Author: picklejuice100

Reviewed by: _Lilyology

• COVER : 9.5/10

The picture is really cute for the story. The font for the title is sweet, and the hearts heighten it. I like the two people sitting and leaning on one another, like best friends. Nice cover.

• TITLE : 9.5/10

The title goes along with the story. I would take off the extra dots and leave it "Our Bitter, Beautiful Lives." I could feel the meaning of the title within the first five chapters of the story. You did well. Great work.

• BLURB : 9/10

The synopsis is okay. Readers can get a sense of what will go on between the characters. The extra periods after "But" could be taken away, since it is not needed for the sentence. I like the questions in both paragraphs. Makes a reader wonder what will happen. The blurb is good.

• CREATIVITY : 8/10

With only five chapters available, it's hard to figure out how much creativity will be in the story. For those five chapters, there was a good amount of creativity. It is a typical teen fiction that has high school scenes with teachers, students, and friends. The story was not boring and had an interesting quality to it. I liked the interactions between all the characters and the dialogues you used. Great job.

• PLOT : 15/15

The plot is slowly opening up. For five chapters, I'd give it a 15 out of 15. I like where you are going in your story. Very good.

• CHARACTERS : 10/10

Your characters are great. I like both main characters. Your development for them is slowly unravelling. I'm looking forward to seeing how they grow. Keep up the great work.

• GRAMMAR : 13/15

I will not count you too low, considering you are working hard to fix the mistakes that were pointed out. Just monitor how many periods you place in sentences and your punctuations. Your grammar isn't too bad, but you are learning how to spruce up your storyline. Your story was readable, and that is what matters.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You are very communicative to readers and anyone who chats to you. Wonderful job.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

I was highly impressed with your story and how well you've conveyed the two main characters personal lives. Well done. Keep it up, and I will be back to read more.

• TOTAL : 94/100