Author : basicallycatto

Reviewer : ScarletHeartFictions

• COVER : 6/10

The cover did not catch my attention much and didn't do enough to draw me in. The picture in itself is quite nice as it represents the girl being blinded, however my suggestion would be that though the female protagonist is a sweet person and her character resonates with the picture quite well, the overall theme of the plot is darker hence a more intense and dark picture would be better, but that's only a preference. What really failed to build the mood for me would be the font of the book; both your username and the title could be highlighted and represented better with a different font.

• TITLE : 9/10

The title is a very common one but I think it fits the theme well and don't see any need for a change.

• BLURB : 6/10

Let's start from the top;

The starting line was my favorite part of the blurb and I would say it was chosen very well!

Now for the paragraph that follows, which I believe you took from the book itself does well in representing the characters but there were way too many mistakes in there. Such mistakes are tolerable in the book but can't be overlooked in something as critical as the blurb.

Let's go over a few one by one.

You stated "I'm sorry i can't let you go." The 'i' should be capital in this dialogue. Afterwards you said a husky deep voice. There should be a comma in between husky and deep. Also, you stated 'facing to door' where it should've been 'facing the door.'

Then in Isabella's next dialogue tag, the 'i' in 'it' should be capitalized.

Now, for the final part of the blurb, I feel that you explained all of the traits of your characters in the blurb and left little to no space for the readers to be intrigued about them anymore.

• CREATIVITY : 6/10

The characters and the plot is the typical mafia plot here on wattpad. The addition of a blind protagonist did add that spice of uniqueness to your book but that could be greatly improved if you would write more descriptive thoughts and feelings of your characters, for example a harsh and cruel mood for Lucian and a poetic and sweet one for Isabella. Now, what that would do is that it would express how diverse and creative you can get with your expressions and descriptions.

• CHARACTERS : 8/10

As mentioned before the characters are something I've definitely seen before on wattpad but I feel like even in reading five chapters I could connect and associate feelings with the characters. Even though there have been the introduction of a lot of characters, you have given all of them enough spotlight respective to their role in the story, without leaving anyone out.

• PLOT : 14/15

I would really like to applaud you on building and maintaining your plot. It wasn't too fast or abrupt, nor was it too slow paced for the readers to get bored so well done on that. It was quite captivating for me as well.

Now one small thing I would point out is how you wrote all your 'hers' in italic when Lucian was remembering his past. When you use italics you basically create a suspenseful or emphasized mood around that word. Using italics for the first time or for the extremely sadistic parts is great but using it everywhere got quite annoying for me, also because you used the word quite a lot and not just a few times.

• GRAMMAR : 9/15

I found quite a lot of mistakes with the punctuation and the grammar. The word usage and sensory details could also be improved a great deal.

• COMMUNICATION : 0/5

This was a red zone. I saw no reply to any comment and yes there were a couple author notes but they are not enough for the readers to warm up to you.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 11/15

As I said before, the way you built and maintained your plot and characters is great and highly enticed me as a reader! With a little improvement on the details and the grammar you can do wonders with your book!

• TOTAL : 69/100

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