(Oh my-that chapter title I can't even.I know it's probably meant to say Chapter Two The Rise of a Heroine WITH AN E,but the title seems to be saying that a chapter is being dedicated to the rose of heroin,which I guess mean heroin grows on a plant...Just,I don't even know right now.)

  ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry.

StarKit wock up and sunlit was in the branches. (In?) She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom (HER MOM IS BUTTER) wouldn't let her sleep not today.

"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. (So her eyes have shins now.) "Today is important today."

"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was.

"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice! (Please no.This cat is already annoying enough.)

She flicked (What?!Can a feline body even do that?!Or this meant to say 'frolicked'?) outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick. (Like a cot that people live in?)

"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use (Like they used to?) sometimes." She said.

StarKit glared. She didn't lake (Starkit is a lake now?) beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different! (Oh my god.You did not just say that.You literally couldn't be more different.You're mom has SC blood,you're dad is a med cat who ALSO broke the medicine code like his own mother *typical*,and you're saying that you're not different?!)

"StarPaw (But her ceremony hasn't happened yet) come here." Said FireStar from the leg. (He's on a Twoleg's leg.Typical kittypet behavior) He jumped down.

"StarKit (You called her StarPAW a second ago!) it s tome for you to become an apentice: (Yes Starkit.You must become an apentice) he said. "Your a strong brave cat (How do you know that Starkit will grow up to be strong and brave?In which case these are very Mary-Sue for her) and because of that I will mentor with you." (MARY SUE MARY SUE MARY SUE)

Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. (Shouldn't her name be changed?) Se herd hear mother say "Wow!". (What?!Why would you say 'wow'?!)

Firehert (Did Firestar get deprived of his nine lives?) liked her shoulder. (Firestar why do you like Starpaw's shoulder?) He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti." (So Firestar likes thai now.Either that or he's from Thailand)

Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her. (Werewolf shapeshifters)/ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod. (They were prodding each other?)

"Daughetr where very happy (Where are you happy?) but he (Who's he) have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."

StarPaw gasped. What does it mean? (Gee I don't know.Maybe that when a dark time comes,you'll kill/destroy the EEEEVIIILL Tigerstar and Hollyleaf. :/ But you know,it's just a guest)

lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk  (I will not review your grammar is terrible at this point now.Also just kill me with the frying pan.Beats reading this awful trash)