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Name:Slipstream

OMP ITS LIKE THE AUTOBOT(sorry.. TFRiD referenceXD)

Appearance: Grey short hair she cat, leg colouring go from light grey to grey, front left paw white, scar from left shoulder to half of her body, wears a orange collar with rips, red eyes and long tail

Why does she wear a collar? Is she a former kittypet?

Age: 45 moonsGender: She-catFamily Mother: Ivyfrost(deceased)Father: unknownSister(s): CinnamonBrother(s): noneRank: Warrior/ if not fighting she would help her sister with kits

Interesting! ^.^

Clan: Shadowclan

Cool!

Personality: she is very skilled fighter and well known for the amount of cats she killed. Protective, loyal, gentle with youngsters, aggressive to cats who bug her.

A little bit more description, please

Backstory: Slipstream was apart of her mothers clan along with her sister before a pack of stray dogs came and killed all the clan.

What clan did they belong to?

When both sisters found Tigerstar he agreed to take them in. During their time in the clan, Slipstream had successfully trained apprentices and Cinnamon watched the kits.

Is/was Cinnamon a kittypet? And I'm Assuming this newclan they joined is Shadowclan?

Slipstream mother had joined the Dark forest as she saw her mother in her sleep. Of course when Tigerstar had aloud stray cats by the name of Bloodclan in, the tom(Scourge)had found an interest in Slipstream as Bone found one in Cinnamon. When the battle against shadowclan and thunder clan, Slipstream had died while her sister escaped. When she joined the dark forest cats, her mother was waiting along with Tigerstar.

Why did Slipstream join the Dark Forest?

Slipstream still watched her sister until her death came.

Did Cinnamon Join Her sister in the Dark Forest?

Mate:none

Good:

I love Slipstream's name and color and Character and she  is a great  Start to an OC, and sounds very interesting!!

Bad:

Her back story is confusing.. Why did her entire former clan get killed by dogs? Only Slipstream and Cinnamon escaped? How? It needs a little more detail on how Slipstream lost her clan, and what happened to her mother.  Why did Slipstream and her mother and Cinnamon join the Dark Forest instead of Starclan? Please explain Bloodclan,  what happened in the battle between Thunderclan and Shadowclan? How did Slipstream die?There is no mention of herfatrher.. Even if an OC doesn't know about her father,  it should still include some things about him.  Her personality also needs some work, but otherwise good Job!

Overall: 6/10

I'm really sorry I had to give you this..   Slipstream is a great OC to start on, but she needs to be more developed.

Guys I'm so sorry that Slipstream and Suntail(Next chap) took so long to review!! :(