For: Jasp1313

Title: 5/10

Title is not that common here on this app but it is not that creative to lure readers into reading the book in a couple of moments.

You can always have the essence of 'RiAnsh' yet try to be creative.

Cover: 4.5/10

The background picture choice is good. It was a simple cover which was attractive enough. What lacked though was the font, color scheme and the placement of the text.

The ticked could also be placed a little better. Overall it is fine.

Blurb: 5.5/10

This is a shots book so I understand the difficulty of thinking what to write in the description box. However, it is a very important part for the readers to feel the urge to read any book.

I think the blurb was satisfactory to the point of giving a character cloud to any random reader.

Otherwise, you can add a liner in front of every short story or shot you wrote in the book. For eg.

Our Tested Love: Riddhima isolates herself, Vansh accepts her wish, but can their love which is going to be tested for three years remain intact after that?

You can also edit your grammatical mistakes.

Plot: 7/15

Background- The plot background was amazing. I didn't even think of the possibility of Riddhima getting hacked and her vowing to make an app for blocking hackers the reason of her isolation for whole three years. For the song fiction too, you did a commendable job as the little details about their name changing as them being spies were mentioned. TUT was difficult for me to hold a bit as I am not immj viewer, but I guess it was good too given that I let go of most minor details from the serial itself.

Execution: The thoughts were well processed. What lacked though? Execution lacked. Sometimes the pace was too fast, the characters were not as connected to each other and the readers, the conversations felt out of the place, emotions kept changing from joyful to irritation in less than two dialogues on some petty things etc. Subplots lacked fluidity.

And then there were potholes. Why would anyone hack Riddhima (no thread for this)? Why would Riddhima and Vansh not want to even find out who the hacker was? Why would Riddhima not complain about the hacker at the cyber police department? Why would Vansh become so important and Sejal not given even a paragraph for her reaction at the revelation of photos on the pin board?

Why would Riddhima vow to not to meet just Vansh? How did Riddhima and Vansh even complete their education when they self isolated themselves in the home for 3 whole years? How did they have the education to develop highly advanced applications?

About the song fiction,

Riddhima wearing an outfit which exposed her belly was not at all healthy for her. I mean doctors do suggest pregnant women to wear a little loose and covered clothing.

And there were some potholes in the other ones too.

Then the thing lacking was descriptions. There were not worthy descriptions to imagine the scenario or to feel connected to the scene and characters. Describe as much as you can.

Flow and Pace: 6.5/15

The pace was not smooth. We require a pace to adjust with the characters. Here everything was extremely fast paced. Although your updates were mostly 2000+ words big, I reckon, but they did require a steady pace. Somethings needed description and extremely slow place, like the Riddhima and Vansh meeting after 3 years.

Then the flow was severely hampered. The subplots didn't flow smoothly from one to other. It felt as if things were purposely being dragged from one to other.

It happened with me in my first book. I had the starting to end planned and some scenes in my mind I thought I should add. But I missed minor details and that's where things stood messy.

Grammar: 12.5/15

You have a good grammar and great vocab. Although problem arose with the punctuation thing. You can edit these things yourself. There were some typos here and there. Otherwise I don't think there's much problem. Because these types of problems arise only because if fast typing and as I said, you can pretty much edit those by yourself.

Character Development: 10/15

Aryan just impulsively slapping Riddhima for her to even think that any of the three needed proves of being being innocent was really unrealistic, given his character wasn't so.

In some situations, Riddhima and Vansh were just there and other characters were sidelined bit by bit. Ik the shots are only about RiAnsh but if you introduce other characters and then the characters devise a subplot, you can't forget about the subplot without registering the actions and effects of the other side characters.

But, overall, Vansh was a doting partner and friend. He was fierce and protective. Everyone thinks him to be some stone hearted monster but he has a warm personality only reserved for his closed ones and you succeeded in showing that.

Riddhima was not soft and broken female lead like other writers of different genres portray. She was fierce, bold and headstrong. At the same time she was caring for everyone around her and a perfect choice for VRS.

Uniqueness: 3.5/5

Yes, your ideas were unique. The crux of the stories and their plot background had much attractive power. So, good job.

Keep it up!

P.S. My favorite has to be Our Tested Live. Because the idea behind it and the mystery that lingered was phenomenal.

And extremely sorry for being this late.

Hope it helps~