Author : LittleRogueQueen

Reviewer : Aesthetically_Lazy

• COVER : 10/10

It's a little dark for my liking, but it gives an idea of what the story is like and the fonts are perfect. Great cover. One suggestion though, to make it a little more fun you could have used a quote maybe or something which would make it more interesting. You don't have to do it, of course.

• TITLE : 10/10

I didn't really understand why you chose the name for the title at the beginning, but after reading the first five chapters, I slowly started to understand what you meant. And it's a very catchy title. It will attract the right readers.

• BLURB : 8/10

Your blurb isn't bad.

In the first line, you have said "A City of Assassins. A Country of Enemies. A Dance till Death..." Here you can get rid of the ellipsis. It's not required. Also, it would look more attractive, if you separated the three sentences into three different paragraphs (it's just a suggestion, though).

At the end of the next paragraph, you have used ellipsis, and I really don't understand why you need it. You can get rid of it unless it's important. There is also a passive voice misuse in this paragraph, so just go through it while editing.

After that, you give a little information on Avyanna, the main character. It's good, but I think there is some element missing like you aren't giving enough information. You can work on your presentation a little more. Other than this, I don't think I found any errors.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

I have to say, your imagination power is amazing. The way you crafted the story and made it so natural, I got lost in the story, like I wasn't sitting in my room and reading anymore. I was with Avyanna at the bar, laughing at the two. Your way of writing is also really admirable so good job.

• CHARACTERS : 10/10

Firstly, I would like to start by saying that the main character, Ava, is amazing. Her name is so unique and excellent. Her personality is bright and sharp and unlike the other characters on Wattpad, she is a lot more determined and fierce. I like how you haven't made her into a cliche uncertain character and she has got her priorities straight. Wonderful job. I didn't really see any other main characters except for Bex and Ava because I read the first five chapters but you have worked hard on both of them.
Also, I would love to add that Bex is amazing. He is hilarious and also a great friend who tries to protect Ava whenever he can. This really brought him to life. Good job!

• PLOT : 15/15

Again, I didn't find any plot holes or things that would be concerning for the development of the plot. Your pace was perfect and your chapter lengths were good too- not too small nor too big.

• GRAMMAR : 13/15

I found a few grammatical errors and punctuation errors but you can go through that when editing.
I would like to add that your vocabulary is precise and I learned many new words from this story so good job!

• COMMUNICATION : 3/5

You have replied to many comments but not all of them. Try to reply to all of them because readers take their time commenting on your books. Show your appreciation.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 14/15

Like I mentioned before, the cover was a little dark for my liking but the story was amazing. I enjoyed reading it and I would continue reading it in the future. I wasn't sure of your presentation skills after reading the blurb but they were just fine and nothing was messy. Good job.

• TOTAL : 93/100

Good job! I hope this review helped and if you have any queries, you can always pm me. Stay safe!