Belongs to: @panda7861

Name: Foxfire

Pretty name!!

Physical Description: A long-furred ginger she cat, she has white paws, chest, tail tip, and ear tips. Her right eye is green and her left is missing, there's is a scar down where he eye use to be and many more on her pelt. She has long legs, which help her reach in battle.

Yay! Another longhair! And good details!

 Age: 120 Moons (10 years) 

Good, older age! Most OCS usually have younger cats!

 Gender: She-cat 

 Family: Snowcloud (Mother, a light gray cat with white tuxedo ((the breed)) markings. Green eyes. Deceased from heart failure) Robinheart (Father, a pure ginger Tom, amber eyes. Died from old age) Redeye (Brother, White Tom with ginger splotches, amber eyes. Alive) 

I think it is good that you added how they died, and it makes sense with how Foxfire is an older cat, that her family is either deceased or old like herself(I'm assuming the brother is the same age as her)

Rank: Warrior, close to being an elder but refuses to retire.

Interesting!!

 Clan: I used her for an rp so she doesn't have a canon clan, the clan was JadeClan 

Cool!

 Personality: Sharp-tongued, Je, quick-witted, proud, enjoys having power despite not being a good leader, loyal as heck, doesn't get offended easily.

Personanilty is a little bit  too typical, and neefds a little more description. I like how she isn't offended easily!

 Backstory: When Foxfire was a kit, all she wanted to do was be a warrior. However, she didn't want to hunt and was always quite bad at it, she wanted to fight and defend with tooth and claw, as well as words. She always play fought with Redeye (Redkit) and became very good at it, she defended her Clan from attackers and intruders. Eventually when she was a warrior, she went on a patrol with Ryefoot (her mate) and Whitetail (a senior warrior) to chase out a badger. The succeeded but Ryefoot lost his life, Whitetail broke her leg, and Foxfire lost and eye. That's basically the important parts.

aww...poor Ryefoot, Foxfire and Whitetail :( 

 Mate: Ryefoot (A light brown tabby with yellow eyes,has a knicked ear. Deceased)

So........ Time for the rating!!

8.5/10

The good:

Good age, interesting backstory, and she looks like you put a lot of effort into her!! Her family sounds nice! Not like hpe a lot of people the family either all dies when she is a kit or abandons the kits. That's good! I also like how although the parents did die, you said how they died, and that makes a lot of sense considering how old Foxfire is.

The bad:

The personality and back do story need a little bit more description. Describe a little bit more on  her warriors ceremony, and a little bit more on the defending you mentioned, and maybe a little bit more on her kithood.

Overall:

I really tried to be harsh, but Foxfire was a really good Oc!! I tried my hardest to be harsh, and I really hoped this helps at all!!!! Remember, those are only suggestions. If you don't feel like the  suggestions are something needed, you DO NOT have to do it. I loved reviewing Foxfire!