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►Reminiscences  by SamTaefics

◗◗Total - (50/50)

◗Creativity - (10/10)
I dread reading sad stories but with this one, I didn't realise that I continued reading even after the required chapters!

◗Character expression - (10/10)
The way the feelings of main characters was described, I was completely lost in reading, I was able to feel her pain and suffering! I was really engaged throughout.

◗Flawless (10/10)
Well, what can I even say? I was hooked!!

◗Grammar and Vocabulary - (10/10)
Perfect!

◗Personal enjoyment - (10/10)
Applaud for you author. I loved it so much! The writing, the concept, and the wrenching emotions were described so well! Everything was perfect!!!

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►Flowers from 1970 by Bangtan_cute_person

◗◗Total - (49/50)

◗Creativity - (10/10)
The writing made me feel like watching a good k-drama. Plot is so good!!

◗Character expression - (10/10)
Author you did a great work at describing how the characters feel, and their dilemmas.

◗Flawless (10/10)
I was fully immersed while reading, you did a good work at the flow of the story!

◗Grammar and Vocabulary - (9/10)
Other than some irresistible errors, the sentences lacked proper punctuation. Also, break the sentences, there were some of them which could be easily broken into two.

◗Personal enjoyment - (10/10)
I totally enjoyed reading and am Looking forward to completing it. Amazing job!!!

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►I Can Die For This Love by Cool_Summer29

◗◗Total - (45/50)

◗Creativity - (9/10)
I liked your way of creating suspense, it gets the readers hooked.

◗Character expression - (10/10)
I was really impressed by the last chapter and the way you described your characters, I could feel their emotions just by reading three chapters, well done author!

◗Flawless (9/10)
Other than some sentence forming, it was all good. I sometimes felt the pace of the story changing but by the end it all became good. In conclusion, your story had a good flow.

◗Grammar and Vocabulary - (7/10)
I personally feel grammar is your weak point because there were sentences I would have to stop while reading and rethink. Like: ‘With a "come in" as an answer coming in my way, I pulled open the door”. I felt the sentence could have been so much simpler, something like 'I heard a come in as I opened the door. There were tenses problems too- in some sentences.

◗Personal enjoyment - (10/10)
I really enjoyed reading and am looking forward to read it completely, once I get time. You did a great job!!

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►The Secret Keeper by winter-hia

◗◗Total - (43/50)

◗Creativity - (10/10)
The plot was something new and intriguing. Something I haven't read before.

◗Character expression - (9/10)
I could picture out the character's feelings throughout, you did a good job!

◗Flawless (7/10)
Almost every sentence was written in passive form, which makes it difficult in reading. Try to write in a simple and less complicated way, such that readers don't get confused, I had to read some lines twice to decipher the meaning.

◗Grammar and Vocabulary - (8/10)
You need to work on punctuation, there are many sentences written without seperated by commas. and also there were some tense errors and other grammatical errors. I see a lot of potential in your writing, just try to make it less complicated for the readers (:

◗Personal enjoyment - (9/10)
The only thing that stopped me from reading further was the complexity of writing. I loved your poetic lines. Good job!!!

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►Kalopsia by minnie_mxchi_

◗◗ Total - (48/50)

◗ Creativity - (8/10)
The writing was definitely good and interesting, but I personally have read plots like this. Yet, | loved it.

◗Character expression - (10/10)
The character were written very well!

◗Flawless (10/10)
It was perfect and I could imagine the scenes well.

◗Grammar and Vocabulary - (10/10)
Perfect!

◗Personal enjoyment - (10/10)
I truly enjoyed reading it, somehow it reminded me of those good old authors that are scarcely left here. Great work!!

►Judge- thereverence

►Temptation by Seong_Grace

◗The introduction chapter intrigued me, mostly because I was concerned if all the text willcentr. Fortunately, it wasn’t so and I could focus on what was actually happening in the story.

◗At first, I had to notice the grammar which unfortunately was bad. Mixed tenses between past and present, wrong prepositions or lack of them, missing pronouns. Weird word choice, just as if sentences were directly translated into English instead of being written in an English way. It just didn’t feel natural. Most of the time I had to re-read the sentences and try to rewrite them in the way they should be written to finally understand them. It was like a puzzle I had to solve before I can proceed with the story. And even then it was hard to tell. I was mostly guessing what the author had in mind instead of enjoying their vision.

◗While reading I was slightly confused by a girl who received the autograph from Jimin. She came back to her ‘gang of sluts’(?). At this point, I didn’t know if it was intentional (if yes then it’s quite concerning to call her like that) or if it again was a wrong word choice.

◗Plot-wise, what intrigued me was the first meeting of mc and Jimin. I was like: wait, what? Do they know each other? How do we know his name? Did I miss something? Only the second chapter gave me some answers. Still, not so many of them, which I also appreciate. It would be bad to get all the information right at the start. We know the boys are into some illegal stuff mc isn’t aware of, and since the story is written in second person's pov we learn about it together. Besides that, the story was rather chaotic: car crashes, exams, trips, more car crashes, calls, and meetings. I didn’t really know where the story should go and what were the key plot points. If things should happen for a reason, then I didn’t see the reasons here.

◗There were four main characters and though each of them had its distinctive features, still none of them was characteristic enough to catch my attention. Especially the boys, maybe it’s still too early to judge them. The mc was a little bit different. I was surprised to see her being so into school stuff, learning, getting good grades, and acing this one exam. I liked that a lot. Nice touch. I rarely see it in the stories.

◗Overall it was really hard to go through the next paragraphs despite my greatest tries and wills. The writing style definitely takes away from the potential the story has. Maybe it would be advisable to find a way to make it more coherent, smooth, and easier to read. There is a lot of work ahead for you author-nim, but keep going!

◗PS: I also have this book for the other category assignment, so let’s see how it goes in the rest of the chapters. I’m ready to be positively surprised :3

◗Creativity: (3/10)

◗Characters: (5/10)

◗Flawless: (2/10)

◗Gram/Vocab: (2/10)

◗Enjoyment: (3/10)

◗◗Total: (15/50)

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►Solus Snippets by Katopark

◗From the very first sentence I read, I knew I had stumbled upon something truly amazing. And with each following paragraph, I was more confident that I wasn’t mistaken before. Because come on, I didn’t expect to be pampered by such amazing and flawless writing. It was so refreshing to read it after tons of ff with questionable grammar and plots.

◗Rich vocabulary, grammar on point, proper dialogue punctuation (omg finally, thank you!). Each sentence kept me intrigued and connected to the story. There was not a single moment I was confused or disconnected. I wanted to know more and that’s the greatest asset the story can have. Events took place at the right pace and the perfect writing made it easier to read. It was a pleasure.

◗Narration is what got me into the story in the first place. It’s something new, something I’ve never experienced yet. Breaking a fourth wall in such a fluent and smooth way is truly admirable. I didn’t even find it weird or distracting. After a while, it just felt normal to be addressed by the narrator. I loved it.

◗The story was coherent, the plot made sense, and there was nothing I could pinpoint or complain about. The first three chapters were a great introduction to a bigger story and from what I saw in the aesthetic and chapter list, it seems to be a thought-through and well-planned adventure. I trust that the author knows their story to its core and gives their best to tell us about it through writing. And even though I’m not into fantasy stuff so much, it still wasn’t an issue.

◗Characters were distinctive and unique. Still, they fit into certain roles and models in such stories. I loved the family bond they had. Nothing irritates me more in the stories than characters who seem paper-like, those I cannot identify with, and those who seem fake, not human-like. Here they were pretty much human-like and acted just as real people do. Both adults and children. Sometimes authors forgot kids act differently, and think differently, and you author-nim, clearly didn’t forget about it. Thank you!

◗It was a pleasure to read your story! Have a nice life, please :>

◗Creativity: (9.5/10)

◗Characters: (9/10)

◗Flawless: (9.5/10)

◗Gram/Vocab: (10/10)

◗Enjoyment: (9/10)

◗◗Total: (47/50)

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►Je t'aime, Imbecile by strawberry1d

◗The very first thing I noticed was the pov. I rarely see second-person's pov stories so it was refreshing to try for once. The beginning was rather unexpected but it set up a nice vibe of the story so I started to dwell some more into it.

◗Then I noticed the grammar. It wasn’t the best one, unfortunately. Mixed tenses, past and present, depending on the paragraph, but it happened in the following sentences as well. Such inconsistency really put me off while reading. It was all I could focus on for a while.

◗Then we got the pictures. It takes a lot from the story when suddenly you bump into them a few times in one chapter. I want to read about the characters, cars, houses, and outfits, so I can imagine them on my own. The category is the best writing style, not the best picture selection.

◗Some of the dialogues were placed inside the big paragraphs which made them slightly unreadable. It would be better to put them in separate paragraphs to make them more visible and easier to read, especially when people are talking. It would be more eye-pleasing and give the story a better pace. Some of them also lacked the proper punctuation and there were too many quotation marks at times (?) or there were any, so I had to guess where the sentences ended. A little too chaotic.

◗I had mixed feelings about vocab as well. There were a lot of complex words, more sophisticated than I expected, verbs I haven’t seen in a while reading an ff. That was nice. However, some of the verbs were used improperly. It could happen because of language differences (I struggle with this sometimes as well when in my native language other verbs are connotated with the given noun) but still it felt weird. But what I liked a lot was the inclusion of French. I rarely see it and it was executed pretty well. Even when characters spoke French the translation was provided, so the readers shouldn’t be confused.

◗There was a lot of exposition in the writing. When the first chapter was mostly about action, the second one was packed with various information. I felt like I read a detailed essay on everyone’s life. Some new characters were introduced (like Jess, Pierre, and Hyerin) and before I could decide on what I thought about them, I already knew everything. I got their characters and personalities given to me on the silver plate. Nothing to guess, nothing I could assume or found out on my own. That’s a shame.

◗However, the plot got my attention. Never in my life have a thought of settling the traffic accident issue by working in someone’s hotel. It sounds so absurd but somehow it works. It’s probably not possible legally (Noemi should really make a legal contract upon her work because I can see her getting totally scammed irl). I also can’t see anybody so easily agreeing to such conditions but it’s ff, everything’s possible here. A little bit of craziness can be justified. Still, I liked how since chapter two we got a full focus on the hotel and all its drama. I got the soap opera vibes from it. Cool. 

◗So I believe the plot is the most interesting part of this story, as it should be. With some small changes in writing style to make it smoother (and maybe changing pictures into real descriptions) it looks promising. Good luck to you author!

◗Creativity: (6/10)

◗Characters: (5/10)

◗Flawless: (4/10)

◗Gram/Vocab: (5/10)

◗Enjoyment: (5/10)

◗◗Total: (25/50)

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►More than that by dynamjoonics_

◗I liked the very beginning of the story. The few first paragraphs were intriguing, and well-written and got me thinking: this can be good. However, the further I went into the chapter the more concerned I was. Grammar started to slip away at some points, but it wasn’t so disturbing. Only a few sentences were kinda unreadable but I managed to go through them, it wasn’t disturbing that much.

◗Unfortunately, dialogues were not written correctly (punctuation and dynamics), sometimes tenses were mixed and there was a lot of exposition. You know, just fact, no emotions. Scenes changed quickly without leaving a desired impact or a vivid memory.

◗As for the vocabulary usage, it was mostly simple and it repeated quite often, sometimes in following sentences or really close between paragraphs. Some information was repeated as well, so for a moment I felt like I’m reading about the same stuff again and again without proceeding further into the story. For example, the main character limped back home, then limped going up the stairs, and later limped in her room. Well, if she sprained or hurt her ankle she won’t stop limping, no need to repeat this information three times.

◗I learned nothing about the main character except the fact she is not as good as the character she compared herself to in the beginning and the fact she returned to the team after a long break (it was said after a decade which is quite a long break and I don’t even know how old is the main character; maybe it was a joke I didn’t get, I’m sorry then).

◗Tough to judge the character’s expression if I didn’t see it at all. True, it was only the first chapter but still no information on the characters whatsoever. The guy she was so intrigued with? I don’t even know how did he look like. What was his vibe? Why she was so into him? Maybe I’d get my answers once I read more of the story but at this point, I don’t even know a single thing about him. Something memorable. Something that would make me want to know this mysterious guy, and feel the same way about him as mc.

◗I don’t know where the plot will lead us. I feel like I don’t know anything about the story except the mysterious gaze. That’s the only intriguing thing I got from this chapter. The only thing that stayed in my mind after reading it.

◗As for it being the first chapter of the story, it is not unique or intriguing enough to make me want to read more. And for me, that is the biggest flaw. Sometimes I can turn a blind eye to the grammar or other slight mistakes if there is something about the plot that caught my attention. So good luck with that in the future.

◗PS: I loved the cute graphics at the beginning and the end of the chapter!

◗Creativity: (3/10)

◗Characters: (3/10)

◗Flawless: (4/10)

◗Gram/Vocab: (5/10)

◗Enjoyment: (4/10)

◗◗Total: (19/50)

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►I M Possible Love by ViniShah2

◗The blurb suggested a huge wedding drama ahead of me and boy oh boy, I got what I wanted. I believe the plot was the greatest asset of this story. I liked the idea and all the connections between the characters. It was almost like a soap opera for me and I like soap operas. So I was eager to read it. 

◗I was slightly confused at times since we got to see everyone’s pov. Bora’s thoughts, then Yoongi’s thoughts, then Jimin’s thoughts. It made me question who was the main character here. Yes, such head-hoping can be good: we know exactly what’s happening, what each of the characters thinks, etc. However, leaving something to the readers’ imagination would make them invested in the story a little bit more. When there is some mystery, some uncertainty; when you can ask a question: how will the character react? what will they think and do? Instead, we got the answer just in the next paragraph. It’s not a mistake but I had to get used to this kind of narration.

◗For example, the moment we met Hoseok, I felt like I was reading the same scene from four different points of view. First I learned how Jimin felt about it, then how Yoongi, Bora, and Hobi felt about it. Even Jia at some point. Maybe I would rather see them being jealous/uncomfortable in their presence/or other emotions instead of being told they were? Tell less, show more? I feel like this scene could be written a little bit smoother, so I could find on my own something was up instead of learning about it in the next sentence (Hobi being involved in the love drama). It’s like asking questions and revealing the answers without giving the time to think about them.

◗Nevertheless, I was there for a drama in the end. Like oh gosh, it wasn’t a love triangle, not a square but a pentagon? Sign me tf in.

I liked the detailed descriptions of the characters, how respectively Bora and Yoongi looked at each other, each time finding another amusing feature in their presence, posture, face, etc. It really felt like two people realizing they were falling in love. It was so natural. Also, everyone here had their distinctive character, making them unique and easier to recognize. That was nice.

◗Grammar-wise, the dialogue’s punctuation was partially wrong but other than that everything was fine, delivering pretty well all that had to be delivered. Vocab is neat, not overly fancy but just on point.

However, I’m sorry but every time I read the word ‘orbs’ instead of eyes I cringe a lot. Sometimes the simplest way is the best way. No need to be extra all the time. Especially when vocabulary usage in this story was executed really well. Maybe if I could, I would split a few sentences to make them clearer and to avoid repetitions of her/his/he/she/him in one line (there were a few such clusters that made me reread a sentence to actually understand it). But that’s just my aesthetic and, as we know, each writer has their own, so I won’t dwell on it too much.

◗Overall, I enjoyed reading the story. I would prefer it to be less transparent so that more things would be left to my imagination but still, I had a great time. Good luck!

◗Creativity: (7/10)

◗Characters: (8/10)

◗Flawless: (6/10)

◗Gram/Vocab: (7.5/10)

◗Enjoyment: (7/10)

◗◗Total: (35.5/50)

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