Book review for GingerSnapCat25!

Jayfrost's Kindness

OK, first things first, the Prologue!
It was great, telling us a bit about Jayfrost's parents, and it broke our hearts when Tommy died! It was good how you introduced the names later, so the reader had to carry on to know who they are. The grammar was good, too ^-^

No Allegiances, so can't really review that :3

The rest of the book was amazing! There were cliffhangers which made us read on, and you kept the story interesting with the skirmishes!

I do think that the first chapter fit into the prologue more, though.

Pretty much no grammatical errors, though I do think the text could use some paragraphs, or a bit further apart if you did add them.

It is common to have the protagonists in ThunderClan, but usually they fight with ShadowClan, so it was good to see a change! But it would be interesting to see ThunderClan lose a battle.

It's cool that Jayfrost and Jayfeather have the same prefix, it's pretty unique and I haven't seen that in a book yet!

The plot wasn't very clear, and there wasn't a main problem, but that did also have it's up sides, as when you think everything was normal, bam! The Dark Forest comes in.

So obviously, the timeline was around the Po3 and OotS, and I think you handled it pretty well! You didn't mess up much, and I still went along with the original arcs, although you had your own plot! The ages were a bit muddled though, as Jayfeather became a medicine cat before Lionblaze and Hollyleaf became warriors, but that's just a minor error.

Overall, it's a great fanfiction! Plenty of drama that kept us reading! It was enjoyable, and I recommend it to others! :D

(I am in love with Jayfrost's name, BTW :3)

I find it hard to rate fanfictions out of ten, so imma just go for it's a pretty awesome book! :3