Username: Lehar_2010

Book: UnLove 

Fandom: AvNeil 

Mature: No

Chapters read: 1

REVIEW

Title: 7/10 

Although there's no word as such in English, its use is justified here. The theme of your shot was well justified by this. So, I think it's up to you to whether change it or not. You can add some other words to it to enhance it.

Cover: 5.5/10

I liked the way you desired to design the cover. But, I would say, you can make it a li'l brighter and the background could be something that could sync with the remaining things. The important mention is the title which wasn't visible due to a bright and eye- restraining font. So, you can change it and add the name of the author. You can add some quotes or phrases to emphasize the theme of your shot. 

Blurb: 2/10

Just as I pointed everyone, a reader might choose your book, but a look at the blurb gives the first text impression of your shot or story. That's why add teasers and make it interesting. 

You can add phrases like- 

'When love doesn't help, can family help?' 

Or you can add something regarding the impact that can be on AvNeil's children. 

Plot: 5.5/10

It was a li'l cliché, maybe. When love fades away and the couple tries to battle against this. But, what I liked was the way AvNeil opened to their family. And the way they emphasized that even if their love faded, they would help each other as friends. What I would suggest you, give a li'l elaboration on the events and characters' emotions. 

Grammar: 7/15

There were many mistakes in terms of punctuations, tense errors, and sentence misstructure. Most importantly, the sentences were unclear at times. So, I would say that it requires major editing which you can do with some editing extensions, or you can call for an editing shop on Wattpad. Spellings errors were also there and so, the typos. 

Avni"he said. (Don't do it this way.)

Avni" he said. (Do it this way)

Flow and Pace: 7.5/15

I always feel that you tend to end a big storyline in precision which doesn't let the essence of your story come out properly. That's why it was rushed. This can be written as two shots, or you can increase the number of words to elaborate upon it. 

Character development: 6/15

All I can say is that you tried to explain a greater theme, but it didn't come out properly because I feel that the characters were not given proper space. You can try to give them some space. And you can show that although all members agreed, there could be one member of the family like Prakash who would be angry or wouldn't agree. Then you can give space to his character for sure. And, you can also show what would be the reaction of their children. 

Uniqueness: 3/5

As I said, it started as a cliché theme, but it was unique that you tried to show that open conversation between AvNeil and family. 

Total: 43.5/90

P.S. I hope it was useful and really sorry for the delay.

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 -Published on 26 May 2021-