Author : Y-O-U-N-G-W-O-M-A-N

Reviewer : Aesthetically_Lazy

• COVER : 10/10 

I love the colors and how well they contrast with one another. Your font is also good but I think you should increase the size of your name so it is seen clearly. 

Good job! 

• TITLE : 10/10

Short and sweet title and it is very accurate for the story. Loved it, good job again! 

• BLURB : 8/10 

Your blurb is ok for the most part. You've written it well and people might check out the story just by reading the blurb, but you need to make it more attractive. Maybe you can add some more information, "to save the queens" or something like that. You also have some punctuation errors. For example; "Where the heck are we?" Add the question mark. And in the next few quotations, add periods. 

• CREATIVITY : 9/10 

Honestly, it was very imaginative. I liked the concept a lot. Like the queens on the other planet get attacked and then the world's most famous boyband has to come and save them? Cool! I loved the concept. Although, you haven't expressed the concept properly. Because you were rushing with the chapters. Take it slow. write bigger chapters and describe everything when necessary. 

• CHARACTERS : 7/10 

Now, I'll admit I'm not a BTS fan so maybe I won't know much about the guys but, I know that when writing a story, you have to construct your characters better. Because you just have the conversations in the first seven chapters that I read. Even if this is a fanfiction, you must make the characters as real as possible. Work on them, you can describe their body language, or you can describe how they look, the emotions on their faces (fear, anger, happiness, relief). Overall, it just needs more editing and constructing and you'll be all set! :)

• PLOT : 13/15 

The plot was going smoothly for the most part. Although there were many errors and a lot of plot holes throughout the story. Also, your chapters are really short. They end before I can get hooked in a story. You've to write longer chapters (more than 1500 words). On the bright side, your storyline is awesome. It had me hooked at many points! And I loved the humor in the story. 

• GRAMMAR : 7/15 

Yeah, you seriously need to work on this. You've three major problems here:- 

1) Tenses:- You keep changing tenses a lot, girl! Keep it in the past tense if it is to be written in the past tense and keep it in the present tense if it is to be written in the present tense. 

2) Dialogue rules:- You've to start a different paragraph when another person starts speaking. And the punctuation at the end also matters. For example; (in your second chapter you have written this)

"Yah!! I asked you all something." They all looked at my face like there was something on it. "Is there something on my face?" I asked and was going to touch my beautiful face when Taehyung asked "What did you ask?" he said looking all innocent. I looked at him with are you kidding me face. 

So you can edit this paragraph like this:- 

"Yah!! I asked you all something," they all looked at my face like there was something on it. 

"Is there something on my face?" I asked and was going to touch my beautiful face when Taehyung spoke up.  

"What did you ask?" he said looking all innocent. I gave him an 'are you kidding me' face. 

So I hope that helps you. 

3) Punctuation- You've got a lot of punctuation errors in your book. But it's not that serious, just edit it a few times and you'll be fine. 

Other than this, there are small errors like repeated words, use of wrong phrases, etc. which you can correct while editing. 

• COMMUNICATION : 1/5 

You have not replied to many comments (at least not in the first five chapters). Try to reply to every single comment because the readers like that a lot. Show that you appreciate their presence. 

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 9/15

The plot was cool and this story has potential, but you have to edit it thoroughly and construct the characters as I said earlier. I did enjoy reading this story and I hope that you can make it even better than it is as of now. 

• TOTAL : 74/100

Good job! If you have any questions, you can pm me.