Mirage?Is that meant to marriage?

The nex mourni StarGleam (Is she still Stargleam or is she Gleamstar?) wock up and HawkForost was still sleppin next to her. She dint wnat to ake him so she letf he then and went to look for a bunch of ctas to go on parolt. (These poor cats don't deserve parole! D: )

"JazzSong RedPaw LakePaw FlamePelt (When did Flamepaw get her warrior name?Also,REDPAW IS DEAD AND SO IS LAKEPAW!!) your all goint on a parolel to the Windyclna broader." She said and then she went back to her den to wake HawkGorest (RUN FOREST) up she had to tell him sumthn.

"HawkFrost lets get marred." (You mean you disfigure your faces?Because that's what marred means XD Also,cats don't get married!They just become mates and that's it!) She cok him up and locked at him expacently as he blined his amber eys. (His eyes are ice blue T_T)

"Oh sweat that's a freat idea! (Translation:Oh sweat that's a fruit idea!) he said." Sould we talthe claN?"

"Yah thats whu I was wakcg you up." She left the den and HawkfOrst was folowig. "Let All Vats Older To Cath There On Pray Gather Hear Benth The High:edge For A Clan Mettin! (I have no idea what she said)

They all gathered even though Milloe was upset that BriadPaw had been hurt. (a/n i havent actually red Fading Eches yet but Ive heard that she gets hurt!1!1!1111") (When did Briarpaw get hurt in this story?)

"HawkFrost and I are getting mriaged!" yelld StarPaw (Double downgrade!You're too young now!) happ;y. Everone startwf crapping! (Yes,everyone.Got to the dirtplace and starting making dirt.) They were soooo happly for StarGstar (SHE IS FINALLY STARSTAR) they new she nedded a mat. (Like a welcome mat saying "Welcome to ThunderClan" or "Gleamstar's den"?)

"Do you knw what we shuld do?" called out BubPaw (Who's Bubpaw?) and StarGleam didn't want to listen to him because he was stpid (Wow.That's like not talking to zombie Redpaw and Lakepaw because they're "gay" as you call them. -.-) (a/n just look at his narem how culd he NOT be stupd!1?1) (You don't know that!He's most likely a lot smarter than you,you butthole!) but she was ledar so she decided to hurm him. (HURT HIM?) "What is ist BubmFlit" she esked lokoking at the he cat. (Male cats are called TOMS you moron.And also,it's BumbleSTRIPE,not Bumbleflight.)

"We should go annunce it at the Gathern!" he said and everony chered. They all aruged with him. (Wait...they cheered and then argued with him?) So the Thhner caln cats left for the Gatherin. (IS IT EVEN A FULL MOON??!?!?) But when they got there... they saw... BullStar was dead! (Bluestar has been dead since like,book 5 of the Original Series ._.) In his (Bluestar is she-cat) palsh was... FLAMESTAR! (Flamepelt became a leader?!I'M SO CONFUSED!!!!)