(Recluse? ._.)

"EVERONE FALLOW ME" meowled StarPleam as see charred for th3 entranse to eh camp.(She's in a B-B-Q contest to get to the entrance?) Tares stremmed down her face1 she wuss so sad her fahter had deid her leader was gunn. "FLAMEPAW LAKEPAW DUSTPELT MOM LOINBLAZE (Loin?) FALLOW ME." She said. "I NEDD A PAROL." (You seriously do need a parole)

The run into the frost (So it is leaf-bare) their pass working fastly. (They need a pass to get into the forest?Since when?!) She wood kill HolyLeaf and TigerSar for what thed don!

She batlecried (There's no fighting...) using his nose to tar down the evill cats. (Yes,guys.She used tar to destroy them) Her heat burneded!

Sune they had funded them. (She made enough money guys!The rec center is saved!)They were hidnig bwhind a bolder. (Something that was bolder?) "HAHAHAH" LAUGHED HOLylesf putting er claw on FiresTarS thort. "IVE GOT YOU KNOW!"

StarGleam gasped. (<----THERE IS NOTHING WRONG WITH THIS SENTENCE!)  "noooooo Fireheat!" (down+namegrade) she scemmed "FalmePawgo!" she said.(Flamepaw,I choose you!)

Flamepaw hurled at HolyLeaf. Hollyleaf laked at her in suprise. (So Hollyleaf has the power to shapeshift?) "What how could they have fallowd me." She dogged at Flamepaw her blue eys fallshig. (So the TC cats really DID learn how to act like dogs!)

"NO FLAMEPAW" whaled LakePaw (And Lakepaw's a whale) seing her sisters about too die. (Stargleam can't die.She's immortal I guess.) "I LOVE YOU FALMEPAW." She yowled jumping herself in front of HOlyLeaf.

HollyLaffs (Hollylaughs!What a great warrior name! :D) paw cutt into hir throt blood came out LakePaw felt down.

"NOOOO!1!11" StarPaw (downgrade) screamed. "FLAMEAPWWW!" She ran for HoltLeaf (What)but it wass no us. LakPaw was dyeing.(Wait...Hollyleaf's paw cut through Lakepaw's throat...shouldn't this cat be dead already?) "I lofe you StarGleam." (Was that meant to say 'loath'?Because if so,I don't blame her.Heck,Lakepaw is Stargleam's SISTER and she didn't even become a warrior at the same her sister did!Neither did Flamepaw!) She wisperd before er blue I's cosed.

"NO WAKE UP LAKEPOOL (upgrade)" shoited Stargleam (just why)-she was so sad and depersed she was cyring! (CATS.CAN'T.CRY!)

"hahaha" laughed HollyLeaf evil. "u just dunt gedot d o you Im one of teh Tree! I have pows beyound ur emaginating!" (But I thought you ended up NOT having powers...) nd then.... She turned in.... A BARE! (Wait...she's naked?Like,with no fur?)

"Gasped" gasped everyone. (Wow.Everyone LITERALLY said gasped.All logic is lost forever) It was a bare!

"IM A SHAPSHITTER!" siad Hollylea joyly.(Oh.My.StarClan.This line gets me every time.The author is literally implying that Hollyleaf's poop comes out in shapes *which is very disturbing*.)

"stargleam." Said FalmePaw cryingly. "I nedd to go back 2 the damp. I goat bury laekpaw. (A goat is going to bury Lakepaw?Also downgrade for the former Lakepool) Ive neverbeen out of camp (YOU'RE A FREAKING APPRENTICE!!DID YOUR MENTOR THAT WE HAVE NEVER HEARD OF NEVER TAKE YOU OUT OF CAMP BEFORE?!?!) before how do you get back!"

"U ju wak to te the est. said StarPaw." (Such solid instructions.Also downgrade)

Thaks said FlamePaw crying (cant cry) she piced (piced?) up the LakePaw and putter on her back and run.

"nut so fast!" said Holyleaf! "Your not gunna get away that easly!" Wit a rar like an volcano erection she jumped at StarGlaem! (What kind of sentence was that <-----)

Everone! Gasped! (Just why) "NOOOO." Yowled STarGleam as sumething lung and sarp pluned into her bk. "YOU CANT GET ME THAT EASLY."

Everyone jumped at the HoBare! (WHAT) The bare rared in pane! (A glass pane appeared out of nowhere!) Starepaw sent her teeth into its for. It rared. (So it's rare now)

"oak oka" HolyLeafthe bare said. "i no know Your not guna be bettin that esliay." Suddenly she was a cat1 then her body dropped her eyes went drka she was on the grund. Suddly ther wass howl from the other side of the froste. It was LaFlamePaw! (...Is it Lakepaw and Flamepaw's fusion?)

"LAKEPAW UR BACK!" (It's confirmed.It's Lakepaw.Or at least the zombie-version.) SHE SAD (Lakepaw is sad?I have a reason why... :/)

WHT SAID SPARGLAME. Thenshe locked. It was LakePool! (upgrade c:) She was runnin tord the forest (I thought they were already in the forest!) starGleam was so appy. Then she sawyer eyes.

.... (Couldn't you have put this with the sentence before?)

THEY WERE OLLYLEAFS! (Ollyleaf such a great warrior name)

the next chatter wil coke soon! (Either the author is saying the new chapter will choke soon *which it can't* or the next chapter will get a Coke I guess) AND STUP FLAMMING YOU HAETRS. (Haters gonna hate) YOU JUST DONT BELVE IN GOOD.  (I do believe in good,thank you very much.)