗Pace: 9.5/10
◗Writing style: 14/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 4.5/5

◗◗Total: 94/100

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‣Temptation by Seong_Grace

◗So I come to your story once more ready to go through the rest of the chapters. Remembering the very first ones I tried to at first distance myself from my previous thoughts and start with the blank page, giving this story another try. Once again I loved all the graphics you did for this story. Each time I opened a new chapter or ended the previous one I was gifted with such a cute image. Loved that.

◗I was happy to notice all the genres you mentioned in your story. It had a lot of action, in many different ways, with some thriller moments that kept me on the edge of my seat and some cute romantic moments. I somehow felt like none of the tropes were truly the main one so in terms of merging genres it was a good thing. But I like how some of the chapters were mostly focused on romance or action. It gave them some kind of individuality and allowed readers to catch their breath a little before going into another scene. The pace was slightly too fast for my liking but it didn't make the story hard to follow, and that's the most important thing. This time I could see more about the characters which I learned to like as well as their backstories and individuality.
Some chapters were just merged together? No paragraphs, no underlined dialogues, no separation, nothing at all. Just a long text from the beginning to the end of the chapter. I'm sorry but whatever was supposed to be written there is basically unreadable. There is no chance somebody will go through this chapter enjoying it, doesn't matter how good the chapter will be. There is a reason why every book, article, or even a simple note uses paragraphs and sentence separation and it is to make the writing clear and easy to follow. If the paragraph is too long, people will skip to the next one (come on, we all do it like that) and if the whole chapter is one paragraph, then you have your answer.

◗That was kinda mystery for me because the rest of the chapters were better organized and I don't really know what it depended on. Maybe it would be worth checking it and revising it? Working a little bit on the structure of your story will make it more attractive and maybe keep people reading it.

◗I would say now when I read the whole story and not only the very first three chapters I was able to look at it as a complete story. I believe that plot-wise it was a good story however the grammar structure and some writing style issues disturbed me in a way that I couldn't enjoy fully.

◗First impression: 9/10
◗Grammar: 7/15
◗Genre individuality: 10/15
◗Genre usage: 10/15
◗Good fusion: 13/15
◗Pace: 9/10
◗Writing style: 7/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 3/5

◗◗Total: 68/100

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‣Slow grenade by A_poisoned_apple

◗To be honest it was my first time reading a story with the members of TxT as a main character and I absolutely loved it. Even if I like the boys and follow their music it still was a fresh start for me, so thank you!

◗We started with the mysterious argument/fighting/suicide thing, a really angsty one, which set the mood for the rest of the story in pair with the second chapter, so the funeral. Then as each of the characters was introduced I liked how all of them got their own chapter. First Yeonjun then Taehyun etc. Seeing the situation and part of the story from their perspective was quite refreshing and made the story at the right pace. It didn't feel as if it was rushed or too slow, as all necessary information was given partially through different characters. I liked that. I liked how we could make a puzzle of what the female mc was for each of the characters before she was killed.

◗As for the grammar and writing style. First of all, there are absolutely no capital letters in this story, and while I know it is probably an artistic choice, it still kinda disturbed me. Same for the dialogues. Apart from the grammar issues, they were also put into one paragraph when two people were talking, which was confusing at times. It is better to separate them and put a new paragraph, even if it is only for dialogue. In this way, everything is clearer and looks neat, and it's easier to read like that. But overall the vocab used and construction of sentences were fine, not overly simple or complicated; just right for this type of story. Also at times used properly to set the mysterious mood or help in solving the case. That was nice!

◗Genres like mystery and crime fiction I believe were blended quite well. And the thing that held them together was that red envelope each of the pack got. It was at the same time a great mystery (both with what was inside and why they got it) and a key to solving the case. Individually the genres stood out. We had the mystery genre more when the pack gathered to solve the case, and more of the crime fiction when police and other authorities tried to find the real culprit (as the case was broadcasted all over the media and was important for the family and successors).

◗I'll say I enjoyed the story and its concept. I would like it to be a little less chaotic technically-wise. Then it would be easier to follow the main plot (so the death case) and all the subplots and retrospections. Even the romance mentioned would shine more. Either way, good luck and thank you for your work!

◗First impression: 8/10
◗Grammar: 8/15
◗Genre individuality: 14/15
◗Genre usage: 13/15
◗Good fusion: 14/15
◗Pace: 9.5/10
◗Writing style: 9/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

◗◗Total: 79.5/100

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‣The other side of the call by Rosecherry2602

◗What struck me the most at first was the strong female lead in the story where there is practically no romance. Finally, a crime story where a woman can do everything by herself instead of being a victim, mere assistant or love interest. She was her own boss in this story and I liked it so much.

I also loved the graphic at the beginning of each chapter and the songs you chose for them. I appreciate the time you spend to find them.
So the story set off and it was already really promising from the beginning. It was another crime story I read recently and yet it somehow stood out. I found it easy to follow and not boring or too complex. Just as it should be where I can also play detective and assume what will happen next.

◗Pace-wise, sometimes it felt as if the mc was omniscient. She got the lead very fast and basically all she assumed came true. I know some detectives are brilliant but all of them would be if the answers just found themselves on their way. There was no shoot-and-miss in her way of work, which was slightly unnatural. But again, it was necessary to uncover the first big plot point (the kids in the cave case) to get to the phone call. And when we got to that phone call... OMG, I loved the idea so much. I loved how it was executed and this whole storyline in trying to save Jungkook's life. For me, that's when the best part of the story started and I'm so glad you decided to write it.

◗I was impressed by the historical aspect of the story, mentioning Korean history and culture from way back (I didn't know about these facts, so thank you for educating me). That is rare in such stories but also extremally necessary to understand the mystery aspect of the story. It blended perfectly with the whole paranormal/sci-fi plotlines and was closely connected, so I would say as for genre fusion you did a great job. Moreover, each of the genres had its own moment to shine. One time the thriller, bloody investigation, and mystery were in focus, then we got to the historical and educational aspects, to be later demolished by the paranormal and action with that phone call. Love it.

◗I liked the writing style. It was most suitable for this kind of story. It set the mood for each of the scenes perfectly and encouraged me to read some more. Grammar-wise it was okay, except for the dialogues. They were natural, just as normal people would talk, but again lacked the proper punctuation. Sometimes I also felt like there were too many characters and names and I had to focus for real to understand what was happening (like in that retrospection scene with Ouija board). Maybe it would be better to just stick to those most important ones? I don't know really. Maybe it's just me.

◗The story really got me hyped and I added it to my library immediately because I really liked the concept. Never read anything similar, though it kinda reminded me of "Kimi no na wa" with the timeline change and saving someone's life in the past. I will most definitely come back, so wait for me. Love you and thank you for an amazing story!

◗First impression: 9/10
◗Grammar: 12/15
◗Genre individuality: 14/15
◗Genre usage: 14/15
◗Good fusion: 15/15
◗Pace: 8/10
◗Writing style: 13/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

◗◗Total: 90/100

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‣Blessed Cursed by nishimura_rizzi

◗I was really impressed with the beginning of the story. At first, you think it will be a normal school day for the teacher and then... she reveals the date (or a year precisely) and I just knew something about to happen. This moment of suspense got me for real and I had to congratulate you on that. However, I was wondering if they were in the future, 2076 precisely, would they still have normal textbooks? Would schools look the same as they are now? That was my biggest question. You could have gone more creative with this matter but then again it might have given away the surprise of telling which year we got. Ahh, how to find the great balance?

◗Then we set off with the retrospection. The pace of this story is impeccable. Things are happening at the speed of light and before you understand what had happened you have to face another plotline that is (in my opinion) poorly introduced and explained. We have a family in the car then... boom! The accident? The zombies or pandemic or other thing strikes. Suddenly they are facing some random dudes and decide to trust them just like that? And go with them to wherever they're taking them? Like? And why is the mc deciding on the future of the family if her MOTHER is right beside them? I'm sorry but it didn't add up at all.

◗Then we have the temper tantrum mc goes through after the zombie attack and all I was asking while reading this scene was: why does she care? She knows him for one day or even less? Can you develop a feeling that strong in such a short amount of time? Maybe that is why all the romantic interactions between these two were somehow forced on me and didn't seem genuine. And that's a shame because that is what you should look for in romance stories.

◗Thriller and action tropes were executed pretty well. Fighting scenes were lively, the thrill of the possibility of being attacked or killed even. The great mystery to as why the zombie came or how to fight them, how the shelter was formed, and all the backstories of the characters. They were interesting and kept the story together. They were packed with emotions, I could feel the struggle of each of the fights, conversations, and arguments. So on that level, I enjoyed that.

◗Writing style again turned out to be tricky to judge. I felt like the story was based solely on dialogue (which lack the proper grammar) and didn't give us the proper insight into the plot goes with used photos inside chapters. I'm not a fan of them and I would rather read a handy description of the chapter instead of seeing a picture. Also, I noticed you used the word "inquired" a LOT of times, almost everywhere. It is not a mistake to write ASK from time to time. It is a normal word as well.

◗I have mixed feelings about this story because I can't really tell if I enjoyed it apart from the first chapter. As the category is best genre fusion, I have to admit the genres were somehow mixed even well but separately they were really chaotic: chaotic romance, chaotic action and maybe that's why the fusion itself was also chaotic.

◗Nevertheless, I wish you the best in the future and I would like to come back to one of your completed and revised stories. Good luck!

◗First impression: 8/10
◗Grammar: 10/15
◗Genre individuality: 10/15
◗Genre usage: 10/15
◗Good fusion: 10/15
◗Pace: 5/10
◗Writing style: 9/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 5/5

◗◗Total: 67/100

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‣Mi Amor by jintelligent_jinius

◗I had a good feeling about this story from the very beginning. I liked the introduction chapter and the general idea you set in the first few paragraphs. I'm a sucker for stories about two people destined to meet each other via some visions/dreams/other magic, so I like to idea you introduced. Soulmates au? Sign me tf in. Even better because they both had the vision but for different reasons. I like all the characters you introduced and their individuality. Maybe only sometimes their actions were too chaotic or seemed rushed, a little bit not natural but nothing too unrealistic, so I'll let it slide.

◗The story mixed romance, action, and maybe some mystery as well and I could easily find all of these tropes in the story. They were distinctive enough to play the key roles in the story and mixed well to create a balanced plot. It contained some funny moments and misunderstandings as well, like the girlfriend's motive or the whole engagement party. I liked it a lot.

◗I had a hard time deciding on how to judge the writing style. Sometimes the language was really simple and some scenes relied mostly on dialogue and nothing more. But then there were whole chapters with detailed descriptions, long paragraphs with nice vocab which only encouraged me to read more.

◗Grammar-wise, the dialogues were not written properly and most of them lacked capital letters and had space after the quotation marks? Idk maybe it's nothing that much serious but sometimes it really put me off. And then there were the photos! I might be biased because I'm not a fan of using them in the middle of the chapter. I know you want to show us how Jimin or other characters reacted but I would rather read about it than see it. That's the point of storytelling and writing in general.

◗This was a story that is entertaining to read. It is not long, it's complete and it can take one long evening to complete it. Nothing is too complicated about it so it is easy to follow. And there are a lot of things happening at the same time, so it's never boring. Maybe there are too many plotlines introduced at once but I found them not confusing and overall well executed. The pace of the story is quite fast and it gets faster as we approach the end of the story. It is connected to the plot and how the evening is important in mc and Jimin's life, according to the visions. So making the last chapters packed with so much information could be justified.

◗I appreciate the work you put into your work so keep going! Thank you for this story!

◗First impression: 9/10
◗Grammar: 10/15
◗Genre individuality: 13/15
◗Genre usage: 13/15
◗Good fusion: 14/15
◗Pace: 8/10
◗Writing style: 10/15
◗Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

◗◗Total: 81/100

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Judge stopperbuns

‣Circus of Coulrophobia by Yeahidonthavethink

◗First impression - (7/10)

Starting with the title, It's definitely creative and something unique. Good job!! The blurb of the story gives enough insight into the plot of the story but it's so simple. The author can try giving it a creative form by trying to use fewer words or simply giving some space between the lines. The cover is good as of now but the author can try on a cover shop to give it a more enchanting look to lure readers. 

◗Grammar - (15/15)

The grammar in the story was really perfect and the author knows her way well around sentence formation. Again, a commendable job!!

◗Genre usage (15/15)

Excellent!! The author did very well at describing the things and matching them to the expectations one gets while reading horror or thriller genre books. The spooky vibes, the mystery, everything was really well crafted. The way there was suspense until the last, and there were so many scenes where I literally got the feeling of watching a good movie! 

◗Genre individuality - (15/15)

The author did very well in maintaining the individuality of both genres. I didn't feel any genre overpowering each other. There was suspense, there was horror, too many questions and mystery; everything in a good amount and felt natural.

◗Good fusion (15/15)

As stated above, both of the genres went hand in hand. There were eery vibes synchronous with the confusion about the people in the house, and the mystery of the circus nightmares. A remarkable plot indeed. The genres were well blended making the story interesting and readers grip their seats for the next turn!

◗Pace - (10/10)

The story was neither fast nor slow, it makes readers feel and imagine well without being bored. The dilemmas of Winona, her fears and her experience were described well enough to get the feel of what readers are really getting in. As You dive deeper, more horror unfolds.

◗Writing style - (15/15)

It's clear enough from the above points that the author has a good sense of describing things perfectly. I was totally into reading until last and that was all because of how well the story was written. I was hooked!!!

◗Overall enjoyment - (5/5)

I loved the story so much, the author can consider modifying the blurb and changing the title if possible, the rest is pure perfection!

◗◗Total- (97/100)

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‣That Joseon Rain by IR3NIC

◗First impression - (10/10)

Mindblowing! The book cover and the graphics are so amazing that it catches the sight and attract you at the first click. The blurb is very well written too. I could perfectly imagine the plot I would have to see unfolding by reading the blurb. And the title is definitely unique. Everything was so creative that it was pleasing to read

◗Grammar - (15/15)

Perfect!

◗Genre usage (12/15)

The usage of the genre was well executed, tho the historical genre is very common and somehow lacked a little creativity. I acknowledge that the story's main character was Myrah and things do revolve around her but I would have loved to know some scenes or a little background about the other characters in the story. Rest all was up to the mark.

◗Genre individuality - (13/15)

The historical genre goes well with any other one, and here it was revenge. The author did really well in describing and coming up with the historical background to set the mood. But there were sometimes I felt "revenge" overpowering the other genre. There was really less mention of any clashes or even a hint of any reason in history, which would justify Myrah's actions.

◗Good fusion (15/15)

The genres were well-blended and intrigued the readers to try to find out about the cause of revenge. The story is set up in history and the main character being a cunning queen just gives it all the more reason to make revenge powerful.

◗Pace - (8/10)

I personally felt the pace of the story was a little slow, yet I couldn't dive deep into Myrah or Jimin's emotions. I accept Myrah's emotions and actions were blinded by revenge, but the other characters' emotions could have been described a little better.

◗Writing style - (15/15)

Perfect! The author knows her way around weaving the words into a perfect story. The writing style well suited the plot and the author did an excellent job at it.

◗ Overall Impression - (4/5)

I really enjoyed the story but sometimes it was a little slow for my liking. But overall it was definitely a good read. Great job by the author!!

◗◗Total: 92/100

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‣A House is not a Home by Vivi_0304

◗First impression - (6/10)

The blurb of the story was well written, but it got terminated at the end. I know you have mentioned it in the very first chapter of the story, but you can try making it short and a little more creative, to intrigue readers. And maybe it won't get terminated if it's short. You can try to experiment a little more with graphics and try giving the book an attractive look. The cover of the book also seems crowded enough and not really clear. You can try applying in a cover shop for that.

◗Grammar - (9/15)

This was the weakest point of the book. The sentence formation was not correct, there were many instances when there was a sudden shift in the tense, wrong form of tenses was used. Also, try not to write the "internet language" like "u" instead of you and much more...It takes away the seriousness of the story. It's okay to make mistakes, and I think the story will become a lot better if the grammatical mistakes are corrected by proofreading. Because some readers like me need good grammar to proceed with reading.

◗Genre usage (13/15)

The genres were well executed and you succeeded in creating the suspense you wanted, but avoid pre-announcing the antagonist. That takes away the thrill and mystery. Readers were pre-informed in a chapter that Psy is a villain before him actually causing chaos in any chapter. So try to avoid that, because it's a big spoiler; and thrill always is best without any.

◗Genre individuality- (14/15)

The Genres you mentioned, go hand in hand together. There's a faded line of difference between them, thus they were well-maintained throughout. Good job!

◗Good fusion (13/15)

As mentioned above, thriller, suspense and mystery go hand in hand. The thriller is incomplete without suspense, and suspense is another form of mystery. So, It wouldn't have been difficult to blend these genres. A story is only good when they are all together in the story. Though you could try being creative with them to make your story different from others. As mentioned above, the suspense of guessing the villain ended when you already gave a big hint about Psy being one. So, try to go deeper into finding ideas about how to make readers hooked and interested.

◗Pace- (7/10)

The pace of the story wasn't uniform throughout. Sometimes it was okay, sometimes really fast. There was suddenly a monster breakout everywhere, and all the scenes with different pov's mixed up made it confusing to read.

◗Writing style- (8/15)

It was more like a dialogue-based story, with many sentence breakage in between, no proper sentence formation and the weakest point was, the simultaneous pov's of a different person. First, we got introduced to JK's pov, then Jennie, then Lisa, Jin, and Yoongi all at once. This confuses the readers as to where the story is going. Try dividing the chapters based on different pov's to make it less complicated and not make reading feel like a task. I would say the plan you came up with was definitely good, but you need to work on your writing skills, be it grammar or this. You have a creative mind, all you need is to get some experience and execute your imagination well. Don't worry though, we all learn from mistakes.

◗Overall enjoyment- (4/5)

As mentioned earlier, I barely read books with improper grammar, but in this book, the plot was so good to quit. You did a good job at that!! Good luck!

◗◗Total- (74/100)

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‣Unnecessary Enchantment by WhatAtinyWorld

◗First Impression- (7/10)

The title of the story was uniquely good. The blurb was perfect except for some grammar errors, like- "maybe strange should be his last attempt" can be written as " he decides that Maybe his last attempt at life should be strange" "Either his mind nor the woods-alone" should be written as "Neither his mind nor the woods-alone" So please change that. There can be work done on the graphichs for the book, since it plays a big part in attracting readers. So If you can, try changing that or apply in a graphic shop if you can't.

◗Grammar : (14/15)

The grammar was perfect but the sentences could have been a little more creative. But It's okay if you don't do that, It's good no matter what.

◗Genre usage: (15/15)

I looked at how you slowly proceed with mixing the genres, like at the start it was the battle of Jonho in his mind, and then there's a fantasy world of Maebob being introduced. It was very executed. The finest among all.

◗Genre individuality: (15/15)

A really good use of blending real-life issues like mental health, and escapism in a fantasy world/different world. The best thing was they didn't overlap and flowed so well.

◗Good fusion- (15/15)

As mentioned earlier, both genres blended so well and naturally, and it made the story interesting as it proceeded. I personally loved it after Jongho arrived in the woods, haha.

◗Pace- (9/10)

I felt the pace was slow at the start, which sometimes makes people uninterested if they don't hold on to the story. You can try blending two short chapters into one, to improve that. Tho it got better later on.

◗Writing style- (13/15)

The writing was perfect but there's one thing I'd like to suggest, i.e., please add an "introduction to characters" chapter because there were many characters from the first chapter itself, that I got confused with their roles and had to go back to the previous chapters while reading. So please make a "cast" chapter to make it easier for the readers and effortless reading.

◗Overall enjoyment- (5/5)

I enjoyed the story once I got through four chapters with the struggle of understanding a character. (I am a non-fan, so it was extra difficult for me :') I loved, loved the way you described the colours and the concept of that. Excellent thinking!!

◗◗Total- (93/100)

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‣The Day I Die by Yeontanaaaaaaa

◗First impression- (8/10)

The blurb is written perfectly and the title is also uncommon. But the graphics (in between the chapters) could have been done better. If possible, please try to modify it. Also, if you can..try coming up with a more creative blurb. This one is good but it can be better.

◗Grammar- (13/15)

I didn't find grammatical mistakes as such, except for some words which are obvious while writing, but the sentence forming could have been more creative.

◗Genre usage- (13/15)

The zombie apocalypse is one of the most used genres on Wattpad, and you did well in executing it. But, you can try being a little more creative and try to make the story a little different from the normal trend. There were a lot of characters mentioned, and instead of just them being dead one by one; you can maybe create a hidden villain among them or some.

◗Genre individuality- (14/15)

The emotional scenes are natural in a story of zombies, and you did pretty well in describing both genres perfectly when needed.

◗Good fusion- (15/15)

It's natural for an emotional scene to follow after a zombie attack and you did enough justice with that. The two genres blend so naturally, It's always a rollercoaster to read such a story and I was hooked into finding out what will follow!

◗Pace-(8/10)

The pace was good, but not uniform. Sometimes I feel like the story proceeded too fast, and sometimes too slow. Like that fight scene when Jin and his friends try to reach the safe spot. I had to skip it a little in between because I personally felt it was confusing due to being over-described.

◗Writing style- (15/15)

Perfect!!! Boy I was hooked on the story and the characters, loved it!

◗Overall enjoyment- (5/5)

I really loved the story and was excited to read it.

◗◗Total- 91/100

Good luck!