Username: Lehar_2010

Book: Regret

Chapters read: 1

Fandom: AvNeil

Mature: No

REVIEW

Title: 6/10

I got to know why you put that particular title, but I would suggest you change it. This title doesn't reflect the dominant essence of your shot. 

Cover: 5/10

Although your cover gives an idea about the leads and name, the font you used is really not convincing. You could also use some editing stuff and make the font and color scheme, that's understandable. 

Blurb: 4/10

There was no information regarding the shot in the blurb. That's why a normal reader might not click the read button. Try adding some teasers in the blurb. 

Plot: 7/10

A really amusing plot is there. The thing that really cracked me up was that the other girl was you, Lehar only. However, at some places, it was a li'l shabby. You could have stretched to another shot. It would make it better. 

Grammar: 8/15

Just like I pointed out in the last review, you should give a gap between the subsequent sentences. There was some sentence misstructure and also, there were tense errors. You should try using Google Docs or some editing extension for editing purposes. 

Character Development: 7.5/15

The thing that was needed was an elaboration of both the characters. One time, I didn't feel Neil be in infatuation or love, so, you should try to express his point of view. Next, when Avni told him that he should choose someone who he loves. But, in her talks, there was an inclination towards her favor which you should avoid. I couldn't connect to them properly since you tried to finish many things shortly.

Flow and Pace: 10/15

Just like I said before, you should try focussing on its elaboration because it was being rushed. I couldn't feel connected to anyone's character or emotion at a time. Therefore, you should consider making it a TS.

Uniqueness: 2.5/5

It was a cliché starting and of course, a li'l bit of ending also. But, as you had added the name of another girl as yours, it made it interesting and unique. So, keep it up. 

Total: 50/90 

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-Published on 19 May 2021-