Heyy, Ari baby! You're such a positive soul I see flapping around. Seeing you makes me happy.
You're always there to keep checking in on me and I'm so lucky to have you as a friend.

I'll try my best to give your amazing book a well deserved review. I hope you find it satisfactory.

This is for you my Joonie-biased bubb! 💜

A broken contract remains to be mended

With seven pieces that need to be blended.

The adventure lies in gathering these creatures,

But they find me first and make me their feature.

The ancient one brings his fangs near my face,

While the other's dark presence puts me in a haze.

The one with white wings can read my mind.

The warlock makes sure that our paths are entwined.

Completely entranced by the siren's song,

And in the embrace of a charming demon is where I belong.

In situations where escape is dire,

Out comes the breathe filled with fire.

The outcome of this treaty?

Makes our coexistence a reality.

- Mia@2020
Inspired by The Gatherer by flvwerjoon

TITLE: 5/5

The title "the gatherer" is an extremely simple yet intriguing title. Questions start filling my mind, 'gathering what', 'who gatherer', 'why does the person need to gather', 'why gather'. It interesting yet so very apt and straight to the point. It's simply based on the protagonist's role, which is pivotal to the whole story line.

At this point, I feel like it's not just a noun, but simply describes the whole journey of the story (even though it's not a verb form used).

BOOK COVER: 4/5

I love the brown picture aesthetic that you used. It's a neutral color that can be portrayed to be on the wild side and yet chill, just like the characters in your story.  The outdoor setting just speaks Adventure. The font you've chosen is pretty good, the only thing lacking in it is clarity. Perhaps it's due to the 3D shadowing effect you have used. If you want to retain that effect, its not a problem at all, just increase the font size so that it doesn't look smudged in or unclear.

DESCRIPTION: 4/5

Your description wasn't bad, it was good but had it been a non-fantasy AU. You have so much of potential interesting and exciting introductory descriptions to give, so why waste so much of potential to present a normal introduction? Use up some of your amazing creative juices and present an introduction that people can't turn away from. You have amazing characters who are supernaturals such as sirens, fallen angels, incubus, etc. Just like a siren's song is deadly but oh so alluring, lure your readers into reading your book and getting caught up in the world that YOU have created.

PLOT: 13/15

Even though the plot for a fantasy AU might end up being similar on a basic premise, how you bring out the plot for the story becomes prime. In that case, I think you've done a fairly good job at that. You've plotted it well enough to bring out the dynamics between each member and Resi before you could make us meet the next member. I like how you've also put focus on the dynamics between each supernatural themselves. I like how you've put in a backstory that makes us get restless with curiosity. Invoking the best energy out of the reader. I also like how you've kept two of the supernaturals still as a mystery. To one you're making us understand him even before we can officially meet him; and the other still remains yet a mystery. 

How can you improve? Because this is a fantasy AU, again I can't stress over the fact that you have so many possibilities to explore, you have the potential to build and create a more sophisticated or complicated universe where you can bend rules to your whims and fancies. Tap into that exploration, you'll do even more amazingly well.

I have to 'plaud you on one thing, when you introduced the creatures, we were all guessing based on the typicality of the members. Yet the unpredictable happened. The creatures and the boys were different from what we had guessed, which is a really really good skill of a writer - impressing the readers by proving them wrong and surprising them. Now that we think about it, I would't have them any other way. (I think this point can also be brought out in the 'Character Development' section. You made the familiar characters into unfamiliar roles but with comfort)

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 13/15

Your characters are all very different and like you mention in your story, have different personas (maybe made a BTS reference, guess you'll never know xD). I like involved you feel with them and you can't help but love and admire them. There's the catch though, in the end they are all supernatural beings, I wish you could introduce elements within the story that would introduce us to feelings like fear or disgust or whichever negative emotion that be associated with a deadly supernatural. If you could explore that duality and bring in a good contrast with their amazing fun personalities, your characters would be more wholesome. 

WRITING AND GRAMMAR: 11/15

Your writing on a whole is very engaging and has an easy flow. But how can you make this better? Try looking into your sentence structure and the verb tenses you use, make a few tweaks here and there, it would be a more enriching text to read.

I completely enjoy your pace of writing, it gives me a lot of excitement and no chapter ends up being boring. Your cliff hangers for your chapters.....*sighs* you're gonna make me die of curiosity. Like they say, curiosity killed the cat  ;-; (BUT the cat has nine lives, HA, so the jokes on you, Missy )

Certain humane grammatical mistakes here and there, check those out. 

I would love to point out again, this is a fantasy AU, the more descriptions you give the better involved and rich your universe gets. For example, give more detailed descriptions of the character's surroundings, maybe the way the texture their clothes, etc. I know that these are minute details again, but the more adjectives you provide the better the reader understand. I need to feel like I'm in the shoes of the character. So go bonkers! 

ENDING: 9/10

YES YES YESS!! I'd definitely give out recommendations to everyone to give your book a read. It's so engaging, thrilling and exciting. You can't help but feel involved with the characters. 

All of this indicating one thing, GIVE US MORE UPDATES, AUTHOR-NIM. 

OTHER DETAILS:

I appreciate the time you spent in selecting aesthetics for the start of every chapter. It definitely sets a mood at times. 

Oh! I loved how at the start you gave pictures and descriptions of the supernatural characters without mentioning who was which. It made us play a guessing game which was fun (especially when proven wrong).

TOTAL SCORE: 59/70

Good job, Ari!

Spectacular.

I hope you're satisfied with my review. Any queries or objections, you can DM me. Like I said, we can always agree to disagree as long as it's civil and constructive. :3

Also, lemme know if you guys think I missed anything out, or if I need to add anything.

P.S I wish I could go siren hunting like this with them at sea